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Par excellence

I only switch to French when I am deeply moved by something, and that's what your poetry did to me. It was wonderful, c'est incroyable. You wrote that had me connecting with myself in ways that nobody ever has. Your poetry is amazing, tu est une bonne poète. You impressed me beyond words. I'm just speechless.

Dani's Choice

This was easily an enjoyable read. I actually got so caught up in the story, I forgot I was supposed to be judging it. Such an amazing story. I have to applaud you for having impeccable grammar throughout the story. The first chapter really set the pace for the story. The cover could use a little work though.

The Outside Club

This isn't your typical Inkitt story. For one the grammar is impeccable. And it feels like it was written by a professional, someone who actually studied the art of story writing and not just an amateur teenager. My on;y issue is the cover since it doesn't appeal to readers.

Nice

The story was interesting. I was a bit surprised when I got a paragraph and you were like the animals were telling her to leave. Nothing suggested that the story was fantastical. And it felt like a Moana spin-off with the rock part. It's a simple and easy enough to enjoy. With a little improvement on the grammar, it would be a far more enjoyable read.

Impeccable

I literally could not find anything wrong with this story.

Immature

So I have only read three chapters so maybe I don't have enough to judge by but so far, I don't really get the title. Other than that, I love the story. It's a simple sweet romance packed with powerful descriptions and relatable conversations. The grammar was technically correct but the paragraphs tended to lack flow. Overall an amazing story. Kudos!

Excellent piece

Loved the book. I never really expected it to be so good. I realised later rather than sooner the clever play involved in the title and it made me appreciate the story even more. I would definitely recommend this story to others. My only issue is the grammar. Only a few errors here and there but otherwise, this story is an excellent piece.

The Unnamed

I usually struggle to understand stories like this but in your case, the delivery was so seamless which made it amazing. Could use a little more dialogue on my opinion.

Stay Away

The first chapter and second chapter felt like they were written by two different people. And halfway through the third chapter, the pov changes from 1st person to 3rd without any warning. There were a few grammar errors. For example, you used cheek instead of check when they were mocking Mr Legolas.

Diary of a Gold Digger

I don't know if you've heard of or read Storm and Silence but this book gave me some serious Storm and Silence nostalgia. We are introduced ro a nameless main character who spends a seemingly exorbitant amount of money on a simple red and gold diary. It's interesting and I can't wait for more.

Werewolf Kingdom: Lost Princess

I'm not trying to discourage you or anything so don't be offended.

It feels like the author is cramming too many events into short chapters ro avoid providing any actual details on the events. I get that this is the past life of the MC so it may not seem so important but believe me when I say it is. The first chapter could have been divided into different longer parts that gave details of how everything happened. The whole incident where the princess was taken away by the rogues was poorly written. The whole thing had a juvenile air. None of the events were well described. This feels like the summary of a story rather than the actual writing of it. Also, the grammar is not impressive. I recommend Grammarly.

Thorns and Roses

This was a brilliant book. However, can I point out that the blurb is a little too long and detailed for my taste? I mean yeah it still has the element of surprise in it but I still think it's wordy. I'd advise the author to use more pronouns than nouns since the MC's name keeps reappearing. That usually helps readers like me who have short term memory remember the MC's name but in this case the author went a little too far. The characters have distinct personalities and I especially found myself relating to Katrina! She had that distinctive personality that definitely doesn’t go unnoticed, and the author did a really good job at presenting that! Character interactions seem realistic in accordance to the situation.

Wolfheart

On the surface it seems cliche but delving deeper I enjoyed the story.

The Project

You really have an amazing skill with writing, and know just how to
build tension at exactly the right moments; your cliffhangers at the
end of most chapters are perfect!
-Your grammar was spot-on all the way throughout the book.
-Writing a science-fiction story can be pretty challenging, but you handled it well.

A writer's collection of shorts and poems

I like it. Can't wait for more. 👍

Villa of Hills

So this is the first horror story I have ever read. I don't read horror because as painful as it is to admit, I'm a big ole scaredy-cat. But this story is interesting. I haven't read any other horror stories so I don't know the tropes of the genre but I am inclined to believe it's an original storyline.

There are a few grammar errors, not obvious ones but enough to turn off a reader.

Grammar aside, the chapters are a little too short for my taste and the characters are too simple. We haven't been given an idea of how Madison or her auntie looks.

Even though the first chapter is the end of her stay at the orphanage, it would have been nice to have a little insight into what it was like living in the orphanage.

And it's usually not advisable to have the main character introduce themself to the reader. Many readers see this as a sign of immature writing, myself included.
Instead, other characters should give hints to the nature of the main character.

And the paragraphs should be well spaced. Begin a new paragraph for each piece of dialogue and use dialogue tags to help readers ID the character who spoke.

Inkitt has page breaks which are more preferable to typing: "seven hours later". Also, all numbers in stories are supposed to be written as words, not in numerical form.

There's a lot of hope for this story, it just needs more work.

What Goes Around Comes Around

So the grammar wasn't the best and really disrupted the flow of the story. A cover with the title on it would be much better.

Imperfectly Perfect

The author has the right idea here but the delivery just fell a bit flat.

Just As You Are

So at first, I wondered why the story was categorized under 'other' but as I read the story, I realised it was the most appropriate genre. There was a lot of imagery and emotions employed in the story. The mixed povs made it difficult to understand the lack of pronoun use made me wonder about the characters' gender. Not really my cup of tea.

Choosing Destiny: The Chosen

Please remember to take my criticisms with a pinch of salt.

I feel like too much is happening at the beginning of the story. I can enjoyably read books with chapters that have as many as 10k words but for some reason, your chapters just never seemed to end even though I doubt they have 10k words. The blurb contains way too many details about the story. It's supposed to have a suspenseful air to encourage people to actually read the story but it seemed to give everything away.

From the very first chapter, we encounter Destiny, a girl who seems to love fun and is now facing an inevitable death as she's chased through the woods. Her interaction with her attacker was very bizarre to me. Because I don't think normal human beings instantly think of vampires when they're attacked by someone with 'super human' abilities. The dialogue between them felt unnatural and forced.

In the second chapter, Destiny wakes up and relives the past, how she lost her parents, her abusive ex-boyfriend. Nothing suggested that all those events took place in the past. And the part about her ever encountering Justin again suggested that several years had passed and she was now in a higher level of education with him nowhere near. It was a rude shock to see that same ex-boyfriend appear in the chapter then.

I also found it very strange that she decided to kill so many people after waving up. Vampires are usually described as brilliant creatures, so why did Destiny act so irrationally? And if her current boyfriend really was part of Justin's group of friends that she met on the road, shouldn't he have attempted direct communication with Destiny?

I only read two chapters but there were a lot of inconsistencies in the story. I'm sorry but it just doesn't feel right.

Ditch

Ditch is an interesting story. I know that's lame and generic but there isn't much else to say. The author has a unique writing style that cucks readers into the story. I didn't see much going on plotwise but I only read five chapters so that could factor in. I did notice two grammar errors in the last chapter I read. The text that was italicized was inadequately spaced so it affected legibility. Other than that, it's a great story.

Luna

The story is okay from where I read up to. It has several cliche elements but also enough twists to keep me awake while reading. Grammar could use a little work but otherwise not bad.

The Places From Where We Come

The story is good with little to no errors. However, I would advise that you begin new paragraphs for each bit of dialogue to enhance readability.

Great

The book was fantastic! Descriptions were vivid and I felt present in the scenes. To improve, I recommend varying sentence length. There were many long sentences and I felt that the writing needed a break from that every once in a while. Another thing I noted was the dialogue. I think the author did a good job at presenting the characters on the whole, but there was something missing in the dialogue. I felt it was pretty bland and didn’t flow as well as it could’ve. Character interactions could definitely have been improved. Despite this, it was still a fantastic plot filled with creativity. The plot was fun and I enjoyed reading it! I would like to add that the title is so stunning and creative!

Adequate

Please don't get offended by what you are about to read.

So far other than the fact that the MC is from India, I can't find anything original with this story. The characters are bland and have cliche written all over their dialogue. It's like every other romance novel and the worst part is that the grammar isn't even good. The paragraphs are choppy and the sentences end awkwardly. I get that you might not be a native English speaker but that only means you should try harder with the grammar. I recommend Grammarly for your grammar issues. There's little you can really do about the originality of the plot unless you rewrite but that's not my call to make. It's an adequate attempt and I look forward to witnessing an improvement in the quality of writing.

Excellent

The story is great. I didn't like the blurb or the prologue but I enjoyed the story. I was surprised when I liked it because I thought it would be another boring cliche. But there was just something uniquely interesting about this story. It had a juvenile vibe (in a good way) and there were at least three mistakes in each chapter (grammar-wise) nothing that a minor SPaG edit can't fix. All in all a great story. Loved it!

More room for improvement

This story needs a SPaG edit. I couldn't follow the storyline because of the bad grammar, it really got in the way of the story. Also reading the blurb and reading the story, it's like they were written by two completely different people. The chapters are packed with a lot of details but the lack of punctuation makes it hard to follow. Too much is happening in the story at the same time and it feels like the ideas are poorly organised. I'd recommend Grammarly for the grammar issues and the technical bits. Slow down a bit, you're telling a story, you need to let it flow not flood.

Interesting

I loved how every poem in the book was relatable, raw and honest. Everything about this book was great. It was so good, so descriptive and yet cryptic. Keep up the good work!

Wow

I don't know how such a great story could have escaped my eye for so long. I didn't like the introduction because it was more of a character description chapter and only a few lines were spent on Mark although I'm guessing he's the deuteragonist. The story is amazing from what I've read and while the plot is not entirely original, I like how the writer is twisting the tried and true storyline. Mark seems amazing so far. Keep up the good work.

Have Once Been Heartbroken

I realise that most of the Inkitt authors don't review their own books and truthfully, I don't see why they shouldn't. Unless there's a rule against it I'm unaware of, I'm allowed to express my opinion on my own story. This is supposed to be the first book in what I intended to be a four-book series. I've already begun book two, the story of Kira. I think this is a good book. I deserve more readers and positive reviews.

Okay

Considering this is just the retelling of a most cliche but wholesome plot, this story overall is not bad.

Good work!

I don't much see the appeal of books about horses but the cover of yours intrigued me which is why I gave the story a chance. I ended up actually liking the story. The description was powerful and on point. It's a great story! Keep up the good work!

Exquisite

I don't have much experience with psychological pain and trauma but the way your wrote your poems got me to feel that. The emotions in your work are so raw and powerful. Its glorious! Magnificent actually. I loved every single bit of it.

Excellent

I like this. It feels like something written by an experience professional. Clearly, a lot of research went into the making of this novel and you have my deepest respect. I'll keep my eye out for more from you.

Amazing

Even though I deeply enjoy writing poetry, I consider reading it such a pain. That is why I was surprised when I read the first poem in your book and found myself wanting more. I hardly ever read someone else's poetry, but yours was so good I just HAD TO. I can only describe it with the word Amazing. It truly was some of the best poetry I ever read. Looking forward to more from you!

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Eh

I never imagined I'd spend three hours straight just so I could finish an undercover spy romance book. It's a hackneyed plot but for some reason, this story was more captivating than the others. The idea of them falling in love happened all too quickly, and even though I loved Lexi's character, I honestly can't understand why Max fell in love with her so esily. And that ending bit seemed like something in a fairy tale. I'd say this is a soft seven out of ten.

Peyton

Peyton is an interesting story about a woman dealing with the effects of a breakup after being committed to the saw man fit several years. The author has a lot of ideas but just isn't expressing them right. The story idea is great, but the delivery is just off. I'm sure it can be improved.

The Wrong Train

I couldn't follow the trend of the story. The grammar was technically correct but it just didn't flow. The story felt like different patches of events forced together so it made it hard to appreciate the plot. I won't say it was terrible but much work needs to be done to improve the clarity and legibility of the story.