Abygail B. Jennings

Girls That Break Hearts

This story is about Whitney, who experienced a severe bullying incident in elementary school. It resulted in the family moving to a different state. With the move came a completely different Whitney. She changed the way she ate to her look, climbing to the top of the popularity scale. Then a new neighbor sees right through her, saying she is "Fake." Now all she has to do is realize it's true.

The grammar was the biggest issue for me. The author had some issues with the subject and verb agreement. I also don't understand how this is in the humor category.

The plot is the best part. Kids changing themselves for the purpose of impressing others is a problem that is way too common, and it has been for longer than people seem to want to admit. I'm glad to read a story that touches on that.

Very Creative

This is a very creative and descriptive story that any Sci_Fi or Fantasy lover will become addicted to.
The description is very well detailed and it gives the author a vivid mental picture.
I love how the story went from the city of Atlantis to a castle with dragons.
I recommend this to all Sci_Fi and Fantasy lovers.

Very Addictive

The story is brought together really well.
The main character's personality is very different from the other characters. The author did very well at giving each character their own personality.
There were the occasional grammar slips but other than that, this is a great read and I recommend it to any fantasy lover.

So much better than I expected

Living with the Avengers is an amazing story and will pull you in right from the start. I only counted two or three spelling errors throughout the entire thing. The reader gets to be pulled in to moments that will make you laugh, cry, punch a wall, and scream in your pillow. So what if it is a fan fiction? A good story is a good story.

Ps. The best characters were Thor and Hawkeye.

Spirit of Fire

Reading this, I could tell that a lot of effort was put into this story. I think one of the highlights of the book is the descriptions. They are very vivid and clear.
The characters all had had their own personality and having their elemental ability effect that was a nice touch. I think the author did well at making sure the characters they wanted to be likable, likable, and vise versa. The only thing that I would suggest being done differently is to make the chapters a little shorter.
This was an overall great read. I recommend it and will be returning to it when I get more spare time.

A Love Which Was Never Meant To Be

I liked the whole idea of a girl telling a past story to her ex-lover. I don't think I've ever read a book with that concept which shows originality.

However, I did find things a little confusing. An example would be in the first few chapters where our main character starts the story outside, then the next time we go back to them, they are in the living room. I also noticed different grammatical errors that went from misspelled words to words that weren't used properly. I also noticed repetitiveness in the first few chapters, but that slowly started to go away the farther I went.

Overall, I think that with some good editing that this book will have a lot of potentials and will be liked by many. Keep writing.

The Arcane Order

This book is very unique and well thought out. The whole concept of a turtle, sorry, tortoise taking a boy to Africa to fulfill some destiny is a very creative idea.
I did see some issues with repetitiveness (I have this problem too) in the first few chapters but as the story went on the writing improved.
Overall, I enjoyed this read and look forward to reading more!

Dark

The story was very well thought out. The author definitely put a lot of work into this book. I would work on fixing the grammatical errors but this is a good book overall.

Enjoyable Sci-Fi

I really enjoyed reading this. I love the genre of Sci-Fi more than anything else. Though the book takes place in the same world as a video game, the author made sure that the story was understood by everyone, including those who had never played the game. I recommend this story to any Sci-Fi fan.

Great Book

The story seemed to be moving too fast at first, but as the chapters moved on, the writing improved. This is a good read for any fantasy lover. Keep writing. 😃

Not what I expected

When reading what this story was about, I was expecting it to be a story of someone trying to survive the Zombie Apocalypse. This was so much more than that. The author put in news articles that talked about a 'disease.' He also added government meetings and law changes along with journals kept by scientists .and average civilians.
The only grammatical error that I noticed was in a chapter where the nations leaders had a meeting. The author missed some words. Other than that, this is a great story and I am intrigued by it.
Keep writing.

Interesting start

The author had a good start to her story but there were some elements that could have been fixed. She used the word 'said' multiple times an example would be:

What the author put: "Thank you." She said

Instead of: 'Thank you!' She exclaimed happily.

This is something that can be easily fixed with some editing.

Another thing that I would like to cover is how she divided her paragraphs. Sometimes readers understand things easier when the paragraphs are spread apart. I would suggest asking someone to proofread your story before posting it out.

Very Creative

The authors writing style is very unique. She writes it in such a way that the reader is also a character in the story. I found it very interesting when the main character would try to communicate with the reader (Myself) and would ask for an opinion.
There were a few errors such as missing words and misused words. Other than that, this was a very interesting story.
The last thing that I want to be sure to mention is how eight chapters of the book all took place in one room and the author still kept me engaged. I can see how that would be difficult to do and I admire the author for it. I suggest this story to anyone who enjoys Sci-Fi.

Gripping

This book was very well written and the author was very good at giving his readers a clear mental picture. Some paragraphs seemed to be in strange places but other than that, the grammar was on point. Overall, this is a great read.

Not what I expected

When I read the summary I just expected the average love story. This was not your average love story. There seemed to be hints of fantasy and Sci-Fi in the book. It seemed to take place in an end of the world setting. I did think that it was strange how one moment Jo was running out of his apartment and the next minute, he was with a group of looters and the end of the world all happened in two minutes. I think that if the author went into more detail about why they were looting stores and why there were children crying on the street that this could be a good book. I also noticed strange grammatical errors and I am suspecting that English is not the authors first language.

Interesting

This book seems like it has real potential. I did find it confusing how the author jumped from person to person and switched the point of view from first to third person. I would suggest adding a heading with the name of which character the point of view is told in. It does seem like an interesting novel that will attract more readers.

Awesome

Daryl and Carol are an awesome walking dead duo. This book was great at capturing Carol’s emotion. Thank you for writing this.

Awesome

This novel is nothing like anything that I have read before. It is amazing. I hope the author is working on the sequel. I can’t wait.

Depressing but good

I love to see a type of future for Katniss and Gale, but it is sad to know that Gale lived his whole life in regret for something that he was forgiven for. This is a touching story and I thank the creator for making it.

Good but not great.

This was a good book but the spelling errors were everywhere. This was a good book with a good ending. Something to change would be the age group this book is for. I personally would let a thirteen year old read this.