Akaluv

Read it!

This book is for you if you’re a horror fan, especially Stephen King or Neil Gaiman stories! This writer is excellent at capturing everyday life and weaving in scary and foreshadowing events that will leave you wondering what will happen next. The characters actually feel like real people! This story is a rare horror gem that deserves more attention.

Cute and Unpredictable

When I first read this story, I wasn't sure what I was in for. The writer does a great job bringing you into a character's head and making you feel something for them. I don't want to put spoilers in the review, but the writer is great at plot twists!

The spelling, grammar, and sentence structure are nearly perfect, so this is an easy read.

If you're looking for a light-hearted alien romance story with a few twists and turns, I recommend this book!

Sweet Alien Romance

As I was making my way around Inkitt, I was looking for a new alien romance story to read when I came across this book. At first, it was hard for me to get into the story, but after about three chapters in, you kind of get what's going on.

This review is more of my personal taste than the writer's writing, but eventually, I found the story too boring to keep me interested. Another problem was I just didn't care what happened to the characters since the stakes weren't that high. It felt like a predictable HEA ending was coming, and I wanted some more mystery about what the MC would decide to do and the true intentions of the male MC, but things were moving in the classic "mate" story way.

As I mentioned, I felt this is my own issue, not the writer's doing at all. This story comes off as a very sweet, safe alien romance, and if that's what you're looking for, then this is perfect for you. My own taste is a little more adult, suspenseful, higher stakes, and darker, so I don't think this story is for me, but I wanted to rate the writer fairly on the chapters I had read.

The writer did a great job bringing the reader into the setting of the alien ship and world. Some things did seem too fast paced, but the overall flow was smooth. The character development was good, and I couldn't find too many mistakes in the writing.

The descriptions were excellent, and I truly felt the writer showed us the world rather than telling us.

I do wish this story was more to my taste so I could finish the whole thing, but I accepted it just isn't for me.

Again, this story comes off as super safe, so it's perfect for easily triggered readers or readers who are worried about "problematic" content.

Quick Romantic Read

If you're looking for a quick read about an alien romance, then this is the story for you. The story flowed well, and like most novella-type stories, the plot was straightforward and to the point, leaving time for romantic fluff without a complicated plot. However, note that this story is written in second person, where you, the reader, are supposed to be the main character. Even if you're not into you-based stories, I still suggest giving this story a read.

Since this story is short, there isn't much character development between the two characters aside from the romance, but it was still an enjoyable story.

Horror Creature Feature

As a loyal reader and watcher of all things horror, this story was great! It really had the '80s creature feature vide. The premise was simple and easy to follow, and the scary scenes really freaked me out. Since this was more on the short story side, I won't comment on the character development, but I felt the plot was well done.

There were a few grammar and syntax errors, but it's nothing a good edit can't fix.

Awesome job! And if you like horror stories, read this writer's work!

Mystery in the Woods

The story is still ongoing, but so far, I’ve read all the available chapters. The one thing I really liked about this writer’s story was the mystery around the woods. This story comes off as horror, but the horror elements are pretty minimal, especially compared to more mainstream horror that’s about demons and ghosts. However, it isn’t a bad thing since the main characters are kids. As I was reading the story, it reminded me of middle-grade fiction, so if that’s what the writer was going for, then great job!

As for feedback, I do wish the writer showed more of the “regular” world before the kids entered the woods. Showing more of the world will help with showing the time period and building the world. Since the main point of the story is the forest, there should be more detailed descriptions of the woods. That way, it will add more fear to the story. Also, the writing was decent, but there were a few grammar and punctuation errors. The story has a lot of potential, so I'm excited to see where it goes.

Interesting Beginnings

So far, the writer only has two chapters posted, so it's still early in the story; however, the writer starts the story off in an interesting way. I'm not sure if the first chapter is a first chapter or a prologue, but the opening felt more like a prologue than a first chapter, so to the writer, you may want to work on transitioning the tone between the two chapters. The writing was good, with only a little grammar and punctuation issues. If you're looking for an interesting fantasy read about dolls, this is a good story to check out.

High Fantasy

First, I must say this writer's ability to put words together is fantastic! The writing flows smoothly, with little to no mistakes. The vocabulary is diverse, and the words barely repeat in the same paragraph. The worldbuilding is great, as you get a clear image of what's happening around the characters.

My only feedback at this time (as I'm still reading the story) is that the story is slow to start. We get great imagery with the words, but after almost seven chapters in, we still don't know what the main threat or problem is in the world. For example, what is Meya's purpose? Of course, high fantasy stories tend to build up the world and characters a bit before the main plot happens, so if that's what the writer is going for, then please ignore this feedback. I do plan to keep reading Meya's story so that I can find out what happens to her.

Teenage Horror Story

First, I'm a huge horror fan, and I write horror myself, so I'm always searching for a good horror story.

To start, I'll mention what I enjoyed and then what I feel needs improvement. The setting of the story was engaging, and most readers can connect with the "school" setting. Since this was a short story, I felt the characters were fine because we don't need to know too much about them. The build-up and mystery were good; we know the MC is exploring something she shouldn't, like the Dark Web, so that already gets readers interested in the story. However, the plot twist doesn't make much sense and encourages the readers to ask additional questions, for example, if that was her best friend, why would she try to kill her? Also, the writing needs some work, such as missing commas and spelling errors.

Overall, though, the story was engaging and kept my interest the whole time.

Slice of Life Romance

Since there is a lot to mention here, I'm going to list the positives first and then some areas for improvement.

Positives:
Interesting characters - Your main characters, the female MC, male MC, and the best friend, are fleshed out well. The reader can get a good grasp of the different characters and their personalities.
Romance plot - The tension between the two main characters is good, as the reader can see the issues between them, and you have some balanced scenes that show their chemistry together.

Improvements:
Pacing - So far, the story is too fast-paced. In the first chapter, we are shown many characters, so it's a little hard to keep up with everyone. And instead of jumping right into sexy time, have a little bit of build-up before the story's trigger.
Show, don't tell - The writing is more telling than showing. For example, in the first chapter, the MC basically tells the reader their backstory. Rather than info dump the information, try to show it through dialogue and actions.
Character development - We are supposed to follow the MC, but the MC doesn't seem to have any goals or thoughts outside of the love interest. For example, does the MC have any plans for the future? What does she strive for? Does she want to travel, have a family, etc.? Also, we don't get any of her thoughts, just her telling us everything that is happening. In first person, the reader should be inside the character's head, so we need to know what they are thinking.
Writing - Some commas are missing, and there are a few run-on sentences; however, these issues can easily be fixed with some editing. Also, you had some word echoes, but again, a simple edit can catch those repeated words.

Overall, the story was enjoyable to read, as I liked the growing relationship between the two leads, but I feel the story needs some fleshing out. Try to expand the MC outside of the love interest and his family. I know you had the chapter about the MC's brother, but is there more to her family? Maybe explain why the MC's brother spoils her, etc.

Truly Unique

I'm still in the process of reading this story, but the author has created a truly unique premise with the guardian angels and the setting of the story. Not many authors dare to write a story during the period of American slavery so I applaud this author for taking this risk with their work.

The writing is smooth, captivating, and simply beautiful. I recommend this book to anyone looking for something different than the typical werewolf or sex stories. Each character in this story is shown so well, from their thoughts to their goals and interactions with others.

My only warning is, there are multiple POVs every chapter, so it may be hard to follow at first.

Kudos to the writer!

Read this!

I know it's super early for a review, but the beginning of this story pulled me in right away. As usual, the writer has sucked us into the world with beautiful-crafted words and fantastic dialogue. The writer made us hate the villain right away, not just by how he treated his own family but also by how he views women, which is so gross. I want Maria to take her asshole of a father down, and I can't wait to see what the writer has in store for us.

A Fun Read

I actually finished this book on Amazon, but I enjoyed the story so I wanted to leave a good rating here, too. For me, this book was 4 stars.

The writer did a great job showing the alien world and the differences between the aliens and humans. While I do think some chapters had way too much sex and the overall plot was lacking, the final few chapters were fun to read.

I loved the writer's writing style and use of imagery. Great job, and kudos to you writer for creating such an interesting alien/monster/human romance story.

I'll be sure to keep supporting your work.

Female Power Fantasy

I'm going to try and rate the writer fairly on this work. So, this alien romance story was just way too perfect. If that's what the writer was going for, then she succeeded. There was basically no plot to this story but for sex, sex, and more sex, which I know many readers like that, but I was hoping for just a little bit more.

There were no stakes for the characters or an exciting twist. The main characters didn't grow or change, at all. If that's what you're looking for in your erotica, then this story is perfect for you, just like how everything in the story is perfect for the women.

As for the writing, there were a few mistakes here and there, but it didn't take away from the story. I do wish the writer would have cut down on the repeated words and used more sensory language during the sex, but it wasn't too bad.

If you want a quick, kinky alien read with no high stakes and problematic content, then this is the story for you.

Insulting to Black Women

As a Black woman, I'm always looking for new reads that feature Black female leads, but this story wasn't it. This story felt highly insulting to Black women everywhere, unless maybe they really acted like this.

I don't, for one second, every talk like the women did in this book. As for the issues with the Korean family, they just weren't realistic.

The writing was subpar, and I couldn't tell if the writer was actually serious about this work or was writing this to stereotype Black people.

I guess the writer was trying to bring awareness about the relationships between Blacks and Asians, but the story came up short, real short.

Twisted

I've read stories from this writer before, and unfortunately, she is one of the only writers on Inkitt that truly delivers dark and twisted romance stories. I appreciate how this writer goes beyond people's comfort zone and doesn't write the cliche HEA.

With that being said, this writer does need to work on improving her grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure. It's obvious that most of her stories are first drafts, which is fine, but it's always good to go back and edit what you've already published from time-to-time.

This writer also uses the same plot devices with her stories, which is usually the female MC is kidnapped by some messed up guy. And this story is no different.

So, if you're looking for a quick twisted read, then check this story out. Note that the full version is only available on Amazon and the sample is posted on Inkitt.

Really Unique!

When I first started reading this book, I expected the classic terrible written online story with bad sex scenes and a nonsensical plot, so I was pleasantly surprised when that didn't happen.

If you're reader who has a monster/fantasy kink, then this story will be sure to entertain you. Unfortunately, though, the technical writing needs some work, but you can still understand the story.

My recommendation to the author is to edit the story for grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure. Once the story gets a face-lift, I can see this being a fantastic kinky hit. Thanks for sharing this unique story with the world. I loved the ending and thought it was very sweet.

Nice quick read!

This story was a quick, naughty read if you're looking for a decent alien romance on Inkitt. Based on this author's profile, they are experienced with the written word and it shows in the story.

I didn't spot many mistakes, and the dialogue and plot flowed very well.

No complaints, great story, and I enjoyed the journey with the two leads. However, I did feel that the stakes were really low, especially since it was obvious the two main characters could be together, and the only obstacle in their way wasn't really an obstacle at all.

I encourage other readers to check this story out.

Slow Burn

I've read all the chapters the writer has posted so far, so my feedback is based on the first few chapters. For my reviews, I list out what I've enjoyed and then what can be improved on.

First, I liked the dialogue and setting. With the dialogue and setting, the reader gets a clear view of the time period. Also, with erotica, you should focus on building to the big moment, and the writer is doing a good job with that. As for improvements, consider adding more descriptions and sensory imagery to the chapters. For example, when the MC is dealing with the robber, does he smell like anything? What is his touch like? With erotica, the writing is based on the readers' senses, so add more of those details into the story.

Since this seems to be a quick, steamy story, I won't get into character development, but I do like the little hints about the personalities of each character.

Also, I noticed numerous grammar mistakes; however, those errors are something a good edit can fix. Keep on writing!

A Different Read

I found this story while I was looking for something new to read. I liked how it didn't fit the Inkitt-cliched-romance stories about werewolves and vampires. The opening to the story was interesting, as it gave some good background about the main character. I also enjoyed how, when the MC was chosen to be the bride, that she wasn't instantly taken away; however, a few things need some more clarification. Also, instead of posting spoilers here, I left my feedback for the writer in the comment section of the story.

As for improvements to the story, I think the writer should focus on the character development of the MC. For example, how is the MC supposed to grow and change, and what are her flaws? As I was reading the story, I didn't sense much from the MC aside from she's hurt and hates her groom. In addition, the grammar wasn't too bad, and there were some errors, but it's nothing a good edit can't fix.

Overall, though, the writer has the good meat of the story, but it needs some fleshing out.

Not That Great

As a new writer on Inkitt, I was curious to read some of the popular stories on here, and I know this writer’s work is popular, but I honestly didn’t enjoy this story. The abuse aspect didn’t bother me so much, but it was more the plot and character development. You don’t have to show all of your characters grow and change, but your main character should always show growth throughout the story. However, in this case, the main female character, Hayden, didn’t change at all. In the end, she lacked character and development, and she was basically the male character’s submissive pet. One could argue Hayden was trying to protect her brother, but her brother already proved he didn’t care about her and had his own issues to deal with.

To sum it up, Hayden was a Mary Sue character whom all the males loved, and the male character was just a jerk that showed no signs of caring about anyone but himself. When he “confessed” to Hayden, it came off shallow and more wish fulfillment for the readers; basically, it wasn’t a believable confession. Also, just showing the passage of time without any interactions doesn’t show believable growth. The story had some promise, but it fell short in the end.

Good Fantasy Read

Even though this story isn't my cup of tea, so far, it seems like a good fantasy read. The writer has a strong voice, and her characters feel like real people instead of tropes. The writer also has a good vocabulary and a knack for descriptions, which I find rare for online manuscripts. There are a few grammar errors, but it's nothing a good edit can't solve. Awesome job!

The After Effects

I don't usually read stories like this, but I decided to give it a chance. The writer does a good job with the worldbuilding, as you catch glimpses of what's going on through the main character's perspective. Honestly, reading this reminded me of Stephen King's The Gunslinger because we can tell it's a human world, but as readers, we don't know what's truly happening. I do think that the writer should reveal more about the main character because just in the first few chapters, we don't know much about her, and it's hard to root for a character that you don't know anything about.

Also, while the worldbuilding is indeed interesting, the story is slow to start and doesn't reel me in. The writer has a good writing style, with only a few errors.

If you're looking for a story that is different from the usual cliches you find online, then this is a good read.

Young Adult Mer Story

In this review, I'm going to be honest. As I was reading the writer's story, I knew this book wasn't for me. However, that doesn't take away from the writer's amazing ability to write beautiful prose. The writer's descriptions were amazing, and you could tell she did a lot of research for her story.

Personally, for me, I don't connect with characters that giggle and act like their pre-teens to teenagers, so I accept that I may not be this writer's target audience.

The writer does a great job of showing the character's life and world. There were barely any mistakes in the writing, and her writing was smooth. It takes a while to get to the main plot, but I'm sure that's because the writer was trying to show the MC's everyday life first. I was a little confused by the setting of the story because modern-day stories were mentioned, like The Little Mermaid, but the character's acted as if they live in a different time period. For example, if the MC is supposed to be a young girl, wouldn't she be on the internet or communicating with her friends through a video call?

I feel like the ideal age range for this book is pre-teens to young adults, and it's a story they'll enjoy diving into (no pun intended).

Emotional Read

I'm picky when it comes to stories, so it's hard for me to find something that I really enjoy, and honestly, I enjoyed the start of this story.

The writer does a great job of pulling the reader into the character's suffering and emotions. Also, the descriptions of the surroundings were really good. I also like the fact that you're building up the character and showing us his world and life first before diving into the main plot.

The only real issue I had was with the worldbuilding, as it's hard to understand what kind of world the main character lives in. If the main character is royalty, then why is he going to school like normal children? I would think the children of royal blood would have private schooling or a tutor. Also, there were some grammar and spelling errors, but it's nothing a simple edit can't fix.

Overall, I enjoyed this story, and I'm looking forward to reading more about Kaspar.

Beautiful Sadness

The poems were lovely, and since I prefer sad and dark emotions, I connected with the writer's words. Many of the poems were about pain, rejection, and loss, and since these are common issues most people deal with, it's easy to understand where the writer was coming from.

I don't have much feedback aside from a few spacing, spelling, and missing word issues, but everything else was wonderful!

Boring

I went into this story hoping to find an interesting alien romance, but instead, I was met with a predictable survival in the wild story, which has been done many times before. While Kora's story could have been entertaining and engaging, the "alien" world lacked details and scenery that made it feel different from Earth.

The writing also needs a lot of work. There were missing capitalization and commas, and the text had many fragmented sentences. The story was sometimes hard to read with all the grammar errors. One of my suggestions to the writer is to edit the story to improve the flow and beef up the vocabulary. Take more time to show us the world than just tell us what's happening around the character. Use more of the senses. For example, how do things smell, feel, and sound.

Ultimately, this story wasn't for me.