Needs a bit of improvement
I like the author's writing style because her grammar and punctuation are really good. However, what frustrated me the most was the fact that her narration in certain scenarios is quite short.
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Always remember to 'show' your readers rather than just 'telling' them.
Another small point that bothered me was the fast pace. The story feels really fast-paced in some parts. You might want to think about just editing it a bit.
Lastly, I wish the character would be a bit more developed because it surprised me how easily the female protagonist gave in to the male protagonist who actually killed her parents. Mate bond or not, I expected her to process her emotions for a bit longer.
But then again, I've read up to chapter 10 so far. I'm pretty sure the characters would develop by then.
Until that happens, I wish the writer the best of luck because I know that she's really talented!