Ben Burns

(Remind me to write one later)

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A Good Read

I found the pace and excitement of the plot, a bit lacking. The characters however, and world building is remarkable and kept me engaged enough to turn the pages to this point. Your writing style is one of the uniquest I have come across, and at times leaves me in awe.

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A First Draft

Your Narrative, however witty at times and dark at some is still a bit lacking. the same can be said about your dialogue, it doesn't make me care for the protagonist in general, she looks and feels like a puppet on strings except for times when you really do allow yourself to ramble on with the dark narrative. The plot is really taking it's time to unfold and there us a distinct lack of attachments to anything otjer than the protagonist herself. At best, I believe this is your first draft and not noteworthy enough.

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