Hi. What I'm about to tell you is constructive criticism, so, here goes. First, what do you mean 'Your POV?' I'm taking it as Your Point of View. What is the protagonist's name? If you're using foreign words then tell us what it means, for example, this is part of a sentence in my story, '--my father's motto, proteggere la nostra famiglia, protect our family.' Bold words mean you're yelling, try to stay away from that. Is your punctuation a different style from the English punctuation? If not, I'd suggest purchasing a book on grammar or look online. I'm not an editor nor a pro on writing. I have books galore on writing, took online classes, listened to famous authors on youtube and read and studied romance novels. I'm still learning too. You can also look into purchasing Grammarly, Auto Crit, or Pro Writing Aid. They check your grammar, punctuation, repetitive words, cliches, etc. They are pricey but it is another tool to help your writing. Grammarly is correcting this comment. So, go for it. Study the 'how to' books, read, keep writing, and your story will blossom. I'll follow you and see what's gonna happen next in your story. If you wanna critique me, it's Help Me Find Me.
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