C.T.Jones

Incredible!!

What an incredible piece of writing. The flow of the thoughts and the insight that is given to the character is so strong and compelling that it keeps people reading. It truly captures the way that a single event can change someone’s outlook on life.

You should be incredibly proud of your writing. Very well done!!

Amazing and extreme Sci-Fi

This is an incredible take on the sci-fi genre and has a great premise to it. The overall plot is compelling and has amazing potential. It’s definitely a great spin on science fiction and it shows that the author has put a lot of thought into the story.

I found that there were a lot of terms being used very close together which didn’t allow me to really grasp what each one was before another was introduced. This made sections hard to read and focus on because I wasn’t fully sure what they were.

Apart from that, and the inclusion of gods within it, made for a very interesting read 😁

Flame in the Palace

I’m loving the story so far. Every interaction between the characters, how the story flows incredibly well; it all comes together brilliantly. Will definitely be waiting for updates! Keep it up! :D

Twists turns and a whole lot of drama

This book had so many twists and turns that I had to read it all the way through. There was so much emotion and drama that it just span a web of interest for me. The author gives life to the characters in a very vivid way!

My moan thoughts were that there were a lot of jumps between the chapters where a lot more story could have been told for building the relationships between the characters and really setting the motives for each character.

I kept reading through the final chapters as there were so many twists that I needed to know what happened! Very well done! 😁

Amazing storytelling

So that was not the way I expected this story to go! You have an incredible way of story telling and building suspense before just dropping a huge twist in there.

Just a couple of pointers on the structure of your sentences and ideas. There are times when you have used multiple ideas in one sentence without punctuation which can cause it not to flow as smoothly as you’d like. For example, there is a section where you started to speak of another idea halfway through a sentence and that made it somewhat choppy. It’s minor things like that which would bump the story up greatly.

Also, be careful with your paragraphing and what you include all at once. There are contrasting focuses on one paragraph. Your starting paragraph could be split further because of the different focuses in there.

Hope this helps!

Other than those however, I really enjoyed this. It’s gripping and suspenseful and I loved the twist in the end. Very well done!

Very Intriguing!

I love you ability to write interesting characters and the interactions between them, they were great. The serial killer is especially intriguing and you have written them to be that extra psychotic whilst maintaining a solid base for them.
Personally, I would prefer more description of the characters and how they interact the world around them too. For example, I wasn't fully sure of what Elise or Dexter looked like and struggled to picture them in my mind during the character interactions.
You have a very compelling story and I am looking forward to reading more! :D

Gripping storytelling!

Very gripping plot and interesting characters! I’m left with questions I want to get the answers to and want to know what happens later.

There were few grammatical errors that were minor but never took away from the story itself.

Great start! I want more!