Great style, great idea, a little confusing story.
The style is great and the plot is promising. For me, it was a bit fast with too many new things introduced too quickly. This might not be an issue for people who like fast-paced stories. Also, if most of this stuff gets explained as the story progresses, then I think that it will be all right.
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Regarding punctuation, I would pay a little more attention to commas and maybe reduce the usage of "...". I would suggest using beta readers like Grammarly or Language Tool to correct possible punctuation or grammar mistakes. On the other hand, your knowledge of the English language is very good.
The dialogue seemed natural and flowing. The only thing I personally didn't like was that several lines of dialogue were written in the same paragraph block which is confusing for me.
Overall it's a great idea. It makes you read because it hooks you from the beginning and keeps you there with lots of open questions.
I wish you the best. Keep writing!