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Excellent read so far

I'm liking everything about this story so far: the brazen detective, the way he gave in to temptation, the temptation (<3!!), and the unexpectedly complex backdrop of his job and the case he's working. The story is well written, and despite its erotica tag, has an intriguing detective story and a complex, likable main character. In fact, except for the more unconventional themes of their relationship (gay, very light BDSM romance between an 18 and a 33 year old,) there's not much in the line of "erotica"
I'm hoping to see Felix become a more complex, "real" character. Currently he is little more than Detective Dorian's wet dream come true, but for now it is perfect. As I said, I really liked all those "temptation" scenes.
Can't wait to read more!

Edited to add: I scored all aspects of the story 5* except for plot (4*). Let me just clarify that the story's plot is excellent, way more developed and complex than I expected. The reason I scored it slightly lower is because, well, this story is in erotica, but it is also clearly not just smut—the author went above and beyond to develop an involved storyline and a whole cast of interesting supporting characters. Yet the connection between the two main characters—the all-important romance, that separates smut from erom— is sadly lacking (underdeveloped). What I mean is, readers get to know who and what Dorian is, how he feels, his ethical and moral struggle with giving in to Felix. On the other hand, we have Felix, who is at worst a lazy bum kinky teenager with a penchant for older men, and at best a great cook/housekeeper kinky teenager with a penchant for older men. In other words, he feels to me like a cardboard character, despite catching glimpses of a very interesting, intelligent person through their dialogue. I want to *know* who he is! I need to know that he is worthy of Dorian, even if only on a subconscious level. I'm hoping that the character of Felix will be developed further as things progress, just like everything else in the story.

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Wonderful story, couldn't put it down!

This was an unexpected find, and am I glad I did! I found the story under Romance, and although it has a romantic thread running through it, it doesn't start much later in the story, but despite that the military intrigue, sci fi element, and the interesting characters kept me glued to my seat.

This is not my typical type of book (I'm a romance addict ;P) but the romance angle—just enough to placate my inner romantic—was enough without ever becoming the main focus (although it was an important element of the plot), in case anyone reading this review is worried about that. I loved the friendships and camaraderie portrayed among the Rangers, and in the later settings as well, and there was enough detail in the "world" to make the whole military angle feel authentic without confusing a noob like myself.

The plot was, in one word, compelling. I believe that is the strength of this story, that and the strong characters, especially Hannah (main character). I loved the twist 2 thirds through where Hannah suddenly doesn't seem to be who we thought, and when she had to shoot "someone" but... well, let's just say it was an interesting turn of events (<– trying to avoiding spoilers here) and then when a traitor was revealed... That left me reeling (never saw that coming, well done!), but it also left me with a lot of questions that were just skimmed over or not answered. But that did leave a lot of room for future books, which is great!

Here's my bit of constructive criticism: This book can use a bit of contextual editing—some chapters start in unexpected ways that left me confused about the setting, some terms are highly specialized and sometimes detracted from the story because they are never explained nor "showed" in context, some of the dialogue reads unnatural or can be condensed and improved to enhance the conflict/exposition of the scene/characters/etc., and I found a handful of spelling mistakes (not a lot)—but these examples are in the minority and did not detract from the sheer delight I got from the book. This book has clearly been edited and proofed and comes across as professional. That made the reading experience so much more enjoyable.

I read it through in one sitting (except when sleep had an inevitable, but very short, victory over my willpower) and I am currently suffering from zombie-like symptoms while writing this, but just the length of my review should already tell you how much I liked the book: the less I like a book, the less I have to say about it. Life's too short to waste on less-than-stellar reads.

So I just want to say well done to the author, "The First of Many" has been an amazing read, and I hope you'll continue the story. May you find many fans who love it as much as I did!

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