This is like the first time I have dropped such low stars. But this is what the story deserved. Honestly your portrayal of whatever love and what not hatred wasn't even relatable. The story went on with a pace of miles/sec. That is not how a story works. Too much dramatics. No proper punctuations. Hell lot of mistakes. At least put in the effort to relay the emotions of the characters. They all felt like rag dolls. You can't just jump from loving someone to hating someone so fast, and if you intend to lead the characters that way,at least explain whatever is happening clearly. One moment Ethan loves Diana,and next moment hates her. How is that possible?! You can't just put series of fuck-ups on Diana's part to show why Ethan hates her. And just when, Ethan does a hell lot of mistakes, this girl River turns a blind eye to it. Does Ethan even have a functioning brain?! And you can't just cover up a murder like anything,yet River's mother is bailed within months or days... And Diana is her step sister,but no major confrontation. You're like dropping major life altering bombs every fucking second in the chapter and you don't make the characters confront them? You just take a 5 year leap. Wow. Stories are written so that people can connect with them. But your characters are not even relatable at all. At all. Please work on your plot evolving and emotion expressing before progressing with writing.
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