I felt the story was rushed. The dialogue was okay, not as strong as I would have liked to see for this kind of book. I like the idea of letting readers use their imagination. Some books I like that and some I enjoy a muse and description. With this kind of book, I would have liked to see more details of how she became a little, how he became a ‘Daddy’ these books can be tricky to write. I understand they have a way to talk as she is a little. He is a ‘Daddy’ He doesn’t seem very strong as a ‘Daddy’ would be with a little. You have a great idea of the story and plot. The grammar and punctuation can be fixed quickly. Little more details and a clearer outlook of her life would help you out a lot. Hard to review without the book being finished. I always change the review once you finish the book. I am not rude; I want you to succeed. These stories are a big hit on these apps. When a character speaks, please start a new line; otherwise makes them jumbled up.
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