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It has potential.
K, first off. The story and plot have potential. With time it could become amazing.
It could use work. You make a few mistakes with the grammar and the flow of the story. Also, some words are wrong, like it did not sync with the sentence at all. Run it through a beta.
The plot seems good so far. I really can't critique it this early in the story.
The characters are full of life, that's good. But they seem to lack some detail, like Samantha and Daniel. Maybe add a paragraph or something that shows what they look like so the audience won't wonder? Or is that your intention?
That's it for now, keep up the good work.
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