Elianor

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It has potential.

K, first off. The story and plot have potential. With time it could become amazing.

Grammatical Critique
It could use work. You make a few mistakes with the grammar and the flow of the story. Also, some words are wrong, like it did not sync with the sentence at all. Run it through a beta.

Plot Critique
The plot seems good so far. I really can't critique it this early in the story.

Character Critique
The characters are full of life, that's good. But they seem to lack some detail, like Samantha and Daniel. Maybe add a paragraph or something that shows what they look like so the audience won't wonder? Or is that your intention?

That's it for now, keep up the good work.
Eli

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