I like the plot, but it was a bit difficult for me to understand those flashbacks or going back in time (after 20 min , after 1 hour.) In my personal opinion since it's being narrated in the first person, not by a third person (the author) I would like to see more feelings of the main character rather than actions. I mean I would like to read how the main character is feeling, what is thinking rather than "I washed my teeth, I wore this brand dress etc.). But it is personal preference, you continue to write however you think it's best for you.
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I'm sure when you find the time you will revise it for grammar mistakes and punctuation.
English is not my native languege and I have to revise what I write when I find time.
But I like the plot , the main character is a brave girl who isn't afraid to say what she thinks or to enjoy life apart her pain for the loss of her mother. I am eager to read more of your work. 😊