H.M. Kay

It’s good, but I have some criticism.

I’m in love with this story, every bit of it. I love the plot, and I have been inspired by this book to continue to write my own; however, there are many things wrong with it.
The grammar and punctuation is terrible, and most of the words used are the incorrect spelling or the wrong word entirely. There is barely any character growth; the main character may have found a way to push back the nightmares temporarily, and I like how she isn’t able go sleep properly without the love interest, but she is still the same, insecure girl bought at the pet shop in the beginning of the novel.
When we finally see the love interest for who he is after being bought, he doesn’t seem as disinterested as he said he was later in the book.
I suggest going through the chapters and fixing the plot holes, grammar, and spelling errors. Always read through your chapter multiple times before publishing so these mistakes don’t keep popping back up again and again.
Even I have to do this before I post anything involving typing.

Potential.

There are things in this world that deserves an award. Well, this doesn’t, but it has the potential to get one. The plot is a great start, but the way it’s written needs to be worked on. Sometimes, revisiting old chapters is what you needs to do to fix their mistakes and to continue the plot. As being said, this book really needs its beginning chapters re-visited to fix its grammar and flow.