Jamie

I'm interested

First of all, I would like to start off by saying that this story is unique. I don't think I've read a book with this plot before and that makes me want to read on more. I really like the friendship between the main character and Mochta (I think I've spelt the name correct). I feel like it's a realistic friendship with the playfulness and jokes made towards each other here and there. I did notice a few spelling mistakes, but we're all human and that's expected. However, one thing I would like to point out is that sometimes your ellipsis' have two dots rather than three, but that can easily be changed by reading through it and spotting where you can change that. Other than that, I am enjoying your book so far and will continue to read on when you update again :)

Love the chapters

I love the length of each chapter. Don't get me wrong, I love long chapters too, but I really enjoyed being able to get in a quick chapter when I have the time. This week has been super busy for me so I found myself only being able to read on the go so I found this perfect for that. I've also noticed that there wasn't many spelling or grammar mistakes so I thought that's a good thing to point out as well. I will definitely continue to read your book as you update new chapters :)

Good

I have yet to finish reading the book fully, only a few chapters off. I think the story is good, it's made me curious and want to read more, I think you could go into a good direction with the plot of this. That being said, there are many grammar mistakes in this story. It's hard to come by a story that doesn't contain a few grammar mistakes, we're all human and it's easy to over look a word or paragraph, I know I have. I suggest re-reading your work or maybe uploading your work to a site called Grammarly, the basic package is free and corrects punctuation and spelling mistakes.
Other than that I think your story has good potential and I can't wait to read the rest :)