Wake up please
Read the story now
As I was browsing for supernatural stories for Inkitt readers to read, I couldn't help but be pulled into your story only by this fact and was very disappointed to find a story that holds so much potential and ideas, yet organized in a very disorganized and messed up fashion. So heed my words to transform your story into something much stronger.
Your summary is interesting, yet weak. In other words, it makes absolute no sense at all. You explain how your character is waiting for something, and then you are like what you mean is, and this is very confusing as you contradict yourself. So in other words, it doesn't work at all. Make a solid hook, and short summary in a sentence and you will find readers hovering to your story.
Second of all, the way contests work to determine if they want to publish your work is a FINISHED AND POLISHED WORK. This is the maximum you will have to put in if you ever want a chance to winning any contests. And before I grill you on the fact you won't have a chance, I'll explain every detail why your story won't gain the audience and satisfaction you need.
Number one, your blurb. Never ever define what your audience will feel. It is a very arrogant motion that tends to push away your readers. No one wants to read, this is a very interesting story you have to read to believe. Unfortunately, this terribly composed blurb masks those possibilities that your reader will see in your story.
Number two, your prologue. I have never in my life seen a poorly composed prologue. It is massively flawed. Wake up please. Yes, an author's comment breaks the fourth wall, but you did it in such an arrogant fashion that readers may find very unattractive and would just want to put this down right away. Don't tell your readers that they will love your story. They won't. Your readers look for an interesting plot and strong writing to love a story. They won't love what you define. Don't define their feelings as they will find you as an arrogant figure and this pushes them away from what you want them to read. So, I highly suggest you get rid of ANYTHING that promotes your definitions of your audience's feelings and you will see more readers.
Number three, again, your prologue, but its about how you choose to craft it. It is unfortunately poorly written and looks so casual, as if you were texting a friend in a more formal fashion. By the way, what you did there is how I text people and it isn't exactly the thing your audience find attracting. It is very difficult to read and difficult to communicate what you want with your audience and this also pushes your readers away because they don't want to deal with a difficult story in their readings.
Number four, punctuation. You lack a ton of it. I can't even imagine the long list I would have to come up with for both chapters. And your readers who might want to spare a review will not do you a favor and list them all out because it is not a fleshed out, polished story. Its completely find if it is a work in progress and you are looking for people to help you look at your best effort, but honestly, I find this writing lazy and you can do WAY better than this. I believe this story has the potential to be good, but not when you choose to leave out all the nitty gritty that makes a story good.
Number five, romance. I honestly prefer if you left the story tell itself how the couple would develop and show it instead of ruining it in the beginning, which basically already tells the entire story. I think other readers would find the same as well, so please, redo the entire prologue. A prologue is supposed to support your entire story, but in this case, you destroyed it unfortunately. I am tempted to give you a one star rating, but the truth is that you have the ideas (much like another story I read that was similar) and I must give you credit for creating it, but your bad quality of work masks the ideas you want to get through and those are all the reasons why you won't find a good audience. It is the reason why readers will put it down. So in summary, don't assume your readers will love your story, fix your punctuation, don't write as if you didn't care as in punctuation, and try your best. If this is your best, that would be heavily unfortunate and you could really use some english classes to help you get the novel you want. If you need help editing, read your story out loud and you'll find where your punctuation goes and how your sentences sound, which in turn shows you what you should fix. If you can't do even that, your path to an author will be difficult. Please take this criticism into heart and don't be discouraged. I know that it hurts to have our precious stories stabbed by others, but it honestly makes you and evolves you into a better writer. Trust me. Thankfully, you have barely started this story, so it will be an easy fix. When you fleshed out your prologue and chapter (or completely revise it), I would be happy to help you take a look again.