This mystery novel will keep you on your feet! There's always something happening to further the story. However, the writing itself is in need of some revision. Frequent typing errors, inconsistencies, and long-winded descriptions may muddle the story for some. To the author, I would suggest shortening the descriptions of the action scenes, working on mental imagery a little more, and increasing focus on Terra's emotions as at some points I felt disconnected with her, as if observing the story from a distance. Also, when switching from one person's perspective to another or changing times in flashbacks, I feel a little more transition is necessary to ground your readers. Moreover, make sure to use the right tenses in flashbacks (most commonly past perfect tense). As for the story itself, I can definitely see potential! The aspect of the notebook, the organization, and multiple perspectives is undoubtedly going somewhere!
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