Not bad
Out of the 6 chapters that I have read so far, it is not bad. I haven't read that many werewolf novels so I am still a little new. Grammar definitely needs some touchup.
To me, the prologue seems a little unnecessary. It threw me off also because, by the time I got to the next chapter, it had switched to first-person perspective, rather than 3rd person perspective. Nothing wrong with that, except I had no clue who the narrator was at first. I thought it was Logan, in the beginning. I'm guessing it's to let the reader know who is who among the pack. However, if Rosetta learns about it later on, it seems like it would be easier to just scratch the prologue, especially since it is the same scene we witness through her eyes later on.
Speaking of the pack, I understand that it is important to identify who is the Alpha, Beta, Luna, etc. At the same time, physically calling them those terms as nicknames seems odd. Especially if this is part of some esoteric secret, calling someone Alpha instead of their actual name seems like it would be more likely to let things slip. Basically, the pack should know who is Alpha and Beta without having to actually call them that.
I have a lot of other notes that I took down through these chapters, but I'll try to stick with the main ones. When the car crash happens, Rosetta blacked out before the car impacted anything. That, to me, seems a little unrealistic. Does she hit the airbag and then get knocked out? Or does it fail to deploy and she hits the steering wheel? Same thing for when they wake up. There's not a whole lot of description after the fact. Is there any bleeding? Are her ears ringing? Is she dazed and confused? Even though the car is on its side, Rosetta has to escape through the sunroof? What about the other door? Is that how Dylan got out? Also, once she gets out and calls Val for help, even though she is bleeding, she just forgets about it. Obviously, heat is important, but so is bleeding out. Maybe just add in a line where she keeps one hand on her forehead for pressure or something? Also, with her minor injuries, rest is important, but why is she in a wheelchair? She doesn't appear to be limping or have any sprained/broken ankles. It seems unnecessary.
In chapter 3, when Dylan and Jordan are fighting, you use the term 'deadpanned' when Dylan is yelling at him. Deadpanned is more saying something humorous but in a serious manner.
In chapter 4, the chaos of breakfast time is interrupted when Caleb strides in and doesn't resume until he speaks. I understand again that he is the Alpha, but that seems off to me. And, even though she admits that Logan is hot, Rosetta expresses disdain for him immediately. Some people might get flattered. Is there a reason she gets agitated, or is it the classic hard-to-get style? Learning more about Rosetta might make it a little easier.
With chapter 5, when CeCe is introduced, you have the line "Eyes widened when I noticed her scar..." mentioned once, but then is repeated only a few sentences later. And, I would try and give a little more explanation as to why she is so adamant in the beginning about not going on a date with Logan.
And, even though it is winter, the snow melts enough for a picnic. Are they in the middle of winter, or is it closer to spring? The latter might make a little more sense for that scene, even if it was a nice day out. When Rosetta learns about Logan's parents, she drops her sandwich in shock, but then never picks it up again for the remainder of the picnic. Maybe lace that in there somehow, saying she once she recovered from the initial shock? Or, oppositely, say that hearing about their death made her lose her appetite. And, you have her brush off 'invisible dust' when they are leaving. While I get what you mean, the invisible dust seems odd. If she is outside, how about she brushes off some snow? Or, since they were leaving hastily with a wolf, I would worry less about what was on my clothes and be more in a rush to get away.
After everything that happened, the nonchalance with which Val reveals the big family secret is a little unrealistic. For something that has been kept quiet for several years, only to be so casually talked about after a little run in with a wolf doesn't seem right. It goes from "Super secret, can't tell you." to "Oh, hey, this is Caleb, my werewolf fiance". I'm struggling with this in my story as well, but I would try to make it more serious. Maybe have them wait until they get back to the mansion to explain?
Sorry if this is a little long, but I hope it helps! Good luck with everything!!
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