This is a really good story. With your fresh ideas and interesting plots, I can see the immense amount of originality in your work.
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You really need to work on your capitalization and paragraph spacing. There are so many dialogues that need to start with the word capitalized in your story. As for spacing, you can have one-two liner paragraphs. That is completely okay to do.
Here is an eg-:
XYZ said, "i like singing and dancing." "oh me too" ABC replied.
This should be,
XYZ said, "I like singing and dancing."
"Oh, me too" ABC replied.
Also, try describing the character's environment more. It's a little hard to imagine what scenery he/she is walking in.
Overall great effort 😊
I can't wait to see what you think about my book :)