Maybe next time... (spoiler alert)
Okay, so I liked the idea of the story, but the way it panned out not as much. The plot was good, a sick bitch tortures those who have wronged them ends up being killed by her equally sick ex/victim. However, for me, it felt as if you started in the middle of the story -and sometimes doing that is good- but if you do that,, you must provide as much backstory as possible in the upcoming events. The story was also a bit hard to follow because of the layout and formatting of the text, we made me read it as if it were a poem, but the words clearly showed it was a story. I liked your descriptions of things but there are quite a few grammatical errors that I noticed, like in the first paragraph where you wrote *seeing how they begging to be free for the torturing action." It confused me and made it hard to read. As a tip, when you proof read your work you should read it aloud, making it easier to pick up on things like this. And I know it was meant to be a short story but things felt rushed, like you'd tried to fit a whole novel into those three chapters. Maybe adding more of the aforementioned background details or slowing the tempo of the events would have slowed the pace down a little. It also felt like you were trying to fit in all the genres, such as erotica, thriller, horror etc. which just made it feel sloppy and confusing, and didn't come across as a clear theme. As I said, the idea is good but the way it panned out suffered a little.
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This is just my opinion, so don't take it too much to heart, as this just isn't my cup of tea.