Lunamoon08

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A good read, but still needs work.

While the plot is nicely done, and the characters are likable, I'm afraid that until some serious editing happens, this book will not be published. For example, the author writes with a nice flow, only for grammatical errors to take over, such as using present tense, and then past tense in the same sentence.

‘Hadrian’s voice interrupts my cursing thoughts, and I sniff to indicate I understood.’

'interrupts' and 'sniff' are present tense. 'Understood' is past. Just an example.

It's a lovely book over all, with an enticing plot, but there is a serious amount of editing that needs to happen before this book reaches its full potential. 7/10

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