Sad, but good..
When I read the sentence where Lucius shot Oliver, I had to read it a couple more times, because I just didn't believe that had just happened, I just thought I read it wrong. It's sad how something so horrible could happen to someone so young, who had no clue what was going on, except for the fact that his sister was in pain. I really think the dad should have had his children help, instead of putting his family in danger. I started to tear up when Oliver got shot. Because, just imagine, just a few seconds ago, he was alive, and happy, and loving his sister. And just a few seconds before his death he was reaching for his sister, I couldn't help but cry at that part. I wish Oliver didn't have to die. But, in a way, It was his own fault, because his sister told him to stay put no matter what. I'm not saying he deserved to die, because he did not. He was young, and the last piece the wife left behind. Speaking of the dead wife, In one of the chapter, unless you already have, but in one of the chapters the dad should be looking at a picture of his wife, sitting at the dining room table, after his daughter gets kidnapped, and think about his wife's death, and he narrates the death story. And he looks at the picture and says something like, "I'm so sorry I let you and our daughter down. I don't know what I am supposed to do now, she is going to be permanently changed, she will never be the same." I don't know, something along those lines. I hope this review helps. Keep writing, you have so much potential!!
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