KurosuMiei

Phnom Penh

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The silent Witness

Unique plot woven with amazing writing. I love it. Keep up the good work!

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Intriguing Read

This is an interesting read. I can sense chemistry building between the Tyrant King and our Princess Adela and am loving it. I ship them. All those subtle scenes where he almost opens up to her leaves me wanting for more.

Your writing is wonderful and mistakes are really really few, which is great. Keep it up!

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Interesting Read

This story has a new, inventive setting full of magical places and beings and also provides a strong lovable female lead. I like Lara’s demeanor ever since from the beginning chapter. Her relationship with Gabriel has an intriguing sense that makes me want to find out more about them as well.

Your writing is wonderful. Though, in my personal opinion, perhaps you can try to add more physical description and balance them with the emotional or inner thoughts of the character. Showing the actual scene of what is happening would surely make the story even more captivating.

There are several mistakes throughout, regarding the tenses and some trivial ones, but I’m sure you’ve heard of all those already, so keep it up! You’re doing great and will improve for sure as you advance.

Happy writing!

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I am Kapsar, an interesting read

I’ve covered about halfway through your book and I must say that it’s a unique yet sad read. (Sad stories are also just my thing as well) Kaspar is such a pure sweetheart at first, who doesn't adore him? And knowing how he is innocent through your descriptions of his thoughts makes me feel great sympathy for him when he’s subjected to unreasonable abuses and unfairness by those “dominant.” I think his insanity has every right to surface and show the others the monster they’ve raised in him.

I love the way how Kaspar’s right mind transfers to the other darker side of himself. Your pace with the transition is wonderful. Though, in my opinion, perhaps you can add more physical descriptions and make them balance with the thoughts of the character, as well as adding more information about each scene to prevent confusion. If you intend to keep certain info for better plot twists later on, I completely understand.

That aside, your narrative is well written, the metaphors intriguing. And there aren’t many mistakes at all! Great job and keep it up. I hope you’d achieve what you wish in writing! (I'm not a professional writer myself, so all of the above are only purely my honest ideas!)

Happy writing!

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Loved it

Mafia and Romance! I have an endless obsession with that combination and your book offers the right thing. Keep up the good work!

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Unique!

A unique plot encompassed with great writing. Keep up the good work!

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