KurosuMiei

Phnom Penh

I write the kind of story that inspires and keeps me awake at night, so let’s see if I could inspire you. I always follow back.

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Touched My heart

I’m terribly sorry I had to take so long to finally write out how deeply I was in love with your book. And I mean it, every single word.

The cozy, fulfilling emotion I got from reading just from the first few chapters kept me from putting this book down. (And I did because of the problems I’ve told you about) The romance between Mandy and David didn’t feel rushed and you allowed the feelings to flow at a beautiful pace that is relatable to us, readers. (And me, personally) I also love the fact you’ve made David a faithful person to his beliefs, to God, and I believe it makes him more humane, more realistic.

I’ve read this piece of your writing when it still had less recognition, and now I’m so happy for you that you’ve gained more. Always keep up with your passion and don’t let negative comments bring you down!

-With Love

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Unforgettable Characters

Gosh! With just the first two chapters and I was already enthralled by the characters. And further as I read on, I feel myself in their shoes, especially that of Athene. I really love her and I really love her dynamics with all the involving characters. They each have unique, distinct characteristics that make them live and breathe like a real being. I can’t wait to see what’s going to happen between Athene and Anthony as I sense some comfy chemistry between them. And another aspect is that I definitely can related to is those two’s introverted type of youngsters. I’m one of them! (Though 18 now)

I really love your characters and the overall plot pace is amazing. You get straight to the point and omit places/info that don’t matter to the story. There are only a few punctuation problems and also a very small amount of typos throughout, so it’s not a problem at all. Your writing style is up to the point and catching, I could definitely learn from you.

These are all my honest opinions and I strongly hope you keep up this amazing work!

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The silent Witness

Unique plot woven with amazing writing. I love it. Keep up the good work!

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Mesmerizing

I can’t say how much I was captivated by your work!

In a few moments I’ve already read nearly half the book and it was absolutely mesmerizing. I love how Salem seems to be a confident, strong female lead whereas she also faces her own haunting mistakes and how it’s damaging her mental and makes her deeply cautious around others. Leo is just very sweet, I can definitely relate to how Salem is attract to him.

Your up-to-point writing style amazes me as it never gets too informative, never gets boring. I kept thinking “wow, how could this author go over everything so smoothly?” Every sentence just locks together so well. I love your writing.

Please keep up the great work. Happy writing!

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Interesting Read

This story has a new, inventive setting full of magical places and beings and also provides a strong lovable female lead. I like Lara’s demeanor ever since from the beginning chapter. Her relationship with Gabriel has an intriguing sense that makes me want to find out more about them as well.

Your writing is wonderful. Though, in my personal opinion, perhaps you can try to add more physical description and balance them with the emotional or inner thoughts of the character. Showing the actual scene of what is happening would surely make the story even more captivating.

There are several mistakes throughout, regarding the tenses and some trivial ones, but I’m sure you’ve heard of all those already, so keep it up! You’re doing great and will improve for sure as you advance.

Happy writing!

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I am Kapsar, an interesting read

I’ve covered about halfway through your book and I must say that it’s a unique yet sad read. (Sad stories are also just my thing as well) Kaspar is such a pure sweetheart at first, who doesn't adore him? And knowing how he is innocent through your descriptions of his thoughts makes me feel great sympathy for him when he’s subjected to unreasonable abuses and unfairness by those “dominant.” I think his insanity has every right to surface and show the others the monster they’ve raised in him.

I love the way how Kaspar’s right mind transfers to the other darker side of himself. Your pace with the transition is wonderful. Though, in my opinion, perhaps you can add more physical descriptions and make them balance with the thoughts of the character, as well as adding more information about each scene to prevent confusion. If you intend to keep certain info for better plot twists later on, I completely understand.

That aside, your narrative is well written, the metaphors intriguing. And there aren’t many mistakes at all! Great job and keep it up. I hope you’d achieve what you wish in writing! (I'm not a professional writer myself, so all of the above are only purely my honest ideas!)

Happy writing!

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Loved it

Mafia and Romance! I have an endless obsession with that combination and your book offers the right thing. Keep up the good work!

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Unique!

A unique plot encompassed with great writing. Keep up the good work!

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