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A Story You'll Want to Read

I just finished this novel, so thank you very much for your patience! I had a lot of thoughts and feelings while reading, but I'll be brief and just highlight the most important ones. First of all, I think the main character, William, is very compelling. He is exactly the type of protagonist I enjoy reading about in an action novel, and I definitely think this is a huge strength of this novel in particular. You allow us insight into his personality and mind, and I really enjoyed that aspect. Secondly, I felt like the plot had a pleasant, natural flow to it. I didn't feel jarred into or out of events, meaning I liked the context you provided along with the clear series of events. Lastly, I have only one criticism and that revolves around the style of writing and the grammar. I want to say right away that your voice is very distinct in this novel, and that is not a bad thing. In fact, I appreciated it in this case. That being said, the actual style of writing and grammar could use a little work. The sentence structure can be a little clunky or choppy sometimes, and every once in a while there is a missed comma. I might suggest including some sentence variation and running through your work for one last grammar check. This critique did not, however, interfere with comprehension. That is my only criticism and I would hate for it to be discouraging because I think you have an amazing story here. I wish you the best of luck with publishing!

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On the Right Track

I don't want the title of this review to turn anyone away from this story. I think it is a five-star tale overall and it is worth reading. I might clarify my choice of title by saying that it is just a little rough around the edges. Underneath, you have a great story and excellent characters. I would sum up my recommendations by saying that you might just want to run through your story a few more times. Check your grammar and consider cleaning up your sentence structure. Occasionally, these elements were distracting to the plot, but all the time I was wondering what would happen next. I hope this doesn't dampen your enthusiasm for writing because you have a lot of potential here! Good luck!

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I'm Cold Just Thinking About It!

Let me just say right off the bat that I really liked the premise of this story. I enjoyed the characters and found myself genuinely invested in their well-being. That being said, I think the ending was just a little abrupt. For me as a reader, that is not a huge concern. Of course, I don't think it detracted from the rest of the plot. My other critique is the writing style. Your grammar all-in-all appeared fine to me, so no complaints there. I might, however, suggest some sentence variation. Periodically, a paragraph might have a bit of an awkward flow to it. But like my other comment, this did not detract from the overall plot. I strongly believe this is a tale worth reading for anyone and everyone and I think you deserve to be published!

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Thoroughly Enjoyable!!!

Alright so I am so glad I read this! This was one of the best works I have read in a long time. I should say that this not the type of novel I would normally read, but you did such a fantastic job with this. I don't even know where to start. Your writing style is clever and straightforward. Your voice is very evident and I thought it was just great! Your characters are real and I had a tremendous time getting to know them. You have a real talent and I sincerely hope you are published soon. I wish I had a criticism to give you (and I don't normally say this), but I have none! Not a single one! Good luck! I hope everyone loves this just as much as I did!

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