Interested to see the rest!
This is an exciting story about a young man named Kevin who saves a woman's life...only to find out that she's despised and feared by everyone at their school. And for some reason the "Queen" has set her sights on Kevin.
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I thought Monya did a great job writing out these characters' personalities. We get a little bit of Kevin's inner thoughts, excellent dialogue (a lot of which is funny, I loved their banter with each other) and even though a third medium of text messages. I thought his relationship with everyone was believable, but I'm really excited to see where things go with Petra. Speaking of her, I did not like her at the beginning but that was the point. She's presumptuous, arrogant, seemingly ungrateful...but I noticed a few chapters in she wants to spend time with Kevin and even though she's being forceful about it, I have a hunch things might become real before too long . I would definitely say, at this point in the story, these characters and their friendships/dialogue is the definite strong point of the story. We don't get much description of Kevin's surroundings, but honestly, I was not even thinking about it because I was too interested in the characters themselves. and what they were talking about.
The only critique I have is the grammar and punctuation, as I noticed a lot of typos and/or misspelled words. Just small things like "take a seat" was "take an eat" or "your" instead of "you're." They're easily fixable, but they were noticeable and I did see about 6 or 7 of them in the story so far. Just keep an eye out for them when editing your current chapters and when you post new ones. They're so easy to miss, (I am sure my books, which I have read 100 times, still has typos) So no big deal, it did not interfere with my ability to understand what was going on.
I'll be adding this to my "reviewed but ongoing" reading list so I can keep up to date with Kevin and his story!