M. B. DeMoor

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Writer. Historian. Archivist. :) Dreaming of publishing Child of the Flowers in hard cover some day. Will post a new chapter every Thursday!

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I was hooked!

This is definitely a binge-worthy story! Brian does a great job with the narrative, weaving in Mason's thoughts, almost making them your own. At first, I thought, "This is a typical plot, man moves to small town to make a new start since he has a dark past" but man, this story was NOT cliche and had the perfect amount of spook with a little sprinkle of steamy. I thought the characters had very in-depth personalities, writing and relationships. Not once was I bored whilst reading this. Incredibly well written, engaging story worth reading from start to finish.

I was a tad confused at the beginning, but I've since realized that Brian left us clues before the first chapter that made a lot more sense later. So if you are a bit confused at first, keep reading. It'll be worth it.

I only saw very minor grammar mistakes like a quotation mark missing or something small like that, and any mistakes that were there were scarce. I thoroughly enjoyed this spooky story and I'd recommend it to anyone interested in the horror or suspense genre!!

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A perfect story for a historian like me!

As a historian and Roman history enthusiast, Decimus: Rome's Wolf was something I HAD to read when I found it on Inkitt. Gabriel has clearly done their research in this book, and I was thrilled to find a book set in this time period. It is not very common, at least not from what I've seen on Inkitt. I want to note that there were a few grammar mistakes and typos, and the flow of the writing is sometimes choppy. However, this is easily fixable and did not deter from my enjoyment of this story at all.

We are taking back to the second Punic War when Gabriel slightly alters history and gives the victory to Carthage denying Rome their real-life domination over Carthage. In this alternate reality, Carthage lets Rome continue on as "normal"....at least on the outside. With nothing to lose, the Decimus leads us on a path to war...and it isn't pretty. I've read up to chapter 10, which is the last chapter posted so far and I must say, it leaves on somewhat of a cliff-hanger so I am very much looking forward to seeing what happens next. I would say "I know what happens next, I've studied Roman history" but that's the beauty of historical fiction. We know...but we also don't!

I would highly recommend this story and I am looking forward to the release of new chapters. Outstanding work!

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Great start

You are certainly off to a great start. This book is still in the beginning stages but I am getting "Timeless" vibes from the whole, top-secret time traveling situation. I love the concept of time travel so I am hooked already! Your prologue really pulled me in and intrigued me. How did we get there? I'm very eager to find out!

Your MC is hilarious, her sarcasm and inability to keep it all in, in front of HER BOSS was insane to me and I was chuckling at the narration and sarcastic undertones. You really set a great foundation here with interesting characters, particularly Rhys who I can't wait to see more of.

I did not see any grammar or technical issues in these first few chapters, so great job on that! I thought the story flowed really well and I didn't feel bored nor did I feel like the story dragged on. I genuinely enjoyed this short ongoing project. I'm going to add your book into my "reviewed but ongoing" reading list so I can be kept up to date with new chapters! Please, keep writing!

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Excited to read more!

I felt like I was watching a film whilst reading this story. We have Beckett, a workaholic woman who apparently had a wild side in her early 20s, is convinced by her friends to go out for a while night in Vegas. But Beckett has a past that we don't know about yet. Ulta does a great job leaving a bit of mystery to keep us wondering what exactly Becks went through. Then she meets Jack...and what was meant to be an exciting evening with her girlfriends turns out to be very exciting indeed!

I thought this was extremely well written. I would've liked more description of our characters, but the dialogue flowed extremely well. I never had an issue following who was speaking, and I never felt like it was boring or unnecessary. It was realistic, flowed fantastically, and your story was not the typical cliche of this genre- I can genuinely feel like it is going in a unique direction. I can't wait to see how Jack and Becks relationship develops...at least, I hope it does.

Since this is an ongoing story I will definitely keep up to date with updates, as I'm so eager to see what Ulta has in story for these characters and their story. Great work!

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Excellent Medieval Fantasy

Fantasy is my favorite genre, and this one hit the mark. I was hooked in immediately from the first paragraph. As this is an ongoing project, I will keep up with it as Kai releases new chapters and makes updates!

This epic tale begins with Sir Aedan, a conflicted knight who makes a choice he should never have to make. A choice that disrupts his entire life, sends him in exile and as he harbors a queen with a false name, they form a familial bond which is incredibly heart-warming. All the while the new king is going mad...

Kai does a fantastic job weaving in Aedan's thoughts within the narration without oversaturating it. It's clear that Kai has created a massive medieval-based world with its own unique languages, kingdoms, culture and lore. He does an fantastic job putting the reader into Aedan's head. I could really feel the conflict within him whilst reading, but his strong personality and morals keep him upright, despite his energy seemingly failing him. Kai captured these emotions perfectly.

There were only a few times so far that I felt confused, namely the time jumps and a few dream sequences. Perhaps changing the font, using spacing or making it more obvious that there is a time skip or a dream sequence would make it more obvious. I would only ask for more description of the locations they are in, as we hear a lot about where they are and what Aedan thinks of it, but not a lot about what it looks like which made it difficult for me to imagine the city of Natsu in particular. Otherwise, I feel like the narration (as I mentioned above), the action sequences, dialogue and story are all coming together nicely. It flows well and I found myself speeding through 3-4 chapters without even realizing how much time had passed. This is the kind of story one can get lost in.

I can definitely see this story in hardcover, and I hope to read it in my hands someday.

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Couldn't put it down for a second

Wow! This short story has instantly become one of my favorites. From the main character's inner monologue, the dialogue and descriptiveness, I could see and imagine what was happening on the page. I could feel what the main character was feeling. Excellent writing style and grammar. I was hooked the entire time.

The plot of the story really got me. I an empathize with the main character as well. I am quiet, short with words, blunt and suspicious of people and you portrayed that introverted nature perfectly. His anxiety about topping his successful work threw me right into this "slice of life" story, and really left me wanting more. However, I wasn't unsatisfied with the ending either. It ended on a melancholy note, but I'm proud of the main character for standing his ground.

Absolutely fantastic work!!!

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Excellent worldbuilding

I'm elated to have had the opportunity to read Paradyxm's Ursaverse series thus far and this story keeps me wanting more each week.

The Ursaverse Volume 1: The Empire of Will is about an Emperor and his Empress and the birth of their Will-child, a baby born from the Will, a mysterious weave of fate. The story begins during relatively peaceful times....but danger lurks on the horizon and tensions rise slowly, with hints and clues left along the way. I will definitely keep reading with each update!!!

Paradyxm does an excellent job at world building and immersing the reader into the Ursaverse by providing just the perfect amount of details to the characters and their personalities, descriptions of their surroundings and the overarching turmoil happening in the world. Each chapter begins with the mysterious message from the Fatescribe, which foreshadows the events of what's to come, leaving just enough mystery to get the reader curious without giving away too much information. Despite introducing many characters quite early on, Paradyxm's ability to introduce each unique character without being overwhelming left me interested each time someone else was introduced.

I would highly recommend The Ursaverse to anyone and everyone interested in Fantasy, drama, massive and creative world building, and engaging characters.

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I want more!!!

I love this story! You've done such a great job pulling me into this story from the start with the vivid descriptions, engaging characters and believable romances and relationships. I think this world you created is so unique, but also evokes a sense of nostalgia, as it reminds of me of Avatar the Last Airbender and Divergent. But, it is important for me to note that while it reminds me of those stories, it is definitely its own story and unique.

I definitely think your strong suit is description, because I did sometimes get distracted whilst reading dialogue. The dialogue did what it needed to do-it got the character's talking across just fine, but I found it slow sometimes and wanted a bit more action whilst they were talking. This is a personal preference, not a bad reflection on your writing!

I thought the story flowed fantastically, and I am really interested in more world building as we get deeper into the story. I've read up to chapter 17, as that's what is posted at the moment. Please, PLEASE keep writing this. It needs a little tweaking, in a few areas but honestly, once that tweaking is done I think this will be an excellent book. I love the cover art also!!! Well done!!

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A very potential suitor indeed!

I thoroughly enjoyed reading this ongoing story! I appreciate that, even though Amelia and Blake met in a cliché, both buzzed at the bar kind of way, the story did not go as I predicted, and kept me on my toes! I really, really liked Amelia's character. She was funny, thought things through, and has an incredible sense of humor. It took me a little longer to warm up to Blake but I think he's got a few more layers to uncover as you continue writing. I'm eager to see where the story goes, and I will keep up with it as you post new chapters!

I noticed a few grammar mistakes but this can be easily fixed with editing and didn't distract me too much whilst reading. Overall, great job and please keep writing, I want to see what happens next!

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Wonderful, immersive fantasy

I have been looking forward to reading this story for a while now! I know I already mentioned this in my comments, but I want to reiterate, Amber's writing is so often like poetry. The prologue was written as if a parent were telling their children about the past, detailing the horrors of the Trinity War, then in chapter 1 we're thrown into an entirely different type of narrative. It was incredibly descriptive, lovely to read and flowed exceptionally well.

As the story continued I really enjoyed the development of the characters and I especially appreciate the visuals we've gotten through Artbreeder for the look of each character. (your characters are so handsome!) Amber's writing style was incredibly fluid and I could really jump into the mind of Kaydence and feel his feelings and his hurt at what he witnessed. You were able to portray sensations in a very beautiful way.

The only issues I noticed were the punctuation mistakes with the dialogue in the book. All of the dialogue was missing punctuation which was a bit distracting at times, but this can be easily fixed. The structure is there, but commas and full stops were absent from all of the dialogue as far as I could tell. Additionally, several typos are present in the story. Again, another easy fix. I think once the grammar and punctuation are polished this story can really take flight, I think it's something special. I want to re-visit my rating on Grammar/Punctuation once the adjustments have been made to see if it looks and flows even better. I want to stress that this did not affect the quality of the writing whatsoever.

I was incredibly taken in by this story and I thoroughly enjoyed this beautiful world you created. I really really hope you continue writing and growing this wonderful world!!!

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Wow!!!!

I am absolutely blown away by this story. Your writing is fantastic, engaging, and you have the perfect balance of descriptive narration and narration through the eyes of Ronin. I loved his personality from the start, that first chapter really hooked me in. You do an excellent job engaging your readers by igniting all their senses: I could literally hear, smell and see what was going on around Ronin and it's difficult to portray that type of feeling through writing. I genuinely believe you did a great job with that and I felt immersed in this world from the start.

I found the Japanese-culture element of this story to be a wonderful change and not something I have personally seen very often. I can tell that you did you research not only with the culture but with the Romanised spellings of the hiragana. I really couldn't put it down and I hope more people read your book because I personally believe it deserves to be published and put on the shelf!

I usually try to include a bit of detailed feedback or criticism if necessary in my reviews, but honestly I have nothing negative or picky to say about this story. Your worldbuilding was wonderfully-paced, your writing was organised and easy to read. It flowed well and I never got bored. Despite the heavy Japanese culture and lore (something I am not tremendously familiar with) I was not overwhelmed with an overabundance of information. If anything, it's gotten me curious about other works of this nature. Really and truly, great job!

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Waiting to turn the pages of this novel!

I will try my best not to ramble on too much in this review but WOW. Kim's imagination is one of the most extensive, creative and wonderfully put together in this novel. I am blown away by the writing, the characters, the lore, mythology and everything else Kim managed to put into a single book. It's literally a whole other world in just a few pages and I can't begin to express how much I enjoyed this story.

We're taken to Barathorn and Evertheen, land of the humans and throne of the gods. Extensive lore stretching back thousands upon thousands of years is explained to us throughout the story, and Kim does an excellent job of both showing and telling the details of the world and the lore. At first glance, just based on the summary, you might think it's a romance between the moon goddess Serafinn and the human she's noticed...but this story is so much more than that. It has romance, adventure, politics, mythology and action. Even the gods/goddesses have flaws and I found myself relating to some of their plights as a mere mortal.

Accompanied by a map, family trees, images of the gods/goddesses, we can piece together this world that Kim created easily, keeping track of the pantheon and history of this world. I would, without a doubt, highly recommend this book to anyone who loves fantasy and world building. This is one of my favorites and I can't wait until I'm holding a copy and turning the pages when I read it again! (and again and again!)

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Excellent Story

I don't usually go for werewolf stories, or even erotica stories with lots of steamy scenes. But THIS...WOW. I was blown away and read the entire thing in just a couple of hours!!! It was such an easy read with a great story and a unique take on werewolves. Your characters had such unique personalities, believable chemistry (if you factor in the lore of mates) and a really nice, (and in the end) heart-warming story about two people destined to find each other late in life. It was not too steamy, it was just right and I would say it was tasteful and not over the top. You really got into your MC's heads and I felt like I was there rooting for, or scoffing at, both of them the entire time. I felt like this was an emotional roller coaster in the best way!

I would recommend this to anyone interested in werewolf fiction. I honestly wish there was more!

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Excellent fantasy

Wow! I came across this story a few weeks ago and I was astounded that it didn't have any reviews yet. I've been keeping this in my "current reads" reading list and finally got the chance to read it today. I so wish there were more chapters!! I sped through it. This is definitely a binge-worthy fantasy story.

RubyWings does an excellent job with world building, introducing us to their characters and dropping just enough hints to keep us guessing. Right now, with four chapters released we're left right as the protaganist, Ashia, is sent off on his mission to sign a treaty with the enemy. However, RubyWings makes it clear that the Queen is not in great shape, so I'm so curious to see who the real enemy is here.

The writing, descriptions and dialogue are perfect. They have a wonderfully natural flow, engaging conversation between the characters and lots of showing for worldbuilding instead of only telling us through narration. I didn't notice any obvious grammar mistakes at all.

I can't stress this enough- I highly recommend this fantasy story to anyone interested in the genre. I really hope you keep posting this story. I'll add it into my "reviewed but ongoing" reading list so I can keep up to date with it as you post updates. I strongly encourage you to keep writing.

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Takes me right back to high school!

You really captured Amelia's feelings in this story. I'm nearly 30 and it took me back to high school so well that I found myself relating to her in some ways. It made me incredibly nostalgic. The drill was exactly how I remember them being, and the dialogue was spot-on for sixteen year olds. I think I would have liked a bit more description of things, locations and people's appearances but honestly I was so immersed in Amelia's inner-thoughts that I wouldn't say the story lacks from this at all. There was a lot of inner monologue thoughts in italics, which distracted me a tiny bit, as a lot of it was told instead of shown but if I understand, this is your intention and since the synopsis tells us of a lot of drama, I feel like we'll need to be in Amelia's head a lot more in the future chapters. So that is not a criticism, just an observation.

The flow of the story was fantastic, and each chapter left you on a cliff hanger wondering what was going to happen next and keeping us interested. All in all, I found it very good, engaging and it was also very quick. I need more!

I put 4 stars for plot since this story only has 7 chapters so far, so I'm adding it into my "reviewed but on going" reading list so I can come back and edit this review once I read more of the story. Looking forward to seeing more of this, you're an excellent writer and I hope you keep it up!

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Fantastic fantasy adventure

I am so impressed with the world you've built here, but also with your writing style and the way you managed to weave the lore into your story. We're introduced to your main character via first person narration and I felt like I was sitting there next to him, listening to him tell the tale of how he began a rebellion. You developed his personality so well and I was cheering him on the entire time. Your writing style is fluid and flowed perfectly. I saw no grammar mistakes at all. I feel like just saying "this book was sooo good!" over and over, but I know those types of reviews aren't very helpful.

But, I honestly have no critiques here, I enjoyed this story immensely, and I only wish I could hold it in my hand and put it on my bookshelf to pick it up again later. I usually try to do a brief synopsis of what the story was about in my reviews, but this story's lore is so complex and big that putting it all into a review is impossible. From your details about the helots and the blood extraction process, your main character's personality and relationship with his "friends/fellow rebels" I could picture the entire thing as if I were watching a film. His relationship with the helots, people in a different caste from him, was realistic and you really captured their initial lack of trust in him and his eventual rise to leadership within the rebellion.

I would highly recommend this to anyone who loves the fantasy genre. Great work, please keep writing!

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Wow!

Your writing is so engaging and interesting. It really took me into this world you have created, and left me wanting more and interested in what's to come! You did a fantastic job worldbuilding with a good balance between showing and telling, without too much narration and exposition. You let us discover the world as the characters were interacting with it and each other and I think that is one of the best ways to do it.

I would like to understand what the (dates?) at the beginning of each chapter are, but I did not see a guide or anything like that so I'm unsure what their significance is. I also found myself quite confused about the age of the main characters. I understand this is an important plot point, you mentioned that age was not calculated the same way we would do it in the real world. However, I found it difficult to relate to the characters sometimes because I had no idea how old they were supposed to be. I wonder if there is a way to make this clearer without interfering with your goals/writing style?

That is my ONLY critique of this fantastic work. I think you have a very interesting plot going and I'm really eager to see where this goes. I'll add it to my "reviewed/ongoing" reading list so I can continue to keep up to date with new chapters! PLEASE keep writing this story!

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An emotional ride

Wow! I am only four chapters in and I am already very invested in this story. I thought you did an excellent job portraying her emotion, as well as the feelings of grief in chapter four when she got "the news." You had one quote in there that really captured how she was feeling, sort of numb inside and it was something along the lines of, "the mental strain had taken out every ounce of my personality," I can't quote it exactly but that is SO on point. I'd like to see more of her personality, but I suspect as you continue writing we'll see more of her beyond grief and guilt.

There were a few grammar mistakes here and there and I did notice that sometimes the writing had an inconsistent flow. Some of the time your sentences varied in length and flowed quite well and I read without stopping, but other times they didn't and I found myself re-reading sentences a bit. There was also a bit of repetitiveness in the use of words like "worsening" and then "worse" in the same sentence. This is all easily fixable and it did not take away from my enjoyment of this story-just something to keep any eye on!

I'm very interested to see how her family reacts (we already know they are angry) but I'm so so interested in her relationship with her family. I'll be keeping this in my "reviewed but ongoing" reading list so I can keep up with new chapters as they are posted. Please keep writing this story, you are doing a great job!

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Incredibly uplifting!

This might be one of the most positive, uplifting things I've read on this site. Your poetry was so refreshing to read, and honestly it came at a good time. I've had a very emotionally horrible week and your words were inspiring and uplifted me. I feel happier, and a bit more confident after reading it. I can really feel the passion in your words, and how positive you must be as a person. Your poetry will undoubtedly inspire others and help them through hard times.

My favorite one was, "Everything is Possible Just Dream and Achieve" which really resonated with me personally. I put myself through 7 years of university and ended up getting my dream job in my dream country after lots of rejected applications, and lots of tears. But you are so right- if you keep chasing your dreams and "keep moving in the right direction." you can achieve anything. I really hope more people come across your poetry- someone might really need to read it :)

Keep writing!

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New take on the Mad Hatter

This was such an interesting, and refreshing take on Alice and Wonderland/the Mad Hatter's story. I thought your synopsis was especially engaging, so great job catching my (and probably many others') attention right from the start! Your writing style is very fluid, and I could imagine exactly what each character was doing whilst speaking.

As of now, there are only three chapters out but I have noticed a few grammatical errors here and there, nothing major and very easy to fix. It did not distract me too much or take away from the writing. I think the strong point of this story so far is the fantastically written dialogue, however a weak point, I think, is the lack of description in a lot of places. I've got a good vision of the characters and what they're thinking/doing whilst they're speaking to one another, but I found it a bit more difficult to imagine their surroundings because there isn't much information. I'm so impressed that you are writing a story based on another, yet have managed to give every character their own unique personality without borrowing too much from the original concept. Great job!

All in all though, this is one of the more unique takes on the Mad Hatter's story I've read and, as he's my favorite Alice in Wonderland character, I am incredibly interested in where this goes. I think you are doing a great job so far, and I'll keep this in my "ongoing but reviewed" reading list so I can keep up to date with the story!

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Interested to see where this goes

Artemis begins their story with Amara, waking up in an unknown and quite creepy place alone and confused. Turns out she's caught the eye of Aemon, one of a unique set of gods and goddesses. Artemis did an excellent job introducing us to Amara, a feisty protagonist who isn't afraid to speak her mind against those who would trick her or be overly cryptic with her. I really enjoyed the world that Artemis has created in this story.

I will start out with a few critiques I have. This story changes POV quite a lot, almost too much. I would just start to get into the story of one character, just get interested in their personality and character description, only for their section to end and we move onto the next. I would also say there is a lack in descriptions of things. Artemis did a fantastic job of description in chapter 1, when Amara wakes up. We get a really good feeling of what her surroundings look and feel like. However, I did not get that same feeling in the following chapters. There were a lot of grammatical errors in the story so far but those are easy to fix. It was nothing major, just a word missing in chapter 1 and then a few instances in dialogue where there was a full stop instead of a comma after quotations, small things like that. It did not affect my ability to read the story or understand what was going on. These elements are my biggest critiques of this ongoing story.

The lack of some description was balanced out, however, by excellent character building. I feel like Artemis did a good job of making her characters unique and intriguing, and I could really visualize what they were doing by the way Artemis wrote the dialogue. The gods and goddesses that we've met so far are interesting, I think Amara is a great protagonist already and I am interested to see where the story goes. Keep up the good work :)

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Well written historical fiction

Sofia takes us back in time with this historical fiction set right at the onset of World War II, where two children are taken from their homes to live in a Doctor's house in the countryside of Dover.

This is an ongoing project and I read all the way to chapter 8 which is the last one published, but from what I have read so far I can sense a build up, as we were already hit with sad news in the last chapter. I'm so curious to see Max and Sarah's story. I hope they become best friends, and I have so many theories about how this story will progress.

The only suggestion I have would be when writing dialogue, keeping one character's dialogue together instead of spacing each line out. I got confused as to who was saying what sometimes and had to backtrack and re-read a couple times to realize that some dialogue was all from the same person. Otherwise, I had no issues.

Sofia writes in such a way that kept me interested and engaged, with just the right amount of narration and dialogue, and I couldn't put it down. I would definitely have this book on my shelf if it was published in hard cover. Max and Sarah, though children, are easy enough for me to relate to because they are both avid readers and love to explore. I was that way as a child, and still am as an adult. Fantastic story so far, and I will be adding it to my reviewed/ongoing reading list so I can keep up with the story as new chapters are posted!

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Interested to see the rest!

This is an exciting story about a young man named Kevin who saves a woman's life...only to find out that she's despised and feared by everyone at their school. And for some reason the "Queen" has set her sights on Kevin.

I thought Monya did a great job writing out these characters' personalities. We get a little bit of Kevin's inner thoughts, excellent dialogue (a lot of which is funny, I loved their banter with each other) and even though a third medium of text messages. I thought his relationship with everyone was believable, but I'm really excited to see where things go with Petra. Speaking of her, I did not like her at the beginning but that was the point. She's presumptuous, arrogant, seemingly ungrateful...but I noticed a few chapters in she wants to spend time with Kevin and even though she's being forceful about it, I have a hunch things might become real before too long . I would definitely say, at this point in the story, these characters and their friendships/dialogue is the definite strong point of the story. We don't get much description of Kevin's surroundings, but honestly, I was not even thinking about it because I was too interested in the characters themselves. and what they were talking about.

The only critique I have is the grammar and punctuation, as I noticed a lot of typos and/or misspelled words. Just small things like "take a seat" was "take an eat" or "your" instead of "you're." They're easily fixable, but they were noticeable and I did see about 6 or 7 of them in the story so far. Just keep an eye out for them when editing your current chapters and when you post new ones. They're so easy to miss, (I am sure my books, which I have read 100 times, still has typos) So no big deal, it did not interfere with my ability to understand what was going on.

I'll be adding this to my "reviewed but ongoing" reading list so I can keep up to date with Kevin and his story!

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Very interesting start!

I was drawn in by this story because I'm a historian, and I love love love historical fiction especially when it's combined with fantasy!

The story begins with two teens who are the perfect amount of awkward around one another, and who are thrown into an adventure by their new professor Mrs. Eden. When they go back in time, things don't exactly go as plan and the two open up to one another for their untold adventures.

I found this to be an incredibly easy read, it flowed very well with no awkward time jumps or lengthy explanations. Kim does a great job keeping the reader engaged by keeping us updated with Tristain's inner monologue and the general mood of the scenes.

I would say it is definitely aimed at a younger audience, as I could not quite relate to the characters anymore (which is of course only a product of time) but I still found it very easy and enjoyable to read. It is exactly the type of story I would've re-read over and over as a teenager. Though it's a work in progress, I found that the plot moved quite quickly and I was not left wondering too much what was going to happen. I love the element of myth and folklore you've incorporated into this story.

I wish I could take an adventure like Tristian and Troy!

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Never seen this writing style before

Our story begins with two perspectives of the same event: Two people with a mysterious past, one of which remembers none of it.

I was instantly taken in by Nana's unique writing style. We are immediately immersed into the thoughts of these two individuals, who clearly have feelings for one another, and I could really feel the confusion in Mei's thoughts, conflicted and frustrated that she was only remembering bits and pieces. As we continue reading, we realize that there is a lot more than meets the eye when it comes to these two, and everyone else around them.

I was a little confused at first, but from what I can tell it felt like the first few chapters (they were very short, like a snippet out of the day or a slice of the day) were more like passing memories, very quick insight into the two mains. I liked that we got more detail as the story continued, and we learnt about Mio's family life, and that not everything was "sunflowers and dandelions." I often felt like Mei subconsciously knew who she was before the accident, but she's also somewhat changed (other than the memory loss) and I felt like Nana did a great job portraying that.

One of my favorite things about this story was the imagery and the unique story-telling. I've really never seen this writing style before, and it gave such an interesting perspective on how both of the main characters thought of not only each other, but their friends and family, too. Nana did such a great job making it believable, and I felt like it flowed very well. ,

I would recommend this to anyone interested in a story with romance that builds itself up, with just enough mystery to keep you questioning what's going on.

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Absolutely fantastic

Wow! This is one of the most unique plots I have ever come across, and not only that, the writing is phenomenal.

Helen has beat hundreds of other applications for a job with a very vague and somewhat mysterious description. Then, on her first day of work she understands why it was so vague. I found myself sympathizing with Craig just like Helen, and her emotions and forming bond with him do not feel forced, but incredibly natural. So far there are seven chapters, and only a few characters have appeared but they are all quite believable, and the chemistry between Helen and her colleagues and boss is very natural.

Cat's descriptions in this book are also incredibly detailed without being overwhelming. I can imagine the tank Craig is in, the office space, and the entrance to the building with the magnolia paint and columns. I felt immersed in this world instantly from the first paragraph. This is the type of story that I would start at 10pm at night and read in one go, even if it meant I'd be awake until 4 in the morning. I simply could not "put it down." I know that reviews are very helpful if they include some comment or critique, but I can honestly say that right now I have nothing like that to add. This story is clearly well thought out, well written, interesting and a page-turner.

As this is an ongoing story I will certainly visit when a new chapter is posted, and I can't wait to read more. If Cat decides to publish this book on paper someday, I will jump on the opportunity to put a copy on my bookshelf.

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I'm already hooked

Horror is not a genre I read often, but when I saw the description and cover art for Candyland, I just had to check it out and I'm so glad I did!

Though only two chapters in, Chere has already done a fantastic job of immersing you into the main character's mind and attitude toward life. Claire is angry, hot-headed and seems to resent a lot of the choices she's made, while subsequently continuing to make selfish decisions. I can really feel Claire's anger in these first two chapters, and I'm curious to see how her experiences (will leave out details to avoid spoilers) affect her character development. However, this is horror, so anything can happen!

Chere's description, and writing style reflects Claire's inner thoughts, but also why she thinks the way she does. Even at the beginning, we've instantly got a multi-dimensional character without being overloaded with information. Chere does an excellent job of weaving in the details where necessary without providing too much, and leaving just enough to keep us guessing.

I will definitely be keeping up with Candyland as it updates, and I looked forward to reading more!

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Very interesting concept

I found this story to be more of a prompt than an independent story, and I would've loved to see more of it. I think that an "Illusion Forest" has so much potential and could be an excellent short story with a bit more details and emotion. I felt like the reader was taken into the illusion/confusion part for mere moments before they were able to escape. I think for the story to grasp the audience more and have a bigger impact, it needs to be a bit more detailed and emotional. Even for a short story, it could be a bit longer. Right now it feels like a good writing prompt for something bigger.

However, I want to end on a positive note because I found Magnus's writing style to be well paced and smooth. I think the idea of reading it as if the narrator is telling you how you're feeling is very unique and not something you see very much in stories.

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Even better than I expected

I'm quite picky when it comes to romance novels, but this one just hit the mark! The two mains were likeable, especially Nick who was such a gentleman!!!! I could really feel the love between these two, and it's written in such a way that evokes emotion, but also isn't overwhelming. The steamy scenes were wonderfully written, and the relationship between the two mains, though fast, was believable and their chemistry was wonderful. Great work!

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Like a journey back in time

As a historian, I am drawn to historical fiction (when I'm not escaping into fantasy). This story had two of my favorite elements: Storytelling through letters, and the Titanic.

The Letters of Sierra Charmonte is an engaging, tragic story of a young high class lady and her relationships with her lifelong friend Henri, her best friend and maid Jane, her overbearing tutor and a dashing young man that she meets on the Titanic. I felt that the protagonist was very likeable, and Jo does a great job fleshing out her character and portraying the grief she felt over losing her father, as well as the mixed feelings she has for the men in her life. It was very balanced with the excitement of "breaking the rules" of 1912 upper class. The twists in this story were unexpected, and a great element to the storytelling!

I absolutely loved the chapters in letter form. I grew to adore her father even though he's already deceased by the time the book begins. I did feel that the romance moved quite quickly, but I suppose in a setting like the Titanic that is bound to happen, and despite its speed it was believable. I thought the descriptions of the ship were lovely, and as much as I would've liked to have more inner monologue and Sierra's thoughts, I understand that would be difficult in the writing format, i.e letters.

I also appreciate the effort and research that went into making the time period as accurate as possible. There is of course a few things that are a little too good to be true, but it did not diminish the realism of the story for me. For anyone interested in historical fiction or the Titanic, I'd definitely recommend!

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Fantastic imagination

I found this story to be incredibly interesting with a unique plot and a synopsis that kept me curious to know more. If you're interested in a unique fantasy world with engaging characters and writing that evokes emotion, I'd highly recommend this story.

We're introduced to the Monarchs when they're still the pride and joy of humankind, until a jealous Immortal smites them into an eternal slumber filled with nightmares and misery, while he plunges the world into darkness. Literally and metaphorically, this world ends up in a pretty dark place.

I think this story's strongest point is the relationship between the Monarchs. Their chemistry is very believable and fun to read, with each character having their own personality and charming qualities. I especially enjoyed how we got to know each one's fears through the nightmares, which was added an extra layer of creative character development.

I do wish the story had a bit more description in the locations the main characters were in. We did get a lot of description of the castle, but not as much of the city or the journey to the city. Although it's perpetually night, I think more vivid descriptions would help bring the world to life even more. This is a personal preference, but I think the nightmares might be more impactful if they were weaved in throughout the story, rather than written in separate chapters at the beginning.

All in all, though, I was hooked on this story and I'm looking forward to reading its sequel and learning more about the Monarchs' quest and their confrontation with the story's antagonist. Jillhope does a great job evoking emotion and making the reader feel for these characters and the struggles they've gone through without being over the top or too dramatic. It's a perfect blend of intrigue and mystery. Highly recommend!

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Unique perspective

This was such a unique perspective on DA:I! I assumed at first that Andra was the Inquisitor, but I really appreciated that you made her story her own! I'm a sucker for Solavellan, and I loved that we got plenty of Solas/Andra alone time that wasn't too steamy or over the top. It was...realistic and believable. Your Elvish and lore was spot on and I can tell you did your research and put a lot of effort into this story. I've read a lot of DA:I fanfictions but this is definitely one of my favorites! I hope you continue writing and decide to write another one some day :)

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