The almighty voyage
From reading four chapters I am able to surmise two things. This is a two dimensional story and this is an imaginary world with no limits. From the first chapter the royal knights charge a dragon. None of the knights have names. Just 1- whatever. In chapter 3 you name a bunch of soldiers for the next voyage, but I feel that is late. Your king would be better off having 2-3 trusted men with unique personalities from the offset. The council members also need names. It always seems like the weather is always bright and sunny. The part where the three ladies approach King Orion feels off. The women lose their husbands, but we're given the choice to be given their husbands corpse's in exchange for being combines, a king would not give them a choice he would just take them, one woman should escape to happen on King Orion, she should be ragged and tired, the point is I have to feel for their struggle. You have a solid plot and you have the terminology for this genre down. You have interesting action scenes maybe more world building. At the end of the day you got me to turn to the fifth chapter so you have a story that is desirable. That said you are only seven chapters in so I look forward to how you fill in the rest of this story. Good job and keep typing I would love to see this on a shelf one day.
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