I'll start slowly, then work up to the hard parts.
Read the story now
In the first instance, I love the story so far, having read the first chapter thoroughly. Conceptually its great, the characters have a realistic feel and I can tell by your writing your military background. Its woven very well and sets the scene for a great deal of dramatic impulse.
Now the hard part.
Paragraphs are far too long, all jammed together so that its difficult to see the changes in character.. Just in the starter, there are four or five characters speaking, yet all of them are retained in the same paragraph with no spaces.. If you can sort that out, definitely its going to be a great read.