The Danger of Buying Birthday Presents
Overall I thought your story was really good! It drew me in right away and kept me interested as the story progressed. I loved the character of Kayla being inserted into this story, and the way she affected and shaped the life of the original story into something totally new and interesting. I loved all of the side characters you introduced, such as Jamie or Enrico, or any of the younger crew/dance members, they helped bring the setting and story to life. There were a few grammatical errors, but it didn't detract from the story. I loved how you included the original song phrasing as well as modern day music to make your points clearer. Even though I didn't always agree the way the characters were, I loved all of them as you made them. I'd recommend this to anyone who is looking for something good to read. Thank you!
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