Ruenigami

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I enjoed it

If only there is more, or am I blind? but overall, this story delivers greatness

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Well, you want a review that is being realistic here bud.

Well, it is a bit blocky, and sorry but you need to probably hear this again. But you need to SHOW AND DON"T TELL! Sorry, but that is the real world, the plot is intriguing though and I give you that! Just need to fix some things and yeah. See you on the flip side!

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I have an Addiction now!

Welp, you hooked me into the story so far(4 Chapters in!) and guess what, Love this erotica, thi showed me that even an erotica can have a good plot. I love Viktor. but one tip is to change the "Character Name" Pov, instead just say the character name, Idk, my job is to critisize you and your job is to choose whether my oppinion matters or not. But if I were you, I`d take every reveiw that mentioned a mistake as a challenge(Not saying you ignore them or anything), but I am just saying this because you would go far with a GREAT, no, AWSOME story like this. I think its your turn to return the favor(Btw MY chapter 1-2 are W.I.P, so things might change), but great job Ma`m. You are the best.

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EEEEEEHHHHHH? Cliche?

Its like my story, has a lot of errors, but still is good, I like the clicheness and other stuff, but I think you can do better than some geeky romance, I think your style is more better than off with something else than romance, but you dont need to take something from a probably 300 pound man that lives in his moms basement, and name is probably CHUCK. if you wanna do romance, go ahead, this is some suggestion, other than that, its altright.

Your Faithful Friend~Ruenigami

P.s: Good job, I am not into romance, but I know the premise and stuff cause believe it or not, I used to write romance and read/watch it too! I know how hard it was to make some plot and conlflict!

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Something different, and quite the same?!

I like this little romance here, its okay, but If you want to try out my suggestion, go ahead, no need to credit me, but I look forward to see what comes next!!

Your faithful friend~Ruenigami~~

P.s, for real, its okay, just need to work on somethings, but i see you growing and getting better.

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Well, tis a start. but I like it

Your story kind drags me in, but not alot, you gotta learn how to write dialougue, example:

"Hey Jack, Pass me that pencil over there" Boris said as he held his hand out

You gotta use the colon signs ""like this""

Since your first person(Not my thing, lemme try something)writer, you go with I and me, I am in her , you still have to follow that rule, 1 more before I go, make sure your paragraphs arent blocky, like its just text after text, make it text, maybe dialogue, then text or description. flesh out your story and spread everything out, dont reveal everything like

example:as detective maury walks in, the 4 suspects stand clear, staring at him,

"Well, johns the murder, arrest him" Maury said

THE END

Try to spereate them, try to understand what jcharmein was trying to say!!

alright, see you later.
Your faithful friend~Ruenigami
P.s, hope you make more!!!

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