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Sci-fi is my "thing" so I was drawn to read your first chapter, and I really like your writing style! The imagery is very good and there's a good deal of action and strong characters in that first chapter.
I didn't rate the plot highly just yet because it's impossible to determine from one chapter however the action had me wanting to read more.
In terms of criticism, please take what follows as positive and constructive, designed to help you.
There are some typos and some phrasing that needs to be fixed. For example:
"The place was almost quiet saved from the whispers of the cloaked figures." The meaning is clear, but I think the correct wording should be something like: "The place was quiet save for the whispers of cloaked figures." Meaning that if the whispers of the cloaked figures were not present, it *would* be quiet. Additionally, it's *save for* rather than *saved from*.
Also I noticed quite a few typos in the one sentence starting with "The Athantos Citadel": 'hieght', 'lowred' and 'broughtfade'. A simple spellchecker or a program like Hemingway (free spell-checker online, if you Google it.)
Also, I found that I was not visualising all of the different races (cainesc, katzenartig, etc) very well. In future chapters I hope these races/species will be explained a bit more in future chapters.
There is a lot of intrigue and action in this, more than enough to keep the reader interested, and that's the most important part of any fiction, I believe. I will be following this story and best of luck with it :-)