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Mafia Romance with a pinch of reality

A nicely done (but not yet finished) romantic novel with a bit of reality mixed in it.
If you are not partial to abuse I advise not to read the first chapter.
We have a female protagonist that is part of the mafia family who has a very obsessed violet ex fiancé not to mention abusive and downright horrible man.
Then we have the male lead who is a sort of a knight in shining armor.
The story is good and has that reality pinch to it that makes it more believable. As for the writing and the style of it I find it good but sometimes the same words appear to frequently- I suggest the usage of synonyms more often so that the repetition is avoided.
There are practically 0 grammar issues which is very gratifying and gives an additional thumbs up for the author.
Other than that for the first published work of this author I find it very good
Good job author

Dark but Sweet

Loving the fact that heroine is not your average Disney Princess but a woman with a past that is anything but glowing with butterflies and glitter!
Author I toast to you 🥂

When Harry Potter meets Teen Superman

If you liked all those Harry Potter, Percy Jackson kind of books you just hit the jackpot!
An aspiring author makes an interesting plot about a young teen who needs to save the world.
Very much the boy who lived vibes right there right?
Will be very much interested where the story goes.
The only tinny bit that disrupted the flow of my reading is perhaps a too little background of the normal life before the crazy thing started to happen to main character (perhaps a little memory down the lane when Austin thinks about him already being 16 would be helpful).
Other than that I think the story has potential and will check regularly to see how it unfolds.
Good job!

Nightmarishly good

So far so good. The story is grabbing and keeps hold of the readers interest.
A little grammar mistakes, but that can be easily corrected.
Keep up the good work. :D

P.S: would appreciate a feed back on my own work in a form of comment, review or like.

Try to not read it, I dare you!

A interesting story about gang wars. Sort of like Romeo in one gang and Juliet in another. That is if Juliet was a badass and Romeo a smuggle prince ;)
The narrative is from both points of views, which is interesting and compliments the story well. The writing style is chic, however the writer needs to develop it more.
One thing that bothered me, I already expressed in the comments. The dialogue would be more easily read if each person got their own line. Author please check the comment in chapter 2 (I believe) for further explanation.
Other than that I think this story has a lot of potential to develop as does the author to grow in her/his writing.
Keep up the good work and I cannot wait to see where this story will take us :)

Interesting and unique

Something unique on this platform, which is very hard to come by.
The story itself has a melancholy flavour and that is very nice, if you like more depth to your stories.
At the beginning I was a wee bit confused by the way the beginning of the chapters are written but you get use to it.
Keep on the good work author :)

p.s: would appreciate a feed back on my won work.

Intriguing

Something completely new and fresh!

Something new

An interesting start to a very different kind of werewolf stories that are common on this platform.
The story is set in a historical time and its own world, which is refreshing.
The plot confuses me a bit, probably because there are only a few chapters written during the writing this review. The narrative is from a few different protagonists, which is again something new.
Grammatical mistakes here and there but nothing too disruptive, can be fixed quickly.
All in all cannot wait to see how this story will unfold.
Good job author!

P.s: if you have time, please review, comment or like my story.

Nightmarishly compelling

The story itself is very compelling with potential.
Perhaps a little too short, might add a little more depth to the main protagonist. Feelings of anxiety and doubt of really being dead is what I perhaps miss (The girl is a little too calm, or even stoic and placid for her situation).
Other than that, I hope you continue with more chapters and make it into a full story. It could have a budding future.
Good job author.
Stay healthy and safe

P.S: would appreciate a review or comment on my own work. Thank you

Little mermaid vibes!

Even though there aren’t much chapters out, I really like the beginning.
Cannot help but visual the main character as Ariel (thank you Disney!)
Keep up the good work ♥️

Ps.: would appreciate a review/comment on my own story 🙈

A serious topic that needs to be written about

Depression is different for each patient that gets treated. This story will show you what it is like to be depressed and lonely, wanting a human connection but disliking the fake-ness in society.
The main male character is definitely well rounded. A social outcast by choice, although wishing to escape his prison all the same.
Longing and hating at the same time...

A very hard topic to write about, none the less still a very important.

Authors writing style is good, little grammatical mistakes here and there, but nothing that disrupts the flow of words.

Recommend if you are into more serious literature 💪🏻

Powerful

Great story so far. Making me shout to the stars to have more.
The writing stile is very smooth and you can read it effortlessly. A little grammatical mistakes, but we are only human and none of us that publish stories have someone to correct us.

Keep up the good work and keep the chapters coming till I pass out! :D
Stay safe and healthy

Can’t get enough!

We all know a friend who has that kind of boy. The toxic one she just cannot let her go and do what she wants. The kind of relationship that makes you wonder why the hell is she still with him?
The author shows you the inside look of such an abusive and very poisonous relationship. Not to mention the plot leaves or heroine on a crossroads: either to escape her current boyfriend or repeat the same cycle over and over again!

Author does a good job with describing how this kind of situation makes heroine feel and her own rollercoaster of emotions.
As infuriating as it is too see her trapped in such a state you cannot help but hope and root for her to escape and be show how love and relationship is not supposed to be a cage 🤗

Recommend ♥️

Something New

The story progresses nicely into this new (old) apocalyptic world after a plague. It is very good that the start of the story is not rushed like lots of authors do, this makes an easy transition into the story.
Loving the writing style, it shows that the author reads a lot and makes almost zero grammatical mistakes. The writing is effortless and super captivating.
Cannot wait for more chapters.

I super recommend to everyone who is tired of the same mundane romance cliché and loves a bit of tension of a good mystery/horror! <3

Peaked my interest

Loving the length of the chapters plus very good writing style with rich vocabulary.
Cannot wait for more!

Devoured it

Only 3 chapters? Are you kidding me! I need more!
The only thing that bothered me was the slight grammatical and spelling errors, but that can be edited in a blink of an eye.

Good but could be better

The story is good but has such a potential to get better! There are plot holes that need filling, which I found a bit irritating, its' like author didn't give it much thought or was just mentioned for the sake of the dialogue but not the story. It is a shame to let it go to waste.
There are quite a few spelling and grammar mistakes that need editing.
It is good story, but it makes me a bit bitter sweet towards it since I know it could be great.
What I really would recommend is a better summary, this one is rather... well too much for my opinion. I understand you wanted to grab attention with it but I still think it would be better to change it in my humble opinion :)

Ballet

The story is off to a good start and I will keep on checking up on it.
I really need to emphasise the grammar mistakes that are frequent and disruptive.
Once they are cleared up it will be even better.
Keep up the good work and practise makes it perfect :)

Unique

This is not ab young adult or a teenage cliche and that is what got me sucked in.

Good but has potental to be better

Since the author corrected me that the story is far from completed I decided to give delete the former review and correct the mistake.
I am glad that the story is not completed and all it needs is a continuation.
I suggest an edit so that the mistakes are corrected.
Writing style is good but I believe with practice the author will improve on it.
Good job author 🥳

Relatable

Love the feeling of understanding the main protagonist❤️
No critic on my side at all 🤷🏼‍♀️
Good job 🥳

Lovely

Nice story with a romantic twist and turns.
I might suggest a second look and edit at grammar and spelling.
Otherwise nice work 👍🏻

Little mermaid with reversed gender roles

It is a very good first novel, full of imaginative ideas and a little merman our smoking hot guy protagonist.
I advise to look over grammar and spelling mistakes which are quite common.
But we all start somewhere so keep up the good work 💪🏻

Something new

The story is very new and interesting and I am excited to see how the while beloved and breeding system works.
I suggest you look at the grammar because there are few mistakes which disrupts the flow of the story.
Good luck!

Relatable Poetry

Not all have the ability to express the emotions behind just a few lines of words.
You managed.
And for that you have my congratulations.
*Mike Drop*

Bitter-Sweet Short Stories

An interesting concept of writing short stories about reuniting with a past love or crush and watching it blossom or fall into the abyss.
The writing style is beautiful; however, at times so descriptive that can easily be a bit distracting.
Otherwise very good.

The beginning peaked my interest.

The story is just beginning; however, I do find the prologue or chapter 1 very intriguing.
Grammar mistakes here and there that need to be sorted out, as for the writing style it seemed that you are still discovering it and that is nothing to be worried about.
We all start somewhere.
Good luck and I will check on your story repeatedly for updates.

Thinking Caps’ On!

An interesting collection of mystery, which you have to solve 💪🏻

Hauntingly Good

Grammar? Perfect
Writing? Exceptional
Horror? Definitely
Loving it? Absolutely
My toast is to you author 🥂 absolutely amazing!

Royally screwed

I am absolutely and royally screwed because I love it and now I am just obssesed with the characters and want to be part of their world 🙈
The writer has the ability to keep you up at night literary screaming with excitement and waiting almost like a dog for a bone for the continuation of the story
Well done, I toast to you author 🥂

Part of the Ocean

Love it and makes me want to jump into the sea and hope I will meet a sexy merman.
Not only great plot but also nice character development!

Interesting and Refreshing

Love it and want more!

Point of no return indeed

Couldn’t use the connection between the arms and brain to put this story down and go to sleep ♥️
Good job author 👏🏻

Magical

Love it!
A bit edit and grammar check is still needed.
Other than that great work

New way to tell a story

I like it, the narrative to the story is very well written.
There are a little bit of grammar error that need closer attention and edit.

Now I want a Demon ❤️

Amazing!
Gave it a little less stars because it was a bit fast paced and a few grammar errors.
Other than that love it

Interesting beginning

The beginning looks very interesting, 💪🏻
Hardly any grammar mistakes and good writing style 👍🏻

Futuristically fresh

When this review was written the story is at its’ beginning.
A very interesting new age tale of different conviction for prisoners in 2050.
Looking forward for the continuation 👍🏻

Elvish goody

A nice start to a what seems a very interesting story.
Elves are the main mythological beings in this tale.
There is a bit of edit of grammatical mistakes needed and perhaps the chapters are a bit long.
It would be beneficial to make them a bit shorter at the beginning to capture attention of the readers
Other than that good job author 👍🏻

Amazing potential

Amazing ability to describe the characters create suspense and developing mystery.
The only thing that disruptive to the reading were the time and place sifting.
Other than that good job author 💪🏻

Mysterious

Nothing to critique here, everything is amazing from the story to the writing to the plot.
I enjoyed it immensely
Cannot wait for the next chapter👍🏻

Angelology at its finest!

I absolutely love the idea the author has for this story, it is very planned out and thought out.
However as stated in the comments the beginning is a bit confusing, there needs to be a slow introduction to this world and I had a feeling of being thrust into it, not knowing who is who and if the narrative is in first or third person.
Other than that the story is awesome, well thought out and the writing style plus grammar amazing.
But like I said it needs a bit of tweaking in the beginning for the readers that have been suddenly thrust into the authors universe.
This could be a great novel, it has lots of unique ideas, the author is very versed in demonology, lore, bible and ancient historical facts. I cannot wait to see how it shall be improved :)
Good work author!

Dramalicious High School

An interesting story where the main female protagonist is a young woman of colour that is very shy and in a depressed lonely state.
The light in her life is a secret crush she has on a boy named Matteo, a hispanic that seems to be interested in her too.
But because this is high school and teenage hormones are running high we have bullies, drama and all that jazz in this story.
We will she where the author takes us with this story.
Keep it up author :D

New Idea that needs a bit more work

The story itself has a very good potential, however, everything is a bit rushed in the beginning, there is a need for a time frame and where are we based. in the US? somewhere else where ranged marriages is a norm?
A bit of psychological development in all the characters is needed.
The sister seemed to forget she lost her brother too, there was very little sadness to be found in her display at the party. Why is that? Because she disliked her brother? I hope you see the little holes as I do.
Quentin might also need a bit of more character development. was he mistreated? Does he secretly hate everything or is just going along with it all? Is he taught to be a s*x slave for pleasure? etc.
The plot is lacking, if you dive into your characters more like answering the questions I have stated above it should come a little bit more together.
This story could be an excellent draft for the actual novel.
Writing style and grammar are excellent!
I am sorry if I wrote my review too long.
Keep up the good work author.

Sci-fi goodness

A smash of a book. Packed with action, sci-fi delivering a very good plot and story.
Excellent!

Short but still interesting

Very good short story with interesting plot.

Nerdy vengance

Remember the time you wanted to avenge your dignity with a big payback to your bully?
This is what this story is about... sort of.
While writing this review the story is at the very beginning, lets see where the author goes with the story

Fate is a fickle mistress

This story is only at the beginning of it journey; however, it shows much merit.
Perhaps the plot is unraveled a little to quickly with who Cameron is and the relationship between her and Mark should be a little more tense at first, but it is your story and your vision dear author 👍🏻
Since this is the authors very first story and is yet on the verge to discover his/her own voice there are some grammatical mistakes but nothing to big to disrupt the flow of the words 🤗
The beauty of this app is that you can constantly re-edit.
Other than that we shall see where the author takes us with this story🧐
Keep up with good work and do not be discouraged; practice makes it perfect 🥰

It is gonna rob your heart

Even at few chapters that are released when writing this review, this story has a very interesting plot that already grips you at chapter 1.
Should be interesting when the main characters meet 🤫
It has his and hers point of view so you see the both sides of the same story which gives another exciting twist.
Cannot wait where author will go with this 🧐
Guess I will need to check up regularly to find out 🤷🏼‍♀️

Title says it all

An interesting story about discovering yourself and your sexuality.
It shows that the authors first language is not english because of quite a few grammar and punctuation mistakes, however that can always be corrected.
Let us see where the author takes us next

Story that stays in your memory

I love it! Memory is one badass female lead and this time there is no prince charming as her love interest. We have a dark, handsome and slightly, on the border of obsession that is concerning, possessive russian mobster. And he is a very very dark pirate kind of guy.
He has a memory of an elephant and as we know elephants have a loooong memory!
The only thing that the author should correct are the grammar mistakes, there are quite a few and might be a bit disruptive.
Other than that I cannot wait for the story to continue!
A story (job) well done 💪🏻

Enslaved by it!

The plot is very gripping and even though the story is currently at chapter 1, as I am reviewing, it has potential.
I am enslaved by it, hoping that soon we shall meet the male protagonist.
Let us see where the author takes this story.
Good job :D

An alien exotic story

While writing this review there are currently only a few chapters, however, it is a very good and interesting story that has lots of potential.
I love that the main female protagonist is a woman of colour, and the author shows the problematic of the dating life of women who have more pigment and are thus considered less. :(
I cannot wait to meet the male protagonist :D
Some grammatical mistakes and misspellings, but that can always be corrected.
Good job author and cannot wait to read the story on.

Too short want more!

A short story, that makes you want it to be a novel.
Good first work author 💪🏻

Brimming with murder she wrote vibes!

Like mystery, murder and who done it like books?
This story has it all and even though it has just 4 chapters out, it delivers! Inwrapping you completely, wanting more.
Author knows how to draw you in with the writing style that would put some mystery novelist to shame.
A little grammatical mistakes here and there but nothing that would disrupt the flow of the words.
Recommend, and cannot wait to see where this story goes!

Lovely heaven of a story

It is very interesting start, hopeful to see some character development that I am beginning to se in both Ian and Dahlia.
The only thing I am missing is the explanation with Tony, what happened? He went away but why?
Maybe just a little more back story and description of what happened at the party and other events.

Other than that cannot wait for your story to continue.
How did Ian break her heart etc. Will definitely keep up with reading it.
Good Job author!

Deliciously addictive

Good suspenseful story with lots of twists and turns.
Recommend!

A different kind of Love

Not your typical sunshine, roses and rainbows romance.

It starts dark and very brooding. The main characters are both damaged, and we will see how the author will cure their psychological trauma through the story 🤔
Lets hope that Love is their salvation 🙈

Recommend♥️

Fresh and unique

Tired of the same old, washed out, cliche romance novels?
Well buckle up because this one is none of the above. Heroine that is not afraid to throw a punch!
Love it and hope other do too ♥️
Keep up the good work author👍🏻

Interesting read

Even though this work is fresh out from the oven, the story has lots of potential 🤔
A few mistakes here and there. Other than that it looks really promising 🤓
Let us see where the author takes this story 🤔

Hooked till the last chapter!

No words needed. Yup, it is THAT good. So stop looking at reviews and go read it 💪🏻
Author does a good job, I give an applause 👍🏻
Recommend 110%

A strong start!

Is sarcastic narrative your cup of tea. Then slap on your reading glasses and strap in for a bumpy ride 🙈

Even though currently there are only two chapters while writing this review, the story has strong potential.
Cannot wait to see where author goes with it 🤔

Keep up the good work author! ♥️

Hooked instantly!

Something new in the old writing world of romance. The story of lost love only to get a better one at the end!
P.S: actually have POV of the main lead included! Thank you author to take pity on our starving souls! 🤪

Chillingly good!

Only one chapter and already want more🤫

Imteresting read

The story itself is something new and unseen, which is a big plus!
A little bit confusing with names and places and who is who, however,throughout the story you manage to decipher the world in which the story is happening
All in all very interesting I recommend! 👍🏻

Breath of Fresh Air!

Loving the story, it is unique. We all are so focused on vampire and werewolf stories of supernatural that having Elves is a breath of fresh air, honestly.
Dont give up on the story author! It is really fresh and new on inkitt!
Keep up the good work ♥️

Ah-mazing!

Yes, the author caught my attention, when she wrote K-pop in the first chapter... but hear me out!
I cannot express my excitement over this story.
As a very romantic- looking for a love to cross oceans kind of-gal, what main character faces is something most of us romantic girls do. Reality. Love is messy, hurtful and rarely what we expect.
And that is what Yvonne, the heroine, faces. Not her vision of love but the reality of it.
And by the end she meets even greater love than she hoped for ♥️

Cannot praise the author enough 🤷🏼‍♀️
Read it and be Ah-mazed yourself 😁

Marvellous!

It draws you in a single chapter!
A badass female lead that knows how to give and take a punch. You will not regret it, when you sit down and take time to read this story.

Authors writing is effortless and without a fault, just 7 chapters and you already want to beg for more! 🥺

Great job!

Caught my attention fast

The story, even though it only has a few chapters, is very captivating.
Cannot wait for more chapters and to see where the author takes it!