I have never read anything like this, and I have to say, a lot of moments left me speechless. The ending overall was not expected and the climaxes throughout the story made this extremely interesting.
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I was a bit disappointed in some characters, like Cathy. If she probably spoke the whole truth, none of this would have happened. But then again, something that causes one pain is difficult to talk about.
Dante on the other hand, I have to say, was brought out well, and at some point, I believed he actually liked Sasha and wanted something with her. He was a mystery to me the majority of the time, but at least his motive was brought out in the end and, I am beyond shocked.
Sasha was a bit naive on her part, but that makes me like her more, but I'm still disappointed in her. She's a flawed protagonist, I like that.
I was expecting a happily ever after at the end, but after finishing the book, I feel like a bucket of ice-cold water has been dumped over me.
And I'll probably be thinking about this book for a while now.
I commend the effort and the work put into the book.
But it still requires some editing. In my view, most of the editing problems are probably from the 16th chapter. You can try spacing out the chapters from here because I got lost in some of the sentences
Then, there are some missing letters in some words, for example, in chapter 17 where Sasha thinks about Dante, you state "It would be better than having dinner with a bunch of strange." Which I assume is supposed to be strangers.
Another thing that seemed prominent to me was, instead of using numerals, it would have been better if you wrote in full words, for example, in chapter 18, you started the chapter with, "20 minutes into the meal..." I find it quite unnerving considering it is work you put effort you put into and it just makes the work seem a bit lazy.