An interesting idea marred by some writing issues (typos, paragraph clumps, etc)
Overall score: 3.5
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First, I noticed that Calvin likes to put "They say that" a lot at the beginning of the chapters, and did so for the last chapter. For the first chapter, it made sense. For the second, it made a little bit of sense. But for those that came after, within the context of the story, it doesn't make sense. It did make an interesting send off for the last chapter, though.
Now, for the story itself, The concept is interesting, and what happened 'after' (not spoiling) interested me even more. The ideas employed caught my attention, especially when *they* came on board, implying that everyone had forgotten the initial project.
For the first two chapters, while lacking in details for the surroundings, got their point across without hanging on for too long. The consequences of certain actions had lasting repercussions rather than being a brief cut that would heal quickly. We also get the goal of the main character and why he's striving to attain that goal. Don't hesitate to draw the world around us so we have something to 'see' while we read.
There's also a switch that happens at the end that I found somewhat interesting. The problem here comes from the fact that we know next-to-nothing of the main character other than that he's poor and his philosophical views of society. It doesn't get us truly invested in him, which tarnishes the desired effect at the end.
Some heavy issues, separate from the story itself, was the grammar and structuring. I wanted to leave feedback, but Inkitt isn't working for that option at the time I'm writing this review. When quoting in a paragraph, and the quote ends it, keep the punctuation outside the quotes. You're quoting something, not writing dialogue. Like that you remember for the future.
The chapters after the first two were filled with some big errors and should be looked over, as there are words missing, words that don't belong (likely leftovers fro rewriting the sentences). Chapter 3, for example, is very sloppy, something that isn't shared with the other chapters for some odd reason.
HOWEVER. However. These are problems that can be easily remedied with a once over by either the author or some other party. If the author does that once over I'll gladly raise the score, as it's not a bad story. It's just kinda rushed and could use a bit more fleshing out, especially for the main character. If anything, flesh him out so we grow attached, but don't exaggerate on any negative aspects of his life. Problems go both ways, whether good or bad.