Aarvi

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I read upto the fight till now, but I really liked your story . I love the character of Claire , she is so dedicated towards her duty. You had me in rogues part , at one point you makes me belive that her birthday and story begins with her kidnapping but later the fight amazed me .
Just wondering one thing , if she is capable of doing magic , as her mom taught her about it and she is practicing from early age , then why didn't she performed some magic during the fight.

Little punctuation mistakes nothing else the rest is easily understood.

Looking forward for more
Overall amazing!!!
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Interesting

Your book is amazing, good start . It draws the readers more into the story . Uptill now story is going smooth not too cheesy ,with a hint of comedy. Both the characters (Blake and Amelia) are different and unique. You represented their personalities so well.

Little bit mistakes with punctuation, use of pronoun and create some confusion with tenses . Read once you will know.
I am also not an expert, so according to me your story is going well. Amazing!

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Full of mysteries

I really like the way you write. You are portraying every character's emotions with their P.O.Vs so well. The thing I liked the most is your not focused on only one character but every character holds their importance .
Zel and Lilium's friendship was great( this is what I got after reading upto 10 chapters) . I really wants to know what happens to Zel? Why he was so afraid to come closer to Lilian again.
About Lilium she is amazing, I really like the waves and vibes concept and I appreciate her daringness. She is unique in her own way.
About Ian, glad despite getting so much attention, he do not runs behinds the fake beauties instead he finds comfort in natural beauty.
Their duo is best I mean the twins.
Kiki, I know she is pampered too much during her childhood but she have to step out of her little bubble . I am enjoying the chemistry between her and Ian , the way he stands up for her. The way he encourages her.

These people get along so well. I hope it will help Kiki in stepping out of her little world.

About criticism, I don't find much mistakes. But sometimes I got confused about who you are expressing about. Some people needs early introduction to avoid confusion but when you continues reading you will find out .

Overall story is amazing, portrayed so well.
Characters are unique . storyline going great.

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Creative writer

Your story is amazing. You put your imagination into words so well . It has the potential to take the readers into a different world. I really like the Okinizeus, how badly he wants to live peacefull6vand attached with nature. Your imagination is truly next level. Loved it.
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Endless love

Hey, I read upto 12 chapters
Your story is amazing . It shows the never ending love between Janet's parents. How her mother never left his father's side,no matter what.
From this we get to know how kind hearted Janet is , even after having a responsibility of two siblings, she accepted Henry and decided to find his attorney instead of leaving him alone. She is really caring. It's good that she is moving on with her life instead of sticking at the place. The way she is dealing with her father's business, I really appreciate that.

Hats off to Colin's loyality towards Wools. He have the advantage of situation and he can easily betray tha family but he stood up with them at this difficult time. I think he likes Janet.

Peter and Janet are getting along together, I appreciate his gesture to give her sometime to think . He don't want to hurry about anything. Patience is the key .

Overall i liked it. Amazing
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Great start

Hey ,
Your beginning of the story is great , I liked it. Things are moving not too slow, not too fast , on a perfect pace.
Here we get the idea that William is typical boss . Well a lot to come yet .
I found a little punctuation mistakes and the rest is perfect.
Looking forward for more.
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Amazing

Your story is amazing , till now I read upto chapter 14 . The way you write and put emotions in words amazing.
I really like the relation between Archer and Clearance . How well they are keeping their promise to Elaine.

Liz and Archer also getting well together, the pregnancy thing , the story of babies by Chloe and drinking blood during pregnancy gives the vibes of twilight , I like it.

Zella initiated a good step ,but on the other hand Chloe is also right but the way she used is wrong . She need to talk and explain them everything first.

You portrayed every character so well. Well till now I don't find much mistakes .
Apart from this , your story is wonderful. It will go far .
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Amazing

I really like the way you portrayed the emotions . They sounds perfect , you can feel them. Two groups with rules ,lots of mysteries and secrets to reveal . I really wants to know from Noah's point of view. Either he is changed or there is something hidden , yet to discover . Looking forward for Ava and Eva's story , how they are completely opposite , what actually happens with sophia's family , secrets between Lucas and Noah . I really like the character of Lucas , he is really helping and man of few words . I found similarity between the two main characters that they hide their faces .

Overall story is amazing with little punctuation mistakes .
You did amazing working , looking forward for more.
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So creative

First of all , you are an amazing writer Liz . I really appreciate your way of writing . The way you think is out of world. Your story is so different and unique. I really like the idea of immortal going to marry a mortal . I am looking forward , how this will work between the too. They totally opposite of each other . You portrayed the story in a very innovative way. I like those short chapters sort of poems or chanting , that distinctive . A lot of suspense creates a curiosity to know what happens next. This supernatural world ,you painted so beautifully with your words .

Sometimes I got confused with what's going on but its really fine . You comes up with astounding story , with lots of mystery and thoughts about so what comes up next .

Lets see how well these to get along . Lot of mysteries to reveal . How will she react when she found out truth ? And lot more questions.

Looking forward for more .
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Introduction

The name 'behind mask' and the introductory part gives little bit idea. May be its about today's generation how people hide their true emotions behind a mask . Well looking forward for more
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Quotes

Just read aal your quotes
Like the idea as you comes up with something different
Your quotes are amazing buddy!!
You can add more
If there is something or you are suffering , you can talk

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Good start , the prologue itself creates a suspense to the readers . It arise number of questions in reader's mind which leads to generate curiosity about what's going to happen next. Looking forward for more. Expecting lots of suspense.
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Nice

Till now I am enjoying this novel, with interesting plot . Initially where you describe kingdoms with unique colours , thoughts strike in my mind be like 'wow, that's unique' .
About Mr Red and Ms White, you are putting them along very well.
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Imperfectly beautiful

I like your way of writing with nice and understandable vocabulary, not too difficult .
Not much mistakes , easy going .

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