Aashion✔

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So Suspenseful!

That's what we call a thriller! Horror & Thrill by each other's side. Honestly, I always thought that reading horror isn't much horror but bro, you proved it wrong. It sure is horror and thrilling. Any medicine for goosebumps? I like the whole sibling group, it's cool and film style. Imagine, your parents not at home and you go somewhere (no spoiling) some..where... "Scary". I think for that read this book.
All credits to the author's suspenseful mind, don't know whether it's thinking how much spooky.
THE PLOT IS INCREDIBLY 5 STARS, obviously.
Punctuation 5 STARS.
I can see the hard work reflecting on your work.
KEEP IT UP!

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The plot is intriguing plus it's age-appropriate that's something for me to focus on. The plot is well explained and horror parts are written professionally also you showed the story instead of telling and it seemed like I am watching a movie. Hats off to the author. May you win this competition.
Inshallah
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Ok, so the yeah it's only 2 chapters and tiny but what you don't know that is that... Your story is so ADDICTING! I had enjoyed every bit of this story even though it's just a introducing Paragraphs but yet so amazing. I am amazed how you created the names of characters really differently and I don't think I can even think of such rare names 😇🥰 Will be waiting for more Chapters 😇🥰😍🤩

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Ok so I will start off from the Grammar & Punctuation, it's too perfect, you really have a rich vocabulary which makes it interesting and helps avoiding same words. I read 4 chapters and so far I haven't seen any grammatical errors. The summary is really catchy!! Now to your writing style, first of all it seems you like to write conversations so much like the conversation's seem never ending which gets kind of frustrating, by the way it's not a bad thing but personally for me I like to read directly about the plot. Next thing, I would suggest to update your Book Cover, make it more attractive with illustrations like for example your story is kind of related to technology so make something blue or like the wires one, something catchy! The Plot is surely amazing, I like books which start with school scenes because that's kind of reader I am. The biggest coincidence is this book is related to Hybrids and recently at school I just studied about it ! Another pointer is you should really like put who is the one who said this because it get's confusing while reading the conversation when you don't know who is speaking it. Even though, your story plot idea is interesting and different but it isn't intriguing I mean there should be something that curiosity eats the reader and forces them to read more!! On top of all, I am surely amazed about your story plot, like how these ideas came into your head because the plot point and all is so different and for that you surely have a imaginative & creative mind of a writer!!! So as you can see, I judged from you grammar skills to the plot deeply so It was an fun experience reading & reviewing your amazing piece of work !!! 🥰😊
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Aashion

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OK, so the start was creepy yet incredible. I like the way you made dialogues and your word count is also progressive. I mean its really hard for me to write a chapter with 1000 words. The story was really different then most of books directed to the plot.
Its great and the cover looks like adventure I mean if you play PS4 there is this game called Uncharted 4 .
I like the way its person.

Tw can you review my book Imperfect Sides since its part if our review swap.

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Gurl, I am totally hooked. The start was exciting and it felt like I am also gonna go with them to the trip.
Its full humor and I like the way you created dialogs
Its pretty easy to understand. Grammer is good and everything is amazingly organized and professionally placed. The cover is pretty attractive and usually if I don't like the first chapter I don't read it because I am really choosy and hard to select because its hard for me to like something so I am proud that I could enjoy your story and I can also do review. I didn't even break a sweat reading it so in my POV its really good and there's nothing to change 📖😊

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Ok, so the introduction is good and I liked that you kept it, First person, I don't know why but people think a character introducing themselves is immature (I don't think that way) The plot is different from most of the books I have read.

Ok, the chapters are too long then usual but what you can do is like divide them and add them into more chapters that way it wouldn't be a crowdy.
Also, leave a cliff-hanging scene at the end of chapters so it can excite the reader to read more.

I won't say anything about grammar though I am not a expert at it myself.

Plot is good but it's predictable. Identifications are interesting also!!

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This is my First time rating 5/5 for all categories.
Ok so I like Myla's character so much I mean I want to snatch her strong personality. This shows how the writer put so much effort that everything seems so real. It's my honest review. As you mentioned it's not edited so I am not gonna include it. Btw please review my story, Jena, as this review was a deal of our review swap. And also keep up this amazing book.
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I hate it 🤮🤮🤢🤢

Seriously, I don't like it...😒🙄🤮🤧🥵🤮🤮🤮🤮🤕🤕🤕🤮🤮🤮

I Love It 🤩😍😍🥰🥰 It's so good and I never was into alphas but this only one chapter changed everything. I live the character of Elizabeth and I also have an aunt I am close to. The grammar, ahh breathtaking 😘😇😇😊Well sorry for the Prank I did 🆙

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Ok, so I expected some chapters but there was only a first chapter, I gotta say it's a cliffhanger that brings curiosity to the reader's mind, wanting to read more and the scene of the Paris and ducks seems like a scenario of Miraculous Ladybug so honestly, it's an amazing start! I am kinda obsessed with it so hoping for more chapters... 😀😇🥰 Can you review my story " Villa of Hills " because this review was a deal of our swap. This is an Honest review, there really is nothing boring so it's addictive 😊😇

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Jena

First try and amazing work

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The Plot is super interesting to read and one other thing is that its appropriate for All ages .. Its similar to pixie cartoon and tinker bell , just a few grammar problems but otherwise its super great . You can show this to some adult who is good at English and help you with it .. otherwise keep it up , I would be waiting for Chapter 2 👋

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