Adlyne

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Maybe it's because I just read few chapters that am still getting my head wrapped in the story. But am interested to know more about Mr Bundy and what led him to kill hoping to find the thrill not to forget what the Amore and her friend will do.

It is an interesting story full of mystery and am looking forward to it.

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Loved it!

What I liked about this book, is how it talked about lack of communication in a relationship and how it can affects the family.

I kind of like Leah's character. Even after finding she was cheated she put on a strong front even though she was burning in the inside.

Character's development is the best and I love the suspense.

Can't wait to read the next chapter!

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Amazing

For one, I dislike nothing of the story. From the story's title; Whispers of the heart talks more about what our hearts want to say, but because of our uncertainties, and doubts which are traitors, keep stopping us.

The first story hooked me and I am in love with the characters from Mayuki to her three friends and her crush.

The second story also is amazing. The strong bond of friendship between the girls and the trauma that Kate tries to evade by building strong walls around her. I love jaxon persistence and how he keeps trying to knock those walls down.

You are creative, and a good writer. Looking forwards to the next chapters.

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Interesting

Beautiful and interesting story. At first, I was confused by so many changes in scenes but now I got it. I love Sarah's character and feel sad that she had to endure all that. Quite a turn of events at the end and something tells me that it is about to become fiction.

Looking forward to the next chapters

What I would advise you, though, is to install Grammarly to help with correcting traumatic errors and would also advise you to make it clear when changing scenes so that one would not be confused.

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Fantastic

I am never a fan of military stories, but this one is fantastic. The fantasy that comes with it. The suspense, and twist of events, excite me the most. It had left me wanting more.

I am in love with Marie and Venessa's characters. One is patient and the other is not so patient. I guess the opposite attracts.

Anyway. Good job.

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The story is nice and intriguing, but it gets hard to understand due to the lack of paragraphs and grammatical errors.

Personally, it feels like you are rushing making the story like you are telling it and not expressing it. I would also recommend you try expressing the dialogue instead of stating them.

Still am looking forward to more chapters.

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Honestly, I would advise you to slow down. I can see that you are in a rush to finish the book, hence leaving out the most crucial thing, which is building a plot.

Aurora is supposed to be a powerful character, you can try and build more of her than just stating and continuing.

Another thing is the flow of the story. When you want to write about the events that took place in the past, kindly avoid jumping to it directly. It becomes tiring and confusing to the reader.
For example

'I took Mateo's phone and dialed a number...

Two months ago

'I entered the house only to find people in the house...

You can try and put it like this;

'I took Mateo's phone, and dialed a number....my heart was on the brink of leaping out of my chest as it rings. I could not help but recall what took place two months ago. It felt like ages when I entered the house only to find people in the house... I was pulled out of my thoughts when he answered the phone.

'Please save me,'

Not exactly the words you wrote, just giving you the example. Just try to create the flow that will entice the reader to go on.

In the last chapter, I read, I saw that you change POV. I'd recommend that if you have to change the POV in the middle of the chapter, make it stand out. E.g instead,

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Emilia
******

You can try,
*********

Emilia (In bold or underline)

***********
All in all, I like story and it's interesting. I am curious to know who is the mastermind behind the killing of Aurora's father.

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Wonder

Wonderful, amazing story! This has to be the most captivating story that got me enthralled throughout the journey. I cried I laughed, I blushed, and even fell in love with the characters, from Chuora, El, Lilith, Max, Keith, Morgan, Ed, Pricilla, Camilla, the grand duos, Queen Renessa, Danny to Damien and Jasmine - my favorite - of course.

I love the way, you have developed their characters, portrayed the scenes, and expressed the emotions of struggle love, happiness, and pain. The story showed me, that even in the darkest pit, lies beauty.

I would, though, advise some editing, on closing punctuations.

I would recommend this book to anyone.

Nice work!

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Touching

I read the first book (BURSTING of the FLOWER) and loved it so much, I must say, that this is one kind of story that portrays a strong-willed woman, who never gave up no matter what.

But, I would like to advise you on re-editing as, there is a lot of grammatical errors, especially the punctuation, for example when quoting a character's speech, like:

"I loved you" "you were everything to me"

It's just wrong separating them into two different quotation, especially when it's the same person speaking and the same line.

Try like;

"I loved you," I started/said/began, "You were everything to me."

Also, avoid switching the writer's point of view in the same chapter without indicating as it confuses the reader.

Otherwise, great job. I simply love your book!

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Honestly. I was expecting a prince charming, or hot CEO saving a damsel in distress but this is just amazingly, unexpected.

I love the story, I love it's originality. You've actually told a story that sadly happens every part of the world. I love Cherish.

Her character shows a strong, little girl who ran from her abusive home, a strong teenage girl, who put an end from being sexually abused and fought the addiction as well.

A strong woman, who understood, that as how much one loves a person, physical abuse is not right.

A strong woman who fought and fulfilled her dream.

I love the book generally but would also recommend editing it. Their are some grammatical errors and incorrect punctuations. Other wise, looking forward for what happens next.

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I have yet to finish the book, but am already liking it. At first, I was a little bit confused but got hooked eventually.

The letter was my favorite, I loved the way you portrayed the emotions, told a story of many years. Too touching.

I love your writing style, the flow and the sayings before the story begins. Great work!

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Writing Stlye

the story is amazing and the plotting is on point but when it comes to styling you keep mixing first person point of view and the third person point of view.
That mistake tend to confuse the reader as to whom is telling the story.
All in all, its a nice story.

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Perfect

I honestly loved everything about this book.
It was interesting and if their were any mistakes then I missed them.
Good job

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Perfect

I actually love everything about this story. The plot and the flow is just perfect. You let the readers feel every emotions and that makes it the best

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Like it

I love the style, the way you embraced your country's tradition by including the accent, the plot. Everything is just good
I would absolutely recommend this book to othera

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Nice

I love the story alot but the character of Venesa confuses me, I mean before he did not like Nathan then a day he lies him even responds emotionally

I would recommend this book to my friends

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