A Fascinating & Fun Concept With Lots of Promise
This is a fun and fascinating story about familiar characters in a less-familiar world. I loved the usage of so many mythological deities, and how they interacted with each other, mostly through friendly (and not-so-friendly) banter, and not so much through violence, which is great. Who doesn't want to read about a friendship between Loki, the Trickster God, and Asmodeus the demon?
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I like that the chapters are long. This is definitely against the Inkitt norm, as they recommend 1000 - 1500 words, but this is the author's style and they have remained true to it. I like the cliffhanger endings to chapters, and I am very much interested in how the Devil will be pursuing Asmodeus and his friends, and what will happen when he finds them.
I do think that there is some room for development in the writing style. Some paragraphs feel very long - perhaps they should be broken apart to make them more digestible. This is particularly true when considered in conjunction with the long chapters - it can be daunting.
I think there is also opportunity to shorten some sentences - not that there are run-on sentences, but varying sentence length in a paragraph makes it more fluid to read. Try following a long sentence with a short one, I think you will find the paragraphs flow more smoothly.
Overall, this is a great start to an exciting premise. I will certainly be keeping up with further chapters as they are released, and very much look forward to meeting more deities, as well as learning more about the ones we have already met.