A. D. Walker

Intriguing Start!

Although there is only one chapter currently available, I am already captivated with The Reversal. You have quickly established our protagonist as a strong character (having escaped from a mysterious cult (which I am very much interested in learning more about)) with relatable, human anxieties. We also have already been introduced to the idea of reverse speech, which promises to be a defining aspect of this story.

I think the writing style is fun ('my simmering sulkiness and a packet of clinkers' is my favourite!), and the grammar is solid. Although just a matter of opinion, I think you should write out the word for single-digit numbers (two instead of 2, four instead of 4). I find that it makes the paragraph visually flow a little more fluidly.

An intriguing start! I will definitely be reading more as further chapters are released.

A Fascinating & Fun Concept With Lots of Promise

This is a fun and fascinating story about familiar characters in a less-familiar world. I loved the usage of so many mythological deities, and how they interacted with each other, mostly through friendly (and not-so-friendly) banter, and not so much through violence, which is great. Who doesn't want to read about a friendship between Loki, the Trickster God, and Asmodeus the demon?

I like that the chapters are long. This is definitely against the Inkitt norm, as they recommend 1000 - 1500 words, but this is the author's style and they have remained true to it. I like the cliffhanger endings to chapters, and I am very much interested in how the Devil will be pursuing Asmodeus and his friends, and what will happen when he finds them.

I do think that there is some room for development in the writing style. Some paragraphs feel very long - perhaps they should be broken apart to make them more digestible. This is particularly true when considered in conjunction with the long chapters - it can be daunting.

I think there is also opportunity to shorten some sentences - not that there are run-on sentences, but varying sentence length in a paragraph makes it more fluid to read. Try following a long sentence with a short one, I think you will find the paragraphs flow more smoothly.

Overall, this is a great start to an exciting premise. I will certainly be keeping up with further chapters as they are released, and very much look forward to meeting more deities, as well as learning more about the ones we have already met.

A satisfying and fun story which will leave the reader reminiscing about their childhood

Ruins at Dawn is a fun and sweet story which aptly captures the perspectives of it's young protagonists without feeling simple or cheesy. I loved the friendship between Zoey and Damien, and the ease with which they understood each other. I thought that it was an interesting technique to use a different voice for the first and last chapters, and I loved the optimistic but ambiguous ending.

The book features a lot of dialogue, which can be tricky to balance, but it was always easy to read and understand. Conversations felt natural, and the humour, though subtle, consistently landed. The reader will frequently find themselves smiling and relating to Zoey's inner monologues.

Punctuation and grammar were great, and the formatting of the book was perfect. I do feel that some of the chapters could be longer, although I also recognize that part of the charm of this book is the clean and simple progression of the plot.

All in all, Ruins at Dawn is a satisfying and fun story which will leave the reader reminiscing about their childhood.

Singing Your Praises

I think this story has a lot of potential! There is still a lot of plot to come, and I am unsure of the direction the book is going in. Will Chloe end up with her childhood crush? Will she and Lila end up fighting? I don't know, and that's good - it keeps the reader in the dark! The dialogue is written well, the characters are relatable, and I like the use of song - it is clear that the author has an interest and familiarity with this world.

I did notice some grammatical errors - nothing overt, but there is room for editing (ie. some words are missing, story jumps from present tense to past tense in a few paragraphs). Nevertheless, an interesting premise with lots to come! I'll keep an eye on this one for sure.

Loved Writing This!

The platform let's me write a review on my own book, so I figured, why not? 5 Stars!

Interesting concept that needs revision

I want to preface this review by acknowledging that there is an interesting premise here, and you clearly have a vision of what you want this story to make the reader feel. However, I don't think you're there yet. I like the use of blog entries as chapters, and I think using the entry dates as chapter titles is an interesting technique. However, as the book goes on, certain chapters feel real-time, rather than recollections.

I found some story points entirely unbelievable. After witnessing a terrible death of the police officer, they decide to go back into the house? They then decide to go investigate the attic? Abigail decides to burn the house down without even investigating if her partner is still alive? Malcolm thought everything could be attributed to HONEY?

I also found that the writing needs editing and refinement. For example, Abigail commented that the police officer's death was 'one of the most horrific she had ever witnessed'. How many horrific deaths has Abigail witnessed? I understand what you mean, but this should edited. Perhaps instead, 'the most horrific she could imagine'.

I also noted some spelling and grammar errors. Perhaps some can be explained away because these are blog posts, but I still feel these should be corrected.

Overall, I believe there is absolutely potential here. They story has the components and building blocks which make up a good horror, but it needs refinement and revision. Keep writing and you'll have something here!

Looking forward to reading more!

As someone who is unfamiliar with both Fae and the erotica genre, I thought this was a great introduction to both. With regards to erotica, I found it was used tastefully. I like that these scenes are not simply erotica for the sake of erotica; you learn about the character and the plot progresses. This is an important line to maintain, and I feel you've done that.

With regards to Fae, I've heard the term but am not familiar with the species. Yet, without you directly explaining anything, I feel I have a good foundation of what these creatures are. You've educated me without hitting me with definitions. Great!

There is quite a lot of plot to come, but I feel that it is moving in a promising direction. Will we meet the family? Will we see the homeland? Where does the title, Locked By Destiny, come into play? I'm intrigued by both the direction and the characters, look forward to learning more about them. I did notice a couple of grammatical issues, but something substantial, and nothing another round of edits won't catch!

Overall, I am looking forward to learning more about Angeline and her family, and will certainly be following as further chapters are published.

A Familiar Setting With Unfamiliar & Dark Undertones

Fallen Stars details the protagonist's transition to a new school on the far side of the country. I found that the teenager's moodiness was well encapsulated, and it was refreshing to see this take the form of disinterest or introversion, rather than anger or rudeness. The author has also taken care to establish the characters and not rush the plot of the story; only after the most recent chapter do we begin to see the plot's 'problem' arise.

We are already seeing some foreshadowing - insects eating other insects and drawings of angry dogs hint that there is darkness to come. I also like that Tyler, for instance, is more complex than the simple the 'dreamboat' Cassie might have thought, and the ominous note at the end of 'Purple' is plot point I did not anticipate.

I did notice some grammatical issues throughout. Nothing substantial, and nothing a good edit won't fix, but something to keep an eye on! I also personally find it very difficult to write in 'real time', so I commend the author for taking this direction, however there were a few instances where we jumped between past and present tense which I found a little confusing.

Ultimately, I think this is a great start with a unique writing style. I know there is a lot more plot to come, and I am very much unsure of the direction it will be taking - which is great, because it will keep the reader interested. I'll will absolutely be reading the next chapters as they come out.

Definitely one to keep up with

To Fool a Billionaire immediately captures our attention and doesn't let go.

The first chapter details the initial interaction between our protagonist and a mysterious stranger. What could have been written as a simple and mundane conversation is instead rife with humour and emotion. It is immediately evident that the author has a strong understanding of both character and how to portray it.

Although it is difficult to predict where the plot will go (given that there is only one chapter available), I feel confident that it will continue draw the reader in. Regardless of the plot's direction, the writer's style will keep us engaged.

Definitely one I will keep up with.