Parris jon arden Young

Is OK

This is a 'nice' piece of writing, but I am going to put it aside at this point for several reasons.

First, the writer uses too many words that are vague. I want to know exactly where I am and exactly with whom. I can follow the story, but so much is left in a pleasant fog. Has the narrator ever seen an Agmare? Exactly what does an adult Agmare look like? I am not interested in generalities (normally) but I want to meet one of these lovely trouble-makers face-to-face if they are going to be at the center of the story. I want to get a good idea of the personality of at least one of them.

There is a dream-like quality to the story; the reader is carried along like a leaf on the wind, and I suppose this reflects the consciousness of Chris, the narrator and protagonist. In this age, soft politics is not enough.
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Great graphic at the top of the story; actually reflects the character of the narrator and story.

From what I have read up to this point I believe the reader is quite young and has not pushed her writing under the nose of critical readers; that always gives one a few bruises, but with a sharp reader capable of giving gentle constructive criticism the writer than win quickly what would otherwise take years of normal feedback and maturation.

I admit I am interested, but with all the wonderful writing available and the fact we only live a few years, I want to read a story that grabs my imagination, threatens me and us, intrigues my mind, makes me laugh outright, or curls around my heart like a kitten lying across neck or a small snake wound around where my thumb and forefinger touch.

Tentative sip

This is not really a review. I've read only two chapters.
Normally I don't care much for urban gritty lit, but this actually pretty good. It rolls along from the "mouth" of a 15-year-old, but it feels like the author is older and has seen some action. There is a thread of subtle humor that adds a taste of time in the oaken barrel.
The writing is good. Language hardward just fine ... that means I am not put off by mistakes of spelling or punctuation. It remains mostly invisible: a good thing.
I think I will stick with this and read for enjoyment, judgment (yeah, I'm judgmental), and, since I am intrigued with the delightful, if not a tiny bit cliche, foreshadowing. I expect to be pleased.
I will write another "review" when I have more impressions.
i hope this comment is of some help.