Silver Taurus

Review

A short nice story, that captivates you since the beginning. I'm in love with it since the start, the way you describe things and the words used wow. The flow of the story was good and I like the interaction. It had nice details and I could envision the entire story. Nicely done!

Locked by Destiny

A slow paced story with a touch of fae and different universe. idk it made me want to know what's the secret and how the plot will move on. You got talent and it was quite spicy on the start I have to say!
Excellent work, continue going forward!

BRAVO!

This short story should be turned into a complete book, What a fascinating and thrilling story with myserty and death. Wow just wow. I have to say it captures you instantly and gives you the thrills. Totally recommend this book!
Kudos to you!

review

First of the plot of the story is promising. Quite good and you can see the potential on it. What the book needs improvement on is the editing of paragraphs and dialogue. They need to be separated instead of a whole mass.
This will give the readers a good flow as they read. Also it will help the story structure look organized. I recommend some editing on that area as well as making sure punctuations are good. Don't forget to show emotions so you can capture the heart, body and soul of the reader.
Nice beginning so keep it up.

Review

First of the story is amazing, a great plot, with a great imagination. Their a few details that can be better but as a first timer you're doing awesome! The story is also starting so the characters will evolve and have a more amazing connection.
The interaction between them is amazing. I hope you support this author!
Keep it up, you can do it!

Review

Interesting plot and story. Really different adn like the scifi and mystery behind it. That's how I perceived it.
The story structure is good and flow is nice. Since the beginning the story captures your attention, so it's good!
Love the development and how they feel the challenge in their lives. It's really creative have to say!
Well done and keep it up!

Review

First off, I like the summary, the intro took me off guard but in a cool way. It pulled me into the story and what to expect. Another thing, wow the universe you describe and details on this is awesome. You created a universe of your own. You can see that you took your time and dedication with passion to it.

My only note is the paragraphs. I advice you divide the paragraph. they were quite long and doesn't help the reader have a rest, Also affects the flow and structure which in this case could be awesome if you edit it a bit.

Overall the story was good, an I have to say you got me hooked. I totally recommend it to anyone interesting in scifi/ mystery. Its really creative so Kudos to the author!

Intersting!

Very intriguing story since the first chapter. I have to say you caught my attention. It definitely draws you in. The creativity and writing style is amazing. I felt I was reading a diary of sorts. The story structure was good and flow was nice. Hope I can read more, very well done and I reccomend for the ones wishing to read something different and exciting!

King!

I have to say people you will love it! Eli outdid herself here and I know all of you will like the story! king my man is the best. I congratulate the writer in this, well done on your second book! so I invite you check it out, an amazing author with a talent that will leave you baffled.
keep up the good work and support her!

Stoic

Amazingly and different form most books. This story shows the true feelings and nature of how us human beings may be. the mistakes and imperfections that we tend to have but at the same time it shows how a single person can change. throughout his or her life.
A very good and well written story. Hats off to the author and keep up the good work.

Anyone interested in a different romance check this out. Highly recommented!

Interesting

So far its interesting and has potential. I encourgae you to conitnue it.
It's nice and descriptive has a good touch of fantasy and I love the flow. The charatcer looks tough. Baddass in other words. Love it would love to see more of it! Kudos to you!

Potential

Story structure is good a lot of potential, because it's not only different but has a nice flow.
But I still find it confusing. I know sounds contradicting, but that's because how the dialogue flows. Its kind of hard to know who is speaking. Would suggest a different approach.
Saw minor mistakes here and their Also would advice to use something for proofreading, it will help.
I like it because it's a supernatural story. being a writer of supernatural totally understand the meaning and excitement of writing in a hurry, but i've learned to take it slow. so I advice you to do a small recheck on it.
Overall it has potential, it captures you since the first chapter so keep up the good job!

Fate

For some reason when I began reading this it reminded me of my first story. The cuteness and how she was paired with someone she hasn't met begin. This story is a romance with a touch of cuteness. Anyone interested in romance with squeezing love this is your story.

Overall good, love the development and description of the story. The progress and flow it good, not rush. Very good author keep it up!

5/5

wow nothing like a good mystery book. Love the story. It captures you in the moment and different things happened along the way.
Love your writing style! This story is recommended totally recoomended!

Wow

So I got to the first chapters and wasn't able to continue without writing a review!
If I'm a sucker for things, its supernatural. Never expected it to be a succubus here. Amazing, I'm honestly in love. It was captivating since you start reading the summary. Love how things develop. Can't wait to continue reading. Well done author!

Daddy's Girl

Interesting story, I have to say. It's different to what I have read. The story structure is good, the development also. But I would like to see how they got there. what is his problem and what makes him have those mood swings.
I'm also curious to know more about her,
I give this a five out of five becaus it has potential and is amazing. I love the pace. Wellk done author! Kudos to you! XX

WOW In love with it!!

I'm In love with this story! Can't wait to read more!
I'm amazed at the creativity and detail you put into the story. The story structure and flow is amazing. Wow and the name of the place reminds me of a movie, the prince of Persia.
Very good, can't wait for next update!

TOTAF

Where do I begin.

First I got to say the story is nice. The creativity is good but I felt it was a bit fast pace.
Second as I read more I felt a bit confuse on how thing where developing. Also the extra at the end. it confused more.
It felt like it was missing something as the story flows.
I'm usually honest so, I think the story can be good juts make sure to make things a bit more clear.
Like that it has Korean or Japanese roots.

Interesting

Overall story, it's interetsing so far, got to say it felt a bit fast faced.
I like that's a werewolf story, I'm a fan of those.
Writing I would suggest to edit a bit. I know you do it and can be fix. Just small mistakes on some paragraphs nothing more.
I have to say I'm not a fan of using (') on the dialogue, lol makes me think something else when reading it. like thought instead of a dialogue.
I would also suggest more twist and turns.
But overall is a good story. Keep it up so it can develop nicely! XX

TDTCML

Story overall it has potential. But let me point out some small things so it can turn into a magnificent book.
The story structure needs editing, with dialogue and grammar mistakes.
the paragraphs need to be separated from the dialogue so it doesn't confuse the readers.
The story has a nice plot revolving around it, but with editing can be better.
I also advice that when you write time or numbers in overall use the lettering. it helps it.
Fluidity needs to be done on the book.
Hope this helps. Keep it up!!

Nicely Done

Ok let's start with the story. The summary is promising, and the story develops nicely, a little more of description and structure on the story would do some good.
The intriguing mystery on what will happen caught your attention.
Now for overall. I like the story has potential and the only thing i would advise would be separate the paragraphs from dialogue. Maybe make the paragraphs shorter four to five sentences. Grammar and punctuation need edit, which I don't mind but with the help of editing it will look better, Keep up the excellent work! XX

BEST BOOK EVER!

PEOPLE THIS IS THE BEST BOOK EVER! ONCE YOU READ THIS YOU FALL IN LOVE, SADLY IT DIDN'T FINISH HERE.... BUT I WOULD MAYBE FUTURE AHEAD READ IT ON DREAME. THIS WAS SUCH A WONDERFUL BOOK AND LEAVES YOU DESIRING MORE. RECOMMENDED FULLY RECOMMENDED HEHEH.
THANKS AUTHOR FOR AN AMAZING BOOK!

Amazing

Wow I had to say I got goosebumps when I read this. My mind wander to future events. Idk why this had everything simply everything. The short story was good. Grammar none, and overall like the concept and story structure. Amazing really! ❤️

Well done

Like the idea on to write the story, really well done. Like the first chapters because it's from long ago and memories of what happened make the story intriguing. I like it a lot well done 👏 👏

Good Read

Intersting story, not my type to read but caught my attention. Style writting interesting. Love the structure. Didn't notice mistakes, keep up the good work. It's a nice fantasy world.

Reminded me of Narnia

First of all It reminded me of narnia, LOl
Now going over the story, It's a fantasy world. So far good, it seems this will take a good turn. Hope to see or hear more of this world he will venture to. Grammar so one mistake but can be fixed with editing so no problem their. I as a fantasy lover love the book, looking foward to new parts, so keep up the good work!

Interesting

Interesting way to write short stories, I thought it was more than one chapter. But nice keep it up!

Interesting

Interesting, and nice.

Love you're way of writing, barely notice mistakes. would like more dialogue.

Mysterious

Wow this is definitely mysterious, wow you hit my attention and in amazed in how you develop it. Also I like your way of writing, no mistakes that I could see of and it's an interesting story in the aspect of captivating you, leaving wanting more. Well done an d can't wait for more

Mysterious

Got the appealing of mysterious. Author did her out most.
Minor needs to be fixed and that can be done, it will be an interesting book, which got to say it got my attention. Mystery is something I like and hope to see twists and turns of who did all this.

so keep it up author!

Nice

Poems I love..its nice to read honest poems! should keep adding more! well done!!

The Lycan of Wisteria Falls

Amazing story and plot line. It's short and I have to say I love it.
Love your writing and the details!
Amazing as always!

OOHHHH 🤩🤩

Well that's creative, I have to say as a vampire fan, this is spicy and I love were this is heading. It's her story with so much passion and need that it's incredibly going how I didn't expect.
Really creative and congrats to the author for doing a good job! Keep it up!!

Review

A different and refreshing story. I've never seen this type of story with a good plot line.
It immersive and that's good.
My advice here is try to make the story structure flow, so the readers can find it easy and not tiring to the eye. The long paragraphs try to separate them; make them shorter.
Also a few minor wording here but with editing that can be fixed.
Overall good as it's beginning, we would need to see the story unfold.
Kudos!

Review

Wow what an intense story, the thriller and mystery on it has you interested since the start. It makes you wonder what is really happening or who are they.
the story flows nice and the story structure is good. I recommend this story and to the writer too promote it a lot!
Kudos to you amazing work!

Review

Ok, Let's start this review.
First off, I have to say this story has potential and a great plot. The only problem here is descritpion to how she feels, how she got there and what and how things transpire form one to another. I feel it lacks a bit of more description which will help the story structure flow nicely for the reader.
The story plot is amazing, I would suggest to expand the chapters more and make this book longer with the views of the characters clear.
If you can also seperate the dialogue a bit between the characters will help. The flow between the dialogue confused me a bit. But don't give up and keep writing.

There's also minor mistakes that can be edited. If you can use Grammarly for those mistakes it will help.
Good work and keep it up, you can do it gurl!

Hale!

And it's finally here!
I've been reading this book on her Patreon since the last two months and I have to say wow! I do have a crush on this guy.
It's intense, heartwarming, and dang has a good plot. I totally reccomend it.
Another vampire story worth it!

Thanks for the amazing books!

Review

I had to do my own review and all I can say is give this twist and turn and not your ordinary werewolves book a try. I think that if you're looking for something out of the ordinary this is for you. I totally recommend it and I know you won't be disappointed!
😊😁🙌

Review

An interesting, dark romance story which can be related to true life events if you see it from a point of view. The story starts good and has a nice flow, the story structure is also good. Would like to see more, so keep it up!

Review

Intertaining, different and it has life! Love the concept and details on the story. The flow is good and keeps you hooked. Very well done and kudos to the writer!

Review

A very interesting story. Since I saw the word piano I was captivated. I'm a sucker for pianist and loved how the story started to develop. A very nice and creative idea. The flow and structure was good and I totally recommend this. IT's different and you won't be disappointed! Very well done and kudos to you!

Interesting

A short yet interesting story. Quite different where human and beast clash and they know one must live an die. It's simple and easy to understand. The story structure is good as well! Very well done!

Unique

First off wow, what an intriguing story. The idea and creation put into it is amazing. I love the plot and the details. It gives this mysterious feeling.
The flow and story structure were good and the fact you gave so little hint on the summary makes it intriguing.
Very well done keep it up!

Review

First off I didn't read the first so I'm a bit lost were this is going, but the story looks promising.
The flow and structure are nice and the details are good. Its a nice story with potential. I recommend anyone interested in a nice romance story. Verywell done and keep it up!

Review

Nice story, a fanfiction to an amazing story. I have to say its nice and made me laugh on certan parts as I imagine the guys doing so. The story flow and structure is good. The detals are good as well. I totally recommend it to BTS fans, nicely done so keep up the good work!

Beautiful

I have to say another Poetry boom that pulled me in and made me think about life. I love how you wrote it and how much of your feelings you poured. Really flawless and simple. Kudos to you!

Poetry!

As a poetry lover, theirs never a single book that dissapoints. Thanks for sharing this heartwarming poetry. I'm glad I got a chance to read it and I have to say you had me thinking about life. Very well written, kudos to you!

Wow

Now this is an amazing book! I'm thrilled to be reding this. The fantasy world you created is amazing.
I like the flow and story structure. It captivates you since the summary, literally.
It's well written, didn't notice any mistakes. You can see the dedication and time the author has poured here. I totally recommend it! Kudos to you!

Wow

I have to say I love the story, wow you made me choke on the first chapter. Your way of writing and describing the details was so good, it reminded me of someone. I felt the emotions they were and the conflict they had between them. I have to say I was captivated since the first chapter. Really interesting and nice. I didn't notice any mistakes so I didn't point any out. The flow and structure well nice and I totally recommend this story, also I advice you promote this book on peoples walls, invite them to read this cause its worth it. Once again well done!

New Story!

Though its only one chapter you can get a glimpse of were this story will go. Expect dark romance, maturerness and a glimpse of dangerous yet Mysterious feelings. The story will be amazing and I advice you add it to your list. Go girl and keep it up!

Review

First of all it's a story that's starting so though it barely has chapters, still will point out some things so you can improve. Then first of all, this is a highschool story, the girl is quite shy and she is lovely. Well I found her lovely and cute in her own way. The writer took its time and dedication on every little detail which I like. Stories with details are the best. The flow and structure are nicely done. Small minor mistakes that can be edited once you finish the story. So there's no issue their. The story development will progress nicey, so I reccomedn to make it a long nice story so every reader can get a feeling of what they will experience and how they will grow.
Kudos to the author and well done!

Review

First of all good start, you can immediately the main character and see the way she will be and act. My only advice here is the Paragraphs, try to make them at least six lines. so the reader can't get tired from reading a long paragraph. Also if you make it shorter it will help n your chapters. The story structure and flow are good, just a bit of change on the paragrpah and will be awesome. I didn't notice grammar mistakes and though the story is beginning it's still heading on a good direction.
Kudos to you and keep it up1

Ink

What a well written story and beautiful. It's really descriptive and detail, which helps you get immersed in her world. I love how it flows and the story structure is good.
Very nice and you get to understand the story, kudos to the writer!

Interesting

A love story with pure sweetness.
Interesting plot need to know more of it. Like the idea and the flow. Minor mistales that can be edited but Hey who doens't make at least a mistake. We learn and from that we grow.
Kepp the good work and give it a lot of potential. It's a ncie swet story and iit got me off guard. Didn't expect it to be like this. well done and keep up the good work!

Love

It's a story about teenage love. You can get to see that, things might really turn forbidden, but not that forbidden after all.
Story structure was good, it has a good flow. But would reccomend the writer to do a check up. The transition between POV's was lacking conection. I also felt the story a bit quick a bit more background would be good. I gave that rating also because The book is starting and not completed.
Hope you give twist to it and it's a nice story. I reccommend it for the ones who love romance/ teenager schools.

Keep up the good work!

Surrogate1

INTERESTING STORY, HAD TO SAY FELL TO IT BY ACCIDENT. DON'T UNDERSTADN HOW THIS DOESN'T HAVE REVIEWS STILL.

oVERALL OF THE STORY, GOOD, LIKE THE DEVELOPMENT EVENTHOUGH IT WAS CONFUSING CERTAIN MOMENTS. FLOW OF THE STORY IS GOOD, IT ATTRACTS AND CAPTURES YOUR ATTENTION. nEED ABIT OF MORE MYSTERY TO WHAT HAPPENED AND ALL.
SAW SMALL MISTAKES BUT THAT NROMAL, SO NOTHING AN EDIT CAN'T FIX.
LOVE THE MALE LEAD HE LOOKS DIFFERENT AND THE FEMALE LEAD ALSO, HER CHARACTER IS UNIQUE, EVEN THOUGH A BIT MORE OR BACKGROUND FROM HER WOULD DO GOOD.
I TOTALLY RECOOMEND THIS STORY, YOU'RE DOING AWESOME SO KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!

Wow Amazing!

This is amazing, you had my heart here. Always love a good korean story. This reminded me of Mulan though ehehhe.
Story structure good, love the flow of the story. Really descriptive and detailed. Love how the roles here were destributed and they characters were so good. This had me on tears for a moment. Well done hope you're proud of it! Keep up the good work!

INSISTENT

I have to say I love it!
Really good story captivated me.
The story structure and flow is good. It allows readers to undertsnad the story clearly. Liked the FL she is strong and fierce but has her cuteness on the side. Like how the story developed. Really good. Didn't notice mistakes. Maybe was immersed on it.
Overall good story with potential, keep up the good work!

Poetic

Love how poetic this sounded. The vision you tried to make the readers have, you accomplished. Like the way you wrote it and the flow was nice.
Saw no mistakes, The chapters were short but captivating. Interetsing book and interesting way of writing. Keep up the good work!

Love Story

Story structure needs a bit of work. I would suggest the dialogue to be separated. it will give the reader a better flow to the story. I like the plot the characters are realistic and you will feel the protagonist how strong she is. That's what I like about this.
Would also suggest that when it comes to writing a number in the story use lettering instead of the actual number ex: twenty third instead of (23)
And try to omit emojis remember it's a story. I know you wrote some diaries entry and all, but I advice as a fellow writer to omit them. Hope this helps.
Any other constructive criticism, just keep up the good work and stay positive!

Interesting!

Now this is interesting story. Like how you are developing it. The flow is good. the only thing I feel uncomfortable with is the way they address each other. maybe because I'm not the type of person who like people addressing each other or me like that. It makes me feel uncomfortable.
But overall good work. It's different hoe this has a lot of twist and turns.
Grammar mistakes didn't notice. so good!

Caged

The story structure is quite good. If my guess is not wrong their will develop nicely, but I suggest a couple of things. for example the short breaks in the paragraphs, feel like they make things not flow nicely. So this affects the reading. Another advice will be time. when it comes to time, try to use lettering instead of numbers.
The story would look good with twist and turns. More character description and development will help also. But overall good.

Good

Overall story structure good, The characters were good but a bit more of development on them will be good. Love the flow it has a nice flow to it as you read. The story has potential.
Minor mistakes that can be fix but not something it bothers. Overall good, I can reccommend this!
Keep it up author and hats off to you!

Good

Good story with high potential.
The story structure is good, decription and flow are good also. Love the FC she's feisty and I like strong females. I like the story has this romantic but with a touch of mystery and thrill to it.
Hats of author continue doing a good job!

She Feisty!

I have to say She's definitely Feisty!!

Wow this story has a lot! I love the Fl she has character. she reminds me of my own characters. Shes dominant, doesn't tolerate anything, or anyone!
Overall of the story good. Story strructure and descritption are well done. I like how the story develops. So keep up the good work!!

Grayson!

Have to admit this is the type of book I love. The amazing thriller and mystery surrounding the story is one I like. I imagine my stories being more like this dark.
Overall story good. Nice writing style and technique. I like how the story develops and expect more twists to it.

Intriguing

I have to say at the beginning I got confused. Not only because the name Bee made me think of a girl, but how they interacted. After reading a while I understood Bee was a man. Omg, but no worries.

Overall story Amazing and intriguing. it has this touch of mystery with sexyness on it.
Hats of to the author for it writing. I definitely love how descriptive the story was. This is roller coaster of emotions and I bet as the story progress it will develop with a lot of twists and turns.
Kudos to you!!

Nice

Really good story.
Love the writing style eventhough I would suggest for the paragraphs to be a bit shorter. So it cna have a better flow.
Love the plot and character! Recommend it!

amazing!

Wow this is amazing! Love the whole plot and conceot of the story.
The story structure and flow where good.
This was new for me and totally reccomend it!
Well done man!

Nice!!

Got to say I was engrossed on it from the start, Love this. storry structure and flow is amazing.
Love the characters, its really interesting. I would reccomend this to everyone who loves romance, mystrry, thrill.
Kudos to the author!

Save me

Interesting story. Loe the story structure and flow.
I'm always a fan of strong female leads. And as a fellow writer I love this.
Its not your cliche story. So it's good. Well done author. Tjis is amazing!

Poems

Amazing!
I'm an admire for poems. Ithuink people who write poems understand themselves better than anyone!
This was beautiful, passionate love it! Well done!

Innocence

This definitely stole my innocence. This was cute, overbearing, beautiful, a complete wow. The author outdid herself. beautiful in every way. I have to say this was addictive and amazing. I love it completely. each character had everything.
It's true at first Freya's behavior confused me because she sounded like a ten-year-old girl instead of 17 but things started changing.
The overall story was amazing, plot, and development well structure. love the storyline, an amazing author. Kudos to you would love to read more!

Dare

This book has thriller, mystery, and emotions to it. Love the story development. Minor mistakes but it can be edited. I like the story structre, the decription well done. This is a thrilling book that captivates. Love how the author took the time to write this. Amazing feel proud XX

Mafia

Nothing like a bad boy and especially if the Mafia is included. First overall structure good, got me a bit confused at the names. But then got hang of it. The small advice I have or suggestion would be when using numbers instead of writing. (7) write it on lettering (seven)
secondly, saw minors mistakes but can be edited. The development so far is good. hope to see more. It's mafia so we need more of it.

Nice

This is an interesting story. I like the development of the story. With it a pleasant flow. I have to say this differs from what I usually read. But You capture me. The story structure is well written and the details are clear. Like the eerie feeling also that revolves around the story. I have to say I love it. well done!

Wow!

Wow this is fascinating. I honestly have to say wasn't expecting it to be about wolves!
But I love this. The story structure and flow is amazing. Like Sonia's character. she is amazing. Like how things develop! really well done. This is beautiful, make sure to promote it!

Rose

Interesting start have to say, It's intriguing and has this mysterious feeling to it.
It got me a bit confused though at the beginning, well the summary. I read it twice but I felt a bit lost.
Overall of the story. Good, like the flow and story structure. Didn't see mistakes, maybe I was engrossed but I like that the author was descriptive. Well done, keep it up!

Vampires

As a vampire lover and writer. I have to say it's an amazing book. The story tells a lot that captivates. The description is well written and the development of the story is nice. I like the story flow and how its easy to read. Amazing job!

Enchanted I am!

Wow Kudos to the author, I'm amazed at this story but before I start saying more, tag this Erotica LOL.
Back to review, Overall story structure amazing, Like the prologue and the development of the story. It has a nice flow to it and it captivates you as you read. Love that the author created this world full of fantasy.
This is an amazing story, I recommend it to anyone who loves Fantasy well done!

Red

Great name for book. and nice cover.
Over story structure good, just minor mistakes. I like the flow of the story. it gives a good read to the readers. It's a wolf story o It captures my attention. Hope to see more development and twist and turns to it.

Meet me

Story structure, good. It can have some Improvements on editing it. The mistakes are mostly commas and all that. The dialogue I think needs to be a bit more organized. Overall the story has a nice plot and it's different to what I have read before. Like the way things develop, just some editing is needed.

Fire

For some reason while I read the book it reminded me to another book I read. The author took it's time to describe and make this story a unique one. I see potential on it and just some small advice. When writing numbers instead of writing ( 9:10) write nine in the morning or things like that. try to round the number.
Saw some brief mistakes but editing can help, so no need to worry we all have them.
Keep it up and put more twists to the story!

Mystery

A story full of mystery and drama.
It's intriguing and interesting. My advice would be edit a bit the dialogues, I felt they where a tab confusing. Second, some grammar mistakes but that can be edited.
Story structure also needs a bit of editing, but overall the story has potential. it makes you wonder what happened to Ava. So keep it up!

Rich Kids

Unexpectedly I didn't expect this to be on a mental hospital. I thought it was going to revolve differently.
Overall good storry, some repeatitive but nothing outof the norm.
The flow is good and someone it made me feel strange in a good way.
The story has potential and even though its different. it's good. So keep up the good work! XX

Seth & Jacob

Interesting story got to admit.
Like the story structure and flow. How the charatcers feel and how he is struggling with himself.
It's my first timr reading this, but Kudos to you, it's well done. Didn't notice mistakes. LOl might be concentrated.
Be proud and keep it up! XX

Biters

Wow truly amazing. I like how the author makes you dive into a different and new world.
This is my first time reading something like this. I'm amazed wow.
Love the story structure and flow. I gice it a 10/10 wow.
Keep it up and make sure to promote it!

Oblivion

The story creativity is amazing. The author took his time and dedication into writing this story.
My only advice is when your writing the paragraphs and dialogues. Make sure to sepearte them, it will give the reader a bettter flow to it.
The idea and dialogue was good. That would be my only advice.
So keep it up.
Btw love the part where she found out about Rusoo LOl. Good!

Nadia

First thing First Story overall, good. the story structure and flow was amazing. What I like the most was the dialogue between the charactrs. it develops nicely and you can actually imagine being their.
I like how the auhtor took it's time to create this thrilling and mysterious world.
Kudos to you, Keep it up! Really good XX

Interesting Beginning

I had to admit this story has long paragraphs. the Story is really descriptive and brings you into that world. the author took it's time trying to creeate a story like this.
Overall good, it captures you since the first chapter. Hope to see more development and more twists.
This story has potential.
My only suggetsion would be maybe a bit more of dialogue?
Keep it up XX

Candy?

Wow got to say this had me with goosebumps. I'm usually not a horror fan, but wow this had my attention. I love how descriptive you where. The dedication and time was a good one here. Amazed by the author so well done!

Bad blood

Like the fact that the book title reminds me to one of my favorite songs.
Now moving to book, amazing story theirs this mesmerizing beginning. Always been a fan of tough female protagonist and this one has it.
Well done 👏

Esther

Overall of the story good, like the story structure it's well done. I like that the FL is nice and not your typical girl, because by the descritption she is kind of overwheight.
Didn't see mistakes and hope this story has a nice pace and development.
The author is doing a nice job and can't wait to read more weell done!!

Intirguing

The author was able to make this intriguing and mysterious. I'm a fan of mystery and the author nailed it I'm introguied to know more.
Overall the story has potential I expect future twist and turns and awesome development. The title and so far what I read leaves you wanting to know more. Really creative so Kudos to the author. Keep it up!

Interesting

Interesting story we have here. I like that the author took it's time on details. I like the story because it has this, mysterious and eerie feeling to it. The story has this dark feeling but with a fun touch.
Over all writing was good didn't notice mistakes. It has potential so I reccomend it!

Pet

Nothing like vampires, being a vampire lover and writer I always like to see others try to write ones. IT's refreshing and inspiring.
Now overall of the story, good story structure, except on chapter two felt the lines where a bit off. Second, I would advice for the first two chapters to be edited, but just the part where the POV names start. Too much space on it. Chapter three was better.
Grammatical mistakes saw a few but it can be fix so I don't mind that much, I've seen worse.
The story Dialogue well developed, like the fact that the FL is strong and fierce, hope this story develops into more and more twist and turns. Give that suspense. You already have a story where you portray what Vampires are and it's good.
Keep up the good work!

Interesting

Overall story is interesting, caught me off guard the first chapter, wasn't expecting a rush beginning. Mistakes, I saw a few but not a problem that can be fixed. The story structure, was good, some parts need to be more cleared. I felt a bit confused but eiting helps. It's a good wolf story, would like to see a lot of development and twist. Keep it up!

Amazing can't wait for the sequel!

I read this for the second time. The first time I stop half way because I wanted the author to edit and then complete the book. And I got to say I'm so excited I waited. This book is amazing, it gives you all the feelings and emotions possible and damn this was a turn when reana left, didn't expect it. Can't wait for the fallen crown and that new love interest.
Curious to know what truly will happen. Her mate, her white hair, the demon all. Can't wait. ❤️❤️

BB

Hmm It caught my attention that your story is Indian. I barely read the stories and the few I have are far intriguing.
First advice would be the space on each paragraph. it's only one space, so edit it, second, a bit more of detail, make it intriguing. the summary was different, but I suggest to add something else to it.
Over all by editing can be better kepp it up!

Hot cup

Interesting story. I can see the potential of being a great book.
Minor mistakes on the chapters. Love the flow and a great start kudos author. Hope you keep up the good work! XX

Poetry

Nice I got to say, i like this short and nice. feelings well described!

Intriguing!

It's really intriguing. The way the author writes is amazing. i like there's a lot in the story, capturing the attention of everyone. Keep it up!

Nice

I don't usually read stories like this, but i was captured instantly. a full bloom of roller coasters. keep up the good work!!

Touch of Romance

I'm amazed by the dedication the author put to it. I found this story so romantic and overhelming in a good way. the way the author makes you feel makes me think in my own personal life, especially with romantic people. This was a well done story, short and cute. hope to see more stories in the future!

Interesting way of writing.

Since i began reading it, I understood it was a play. It's unusual to find a story like this. It's intriguing. I wonder why the author went that way In the style of writing.
Overall like that the author took her time, in writing and describing. If my advice helps. I would suggest try going the other way? when it comes to writing I mean.
I know each author have there own writing style but it would be nice if you give the story line writing style a chance, may help in getting more readers. just a humble advice.
but everything is fine.
Don't feel bad and keep it up!

Needs improvement but is a nice story

Potentially its an interesting and nice story. Advice would be separate dialogue, paragraphs structure try to make them of four or five lines each. Punctuation as well. Otherwise well done.

Amazingly written

Very interesting and nicely done story. I got to say I love the story structure. Your way of writing is so fluent and so neat I was captivated. Like the story development. Well done! 5/5

interesting

a very nice and interesting story, since the beginning the summary gives you what you want. the story structure is good, just make it maybe a little bit shorter. Like the development and how its progressing. Well done!

interesting

really interesting has a lot of potential. totally recommend!

Interesting in a strange way

Got to say, that's unusual to see a book with an opening like this. The simple explanation and time the author took to explain how things will develop is intriguing. Usually a story doesn't give that much of a background info.
Overall now the story has a well-done structure, clearly thought through. It will develop nicely so good job author and recommend anyone who like mystery.

The lost queen

Beautiful story i lie the main character. She has a lot on her plate but you can see her develop through the story. I'm intrigued to see more. Love the concept and structure of the story. Can't wait for more. Keep it up!! I will be waiting for updates!

Interesting Story

Love the story structure. I won't lie at first I got confused lol but i got it. Like the pace and development on the story. Love the love and its a nice story, if this continues it will develop nicely. Hope to see more XX

Nicely done

It hooked me since the start, like the story structure, for a moment felt like I was reading a poem. I like how this is developing. Real nice.
I would advise to separate dialogues. That's all. Edits can fix that so no issue. Keep up the good work would love to see more.

Nice

It's unusual to find poetry but when I see someone I read them. I like them because they're short and nicely written. I'm amazed they're good because you said English isn't your first language. But overall well done, hope to read more!

Areas of improvements

Overall, I will keep it simple because saw most reviews had it.
The story has a lot of mystery, cuteness, love and maybe blood?
I like the story structure but with a bit of edit can be fixed. Minor mistakes that are normal to find, I've seen worst.
Futrue book with a potential thats intriguing. Like how you are trying to keep everything a secret.
Kepp up the good work!

Need more!

Interesting story. I'm intrigued to know what will happen and everything. I wished to know how the story will be linked to the title. I like it.
The story structure is well done, Saw small mistakes but can be edited.
This has a lot of potential and would recommend to anyone who loves mystery.
Keep it up!

Interesting

The story holds mystery and a lot of questions. Like how the story is developing.
I'm intrigued in knowing there reasons and everything that truly happen.
The story structure is well written so well done. I didn't notice mistakes so good so far.
Keep up the good work!

Interesting High Potential!

If I had to recoomend this I would definitely. The story has a nice develop plot, which makes it have a good potential for a really awesome story. Love the fact how it was made. The story structure is well done, as well as description is done neatly.
I didn't notice grammar mistakes. So keep up the good work, Would love to see more.!!

Has Potential

As a fellow writer I could suggest an edit, edit it especially areas like in dialogue it confuses who is saying what. Also Paragraphs make them shorter. Punctuation as well.
Over all the story plot is good and has potential, just to reconstruct everything again. It's pure edits.
Description is well, but more about the characters would be best.
Keep it up, it's a real good story, really.

Potential

Great story just some editing, speially in the summary. Angle to angel.
Overall Like the story nice, the story structure would need a bot of fix, I advice to use a editing ap or help. Any question im open to help you.
Keep up the good work and it was lovely. Sorry it took me a whiile!!

Good

I see a lot of gothic and dark vibes.
The story structure is good, Greta story I would reccomend for any one interessted in dark story.
Keep up the good work!

Interesting

Love how the story started, interesting story structure. Like how you develop the story really interesting. Has a lot of potential, keep it up.

A FANG

like the story structure, really intresting. Your writing style is good. Didn't notice mistakes. Overall good, looking interesting in each chapter. Keep up thee good work.

So cool

I think I should write a scifi story, you just inspired me. This is so cool and awesome lve the story structure. Well done. It's an interesting story something diffeerent. Keep it up!

Wow

Story structure well done, I like the way your writing. It has that old times way of speaking. I like the twist of the story it reminded me of hunger games and the maze. Also didn't see no grammar mistakes. i'm quite intrigued to see where this goes, really well written and I'm amazed it capture your attention. Keep up the good work and can't wait to read more!

Nice wolfs!

Overall: First This is a totally different story than what I have read before. It's a first timr I see a story with wolf and a human girl being in a wheelchair. I have read a lot of stories about wolves and this one is intrigued. If you are into something different for a wolf story I totally reccomend it.

Now author advice: Grammar i didn't see none, maybe just punctucation.
Second: I would suggest to divide the dialogue.
Thrid try to make it more descriptive, more dialogue and more of a background story. I felt we miss a small insight, a bit more of detail.
Also, Try to make it longer, Stories tend to catch attention if they're more longer than usua;. Be careful as well when doing dialogue, make sure who is saying what just a bit of advice.
Overall it has potential, just needs editing.
So keep up the good work and would love to read more soon!

Teen Story

INteresting cute I could say. It reminds me a lot to other stories. But has potential. Like the relationship shes having with hillary and jasmine. Hope diana stop bothering her and I ship her with clayton but sam looks nicer idk why but clay didnt show more emotions.
Also, A little more of descritpion and it would be good. Just edit and you will be fine. keep up the good work.

Wow

Just like my heading said, wow This story will be interesting truly looking foward to more. Its cool how the writer Describe, and told the story. Its a scifi futuristic story. Didn't notice mistakes so we good. Hope you keep this going and cant wait to read more. Well done and hey I totally reccomend it!

Well Done!

Interesting story, Love the idea you had while writing it.
It captures your attention since the beginning. I love shes a badass girl, and doesn't take shit.
Love the writing style very well done. I didn't notice mistake of any type so cudos to that. Hope to see more turn of events and twists. well done keep it up!

NIce

Would love to read more. Love how you wrote the story. Nicely done. And love the concept of thrill. Keep up the good work!

Interesting

Nice, good story different well done

Good

Nice short and direct to the point!

Lovely

I like its a short story, as well as a lovely one. Sweet in a nice way, I like the way you wrote it, just a small suggestion flashback on the first part, name it flashback or something, I know it's clear that's a flashback but just in case. XD
Keep up the excellent work, and write more, I totally suggest that!

Blinding

First of all kudos to the author, nicely done. I'm impressed to see a book that gives you the info of any words, slang before hand. Even though I prefer it at the end. Mistakes where few, atcually barely noticeable. I Like how this sounded like a poem. I like it a lot.the authors' way of writing is impressive, the story as well has an interesting mystery around it. Keep up the excellent work, and hope its a long book! worht the while.

Breathtaking

This has been a thrill ❤️💯🙉 omg amazingly can't believe this book came to me by accident. The author is amazing. It's inspirational thanks for the dedication and time! ❤️ Really keep doing more!

Nice

wow, I got halfway through and so far wow.
It's really interesting I shall continue reading as well, just keep up the good work. I like your technique, small mistakes but barely seen. if you're concentrated you wouldn't even notice it. so can't wait to read another book. well done love it!

Love it

Wow, a mystery since the beginning has you feeling on edge. I love the summary well done.

I got to say, I'm expecting more, this looks thrilling, love the mystery and what's happening. it's well made. I didn't see mistakes. that I notice or I was to engross on the book to even notice.
General love it, can't wait for more.

Love it

Wow, I love supernatural I'm a sucker for wolves and vampires and I love this, I find it emotional, Cute, Interesting, and nice. Keep it up can't wait for more! Love the start also!!

Poems

I usually find poems soothing. I like it!
Very nice and with a nice flow. Minor mistakes but can be edited. Keep it up!

Alpha Blood

So I'll start with what I see.

Grammatical errors, which can be fixed through edits. The dialogue was a bit confusing, make sure to separate thoughts or dialogues well.
The story sounds interesting it's about a wolf, my advice shortens certain stuff an tries to explains bit more.
Also was it me or after the prologue, it said six instead of two or one? IM confused on that area.

Try to give more details, the book has potential, but needs some more details, also is this modern times or not? because I saw haven use words that make it sound like modern times.

If you make those changes the book will be better, it has potential so try to re-edit what you have and you will do well.
Keep up the good work!

Mafia, Lies, Badass, and reminder of 50 shades of gray

So first, this story reminded me so badly of %) shades of gray. Secondly, I know you left a note, and every writer has their own way of writing and doing things.
I respect that!!!

IN my opinion and advice, if once the book is done you edit it, change a few things. They're a lot of grammatical errors and abbreviations making it hard to have a flow. I know we all make mistakes but it seems it was written fast in a hurry.

I do love the book, I'm in love with it, it has marvelous potential just needs some fix here and their. love the mafia thing, didn't expect it. so keep up the good work!

Interesting

Really interesting start, its vampires, I'm a sucker for vampires. Love the beginning really interesting, can't wot for more.

Small thing I note was a grammatical mistake, on the name of Vernis city is it Vernis or Venis?

overall can't wait or more, keep it up!

Different

wasn't expecting to be a short story, it was well written, love it the refreshing names, and the places, totally different. this has a lot of potentials, can't wait for more work. Well done!

WOW

HOLY MOTHER OF ALL GODDESSS!!
This is why I love wolves, even though I write about vampires. wolves are the ultimate. well done, can't wait for more and damn love the female lead.

WoW!

Wow, you captivated me. this is amazing. It's so different than the other books, it has mystery, thrilling, and so much. The first chapter was a bomb definitely love it and love the names choices. I barely saw mistakes can't wait for more. with good promotion, this can be Amazing!

Had to do my own review!

Well people I had to do my own review.
So, The king of the Ruby Crown is another one of my babies I'm eager to write. This as well as the sapphire queen have meanings. So expect action, defying between each other, hate, love, and romance with a bit of sexy here and there. My Nikolas and rose will hate each others guts.

Enjoy!

Captive!

Interesting, mysterious and captivate that's how I felt, some small grammatical mistakes but editing can fix it, also I'm amazed it's interesting will keep reading this. It's so dark!

Bring back memories!

You made old memories come back, bringing tears to me for that person I miss and is no longer alive.
It's well done and believe me you made me feel and remember wow!

First!!

My apologies, been reading this and thought I left my review. Too many books lol. Going back to the review, I got to say that first, I learn a lot from you. this is a an amazing book, your writing, grammar everything is awesome. love the beginning of how you take the imagination to a different place and your fantasy is amazing. the way you express the story is amazing. It has a bit of everything and I'm still reading it. Good things take time to enjoy!
Well done!

Interesting!

Wow, interesting way to start. Love the choice of names, it's refreshing. Just small advice in punctuation. The first letter in dialogue capitalizes it. that would be all, hope to read more and keep up the good work.

Improvements

First thing first, the story has potential but needs a couple of things fixed, like a follow writer said, it confused me because I wasn't expecting also her being a supernatural. So it will be best you explain of and change it. Some things where amiss and you can do it. So just edit it and you will be good to go! ❤️