Ancient_Traveler

I kendo it.

Taking the pun aside, I enjoyed reading this. There is definitely an 'I can do it,' attitude throughout. Why you, have taken us into an imaginable fantasy that is filled with action. Sharper than most, the dialogue cuts to the bone. For those who need a fast fictional eye-opener, Grant Ayers does not disappoint. His pen is far, far greater than the sword.

Tension and a resolution with a twist.

Coming to terms with male rape after trials with the legal system in which anyone can look innocent is nothing to the trials of the media. Then, there’s studying for a degree to top it all off. Just when you think you’re near the end, the protagonist is kidnapped and sexually tortured. The main character is put through it all beginning with a promise to the reader. He then literally watches the clock of urgency before further challenges are thrown at him.
With strong language to accentuate the nature of the event, I believed this is how the characters spoke in their fictional everyday life. The main character truly is a victim however, I refuse to spoil the ending.

My suggestions to the author would be to mind the grammar on occasion and, edit and then, edit again. Even so, I would recommend A Tortured Soul – Anthony’s Story as well worth the read.

Riveting

Before the male reader screams the phrase appertaining to third-wave feminism, take a second read. Here, we are presented with female figures that, not always admirable are unfailingly strong. It is here that the speaker will excel.

Alexandra’s poems are honest and sincere. Whether recollecting private experiences or taunting unwanted truths, they explore the difficulty of people’s perception of change from public opinion to private concerns. A complex task sincerely undertaken.

Sparked Out

Families? Who needs them?

The fact is, we all do.

I was gripped by this storyline from start to finish. Magnus keeps the reader involved at every stage and just like every mystery, when you think you know whodunnit, think again.

This is well worth the read and, anyone struggling with members of their own family finding it more than difficult to accept their sexuality will find something to identify with here. Written with a good pace and pleasant conclusion.

Five Stars

Ongoing review.

No one likes Mondays and if our protagonist is as strong as I think he is, I'm sure we will find out, in due course. Here is a story you can immerse yourself in and recognise the angst, hopes and desires. We've all been there and have to stop shouting at the written word with our own words of wisdom as to what to do next.

Written in a unique style, this tale of near and, yet so far to the touch displays a sensitivity and maturity all of us can be proud of.

After only two chapters, I would encourage the author to continue with this story in his own time. I have no doubt, it will be worth it.

Impressive.

For the reader…
This adventure has plenty of action. For once, it’s the girls who have the upper hand. Quite rightly so!
The twists and turns that you think are expected, make you think again. An enjoyable tale that won’t disappoint the avid reader of this genre.

To the author… dwolf24
I liked the fact that you were writing in the third person which nicely interacted with the dialogue throughout. The pace of the story flowed but could have picked up the pace in places. With practice, adding similes together with sounds and smells will add further imagery for your reader. I know it sounds weird, but when describing a bruise, you could have suggested how many days it would have taken to heal by the colour of the bruise and expanded on the pain endured. The sound of her sister creeping into the room and perhaps the smell of the flavour of the snack the little sister had just eaten perhaps. These examples are from chapter 1, but I still wanted to read on; to the end.

Overall, I saw a great deal of creativity here, but I would also have liked to have had a description of the characters. Added intimately by a character’s observation of what the other characters looked like, how they were dressed and how they felt towards them. This will allow your reader to draw the picture from your words in their minds. By the way, following 😊