An Intriguing Find (with a swift end)
Enjoyable and intriguing, this story keeps you guessing as to what's going to happen next and why. Following the misfortune of a lone biker named Derek and a freakish accident turned nightmare, you'll definitely wonder whether Derek is the victim of circumstance or if fate has conspired against him.
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All in all, I'd say the story was certainly worth the 20 minutes to read it. At times, the dialogue and narration could have been a little more polished, but that's up to individual opinion, really. I didn't find anything at fault with the overall arc of the story EXCEPT the second chapter, to me, took a while to build up to its climax. Once the climax was achieved, the resolution is wrapped in the span of a short dialogue. Then it's roll credits. WHAT?! You had so much going for you! So yes, my complaint is that the ending is way too abrupt and brief for such an interesting build-up that really hooked me in.
BUT! Don't take my word for it. Read the story yourself and see if you agree. ;)