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Hiding inside - review

I've read 15 chapters for this review. It was a very enjoyable and smooth read, The writer's writing style is pretty amazing, and there's not one paragraph or chapter that it's boring, too wordy or too slow. it's all smooth writing, great pace and excellent story telling. A few grammatical mishaps, but that it's just a small matter of editing and in no way affects the story or bothers a reader. The MC is very likeable and has a strong, distinctive voice. The plot is also quite intriguing, and makes you want to read more at the end of each chapter. It's really well written and hooks you immediately. Great writing and great story!

Review for Die for love

I've read 10 chapters of this story. The story starts off with an intense and dynamic opening chapter of a woman being kidnapped on a parking lot. There's lots of dialogue and as the kidnapping proceeds we get an idea who might the kidnapper be and why is he doing this. My biggest issue with this story was grammar and writing style. Punctuation was off, some expressions sounded odd in English, the constant inner dialogue of characters with a lot of questions weights down the story flow. The plot too was somehow forced, it didn't evolve naturally - we have a lot of explanation through the inner dialogue of the characters instead of letting the story evolve for itself.
If we leave the grammar and language issues aside, it is clear that the writer tried to create an intricate plot, with lots of interesting characters. I suggest to give each character a more distinctive voice and use their thoughts less often. It's an interesting setting of the story, with lots of intricate relationships between the characters, and the writing is quite edgy, so with some editing the story has a potential. Best of luck!

AFRICAN SHORT STORIES

It's a straightforward story with a strong impact. There's need for some editing of grammar and phrasing, but in overall I liked the simple narrative style that is used. The plot presents us with a hard, uneasy topic, which is not easily accepted by the reader or in this case, as it is a matter of a culture I'm not familiar with, to identify with. However, one can appreciate the sincere and genuine writing and the boldness of the author in her approach. If this is a stand alone story, i must say it does feel a little bit as if it was not yet finished, although the ending with the name was quite evocative. It's certainly a different type of story i would usually read, but I'm glad I had a chance to read it and enrich my repertoire. I think a collection of such stories would definitely make an interesting book.

The Bootlegger's Daughter

I think you really bring out the voice of your main character with this style of writing. Once you get used to it, it reads like a real diary. In the first 4 chapters there's still not much yet of a plot, but with the hint at the beginning, that this is going to be about the worst day in sb's life, it makes it quite intriguing. Your descriptions and especially the dialogues reflect really well the world at that time or at least it gave that feel to me. You characterisation is quite superb. Perhaps my only preference would be a bit of a quicker pace and when explaining to go with less detail, although on the other hand, that would certainly take away from that particular voice of your character. In overall i think it's a very good story. It's interesting, original and well written. I wish you good luck with it!

Sinister

I said mostly everything in the comments under each chapter. I really enjoyed reading the story and I would continue reading it. I think the plot is very good. the reader gets hooked immediately.At moments I feel you rush a bit with things, that should take more time to develop, so they would feel more natural and not too forced. But apart from that your character is quite strong, complex enough and there's still room for his development. A well written, intriguing story!