The Bootlegger's Daughter
I think you really bring out the voice of your main character with this style of writing. Once you get used to it, it reads like a real diary. In the first 4 chapters there's still not much yet of a plot, but with the hint at the beginning, that this is going to be about the worst day in sb's life, it makes it quite intriguing. Your descriptions and especially the dialogues reflect really well the world at that time or at least it gave that feel to me. You characterisation is quite superb. Perhaps my only preference would be a bit of a quicker pace and when explaining to go with less detail, although on the other hand, that would certainly take away from that particular voice of your character. In overall i think it's a very good story. It's interesting, original and well written. I wish you good luck with it!
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