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AFRICAN SHORT STORIES

It's a straightforward story with a strong impact. There's need for some editing of grammar and phrasing, but in overall I liked the simple narrative style that is used. The plot presents us with a hard, uneasy topic, which is not easily accepted by the reader or in this case, as it is a matter of a culture I'm not familiar with, to identify with. However, one can appreciate the sincere and genuine writing and the boldness of the author in her approach. If this is a stand alone story, i must say it does feel a little bit as if it was not yet finished, although the ending with the name was quite evocative. It's certainly a different type of story i would usually read, but I'm glad I had a chance to read it and enrich my repertoire. I think a collection of such stories would definitely make an interesting book.

Ronin: the sword who cuts the heavens

Reading though 8 chapters so far, this is a masterfully written piece. It features a great, complex MC, with a humorous and original voice. There are also other characters with unique voices, that one comes to like and care for. The story reads so easily, the pace is perfect, the dialogues feel very natural. The writer must be very knowledgeable of the subject. There are fighting scenes which you will enjoy very much. It's a picturesque setting with vivid descriptions and interesting plots. If you are into this genre or like samurai stories you are in for a treat.

The Bootlegger's Daughter

I think you really bring out the voice of your main character with this style of writing. Once you get used to it, it reads like a real diary. In the first 4 chapters there's still not much yet of a plot, but with the hint at the beginning, that this is going to be about the worst day in sb's life, it makes it quite intriguing. Your descriptions and especially the dialogues reflect really well the world at that time or at least it gave that feel to me. You characterisation is quite superb. Perhaps my only preference would be a bit of a quicker pace and when explaining to go with less detail, although on the other hand, that would certainly take away from that particular voice of your character. In overall i think it's a very good story. It's interesting, original and well written. I wish you good luck with it!

Sinister

I said mostly everything in the comments under each chapter. I really enjoyed reading the story and I would continue reading it. I think the plot is very good. the reader gets hooked immediately.At moments I feel you rush a bit with things, that should take more time to develop, so they would feel more natural and not too forced. But apart from that your character is quite strong, complex enough and there's still room for his development. A well written, intriguing story!