Mystique and Beauty
This was a delightful read, short, but delightful. It was very pleasing to the senses; your command of descriptive language is excellent, delivering the reader to a wonderful world with consistent use of sensual imagery. There was a good flow, keeping the reader entertained and engrossed at a good pace throughout. The plot moved right along without hurrying, and the characters were well drawn.
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Now, as this is a WIP (work-in-progress), I don't want to dwell on grammatical errors, as they did not bog down the flow of the story, and they will eventually be edited out. But, writer to writer, it is important to mention that long paragraphs need to be broken up into shorter ones. Also, be careful with commas, both the use of them, and not using them. :)) One more important thing, and that is that MOST OFTEN (note that I did not say "always"), dialogue, i.e., a sentence beginning with quotation marks, will start a whole new paragraph by itself. Just a thought to consider when writing.
Crown of Blades was a lovely read with a great deal of potential, I loved the title, it grabbed my attention right away. The visuals are fantastic, and the plot is intriguing. Looking forward to more! :))