Bumbie

Decent So Far! :D

This was great so far, your first three chapters were great. A lot of grammar and words missing though, making it hard to understand sometimes. Also, I recommend using less 'said' when someone talks, more 'exclaimed', or other words! I also recommend less capitals. The plot is really good too, would be better though if there was a bit more detail. I know that you use a phone to type these which can make it even harder, but reviewing your stories and chapters would make these infinitely better. I know it can a taunting task to go over everything (lol) but it really would improve your writing. Other than those few things, I really loved this! Take your time to make even more outstanding chapters and this could really evolve to be something quite amazing.

Best Regards,
Emily

P.S I hope high school treats you well next year!
P.P.S If it's too much, definitely take a long break from Inkitt during school, and if you writers block don't stress about it, we all get that sometimes.

Review chapters 1-3

Hi Rebeka! It's Emily from class, I really like your story so far!

Your story seems really good, but I was thinking that going over your work a few more times may be a good idea! I saw a few spelling and grammar mistakes that should be fixed in he first and second chapters. Also, in the third chapter you wrote Mrs. Johnson then proceeded to call them a 'he' or 'him', in which case would be a Mr. Johnson. I was intrigued by your style of using emoji's in the first chapter, it seems like a good reminder of the food Katherine was eating, but since the chapters are fairly short I think it would have been fine by it's self. I really liked the way the second chapter was from Michael's point of view! I think that when writers do this, it helps understand both points of view.

Best of wishes continuing this story,
Emily :)