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Epic

There are no words. The power, knowledge, education, and messages in this must read seperates him from the pack. His style of writing is indescribable. It reads like the Bible. Unheard of!! The religious back and forth between Doneshius and Alicia is great. I haven't been to sleep yet. I am so captivated by the caliber of his literary genius. I had to post one of my favorite parts. I want this in print.

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My eyes enlarged, and his face was replaced with the face of an angel, and all the vampiric faces went through the metamorphosis, truly taking my breath away…now angelic eyes bat at me, amazing their colors shifted, each taking on a color they never took on before, the reds were now pinks, and the pinks were now blues, and the blues were now the color purple, and his face was lavender in color, and more unique and refined in appearance.

I gasped again, following every curve, every nook and cranny of his Greek god like body, actually putting those chiseled beauties to shame, his eyes were diamonds and his teeth twenty four karat gold, of the purest gold, the richest gold, the gold melted from the gold of the pearly gates of heaven, a flaming sword stored in his throat, his hair, a huge lion type mane of hair, was of the thickest (but richest) wool, his feet obvious bronze, his toes chiseled from marble, his toe nails and the outer parameters of them works of art in themselves as a group, but more breathtaking individually.

Ђrough his presence, this Being, an Angel. Ђe middle of his body opened, and he turned inside out himself, his hair slick, yet thick, hanging past his shoulders, black porcelain face, creamy like milk chocolate, his smell and everything around him bowed, nothing smelled the same, nothing looked the same, nothing was the way it used to be, the mustard seed, sprouted in my skull, and I fell to my knees and bowed. As the sun rose, again—on my mortal self—the vampire in me lie, lifeless— beside my bare feet.

A large body of water surrounded me, separating me from the Messiah. When he smiled all of my dilemmas and problems were vindicated. The twenty four karat gold of his presence disappeared. His flaming sword was in his elongated neck; his pearly white teeth were stunning. I saw my reflection in them, perfect!

There wasn’t a stain or a filling anywhere.

“§o what is thy answer? Now that ye have the splendor of heaven, after living a life of Hell, Hell on earth, the true form of it. People with no hope draining the world dry of its life, and resources, redirecting Matter into a beast of its own design, and the law of beasts unfolds. Demons run the earth, and through politics at elections globally, masters control the pulse of earth, if they pull the plug on natural resources, controlled resources, earth dies. Join me! Join me in winning the fight against evil!”

From his mouth he pulled a flaming sword, a life sized sword, it was impossible for that gigantically huge, gargantuan sword to fit in his mouth, or his 6 foot tall frame, with the right amount of muscle, without an ounce of fat, not a calorie out of place because he never nourished himself with food of the earth, bread and water, yes, turning water to wine, yes, most certainly!

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Good enough for Prime Time

Make this a movie, a TV show: please!!! This has so much promise and potential. The fact that a black man wrote about something other than drugs and pimps peaked my interest. I took 4 days to dissect the most powerful book ever when it comes to vampires. True penmanship. The fights are epic. Alicia has to be one of the most intriguing vampires ever. And the twist at the end screams book 2. The way this author's mind works is otherworldly.

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