Thanks for the nightmares
Well, you did warn me. I'm surprised at the amount of awfulness you've managed to pack into such a short work, so good job I suppose? I found your writing style excellent, the writing was smooth and easy to read (grammatically and stylistically anyway). I noticed a few spelling errors, but nothing that really grabbed my attention enough to note down. The plot itself is a bit messy, and by that I mean I found the out of sequence nature of the story a bit jarring. We begin with Dr. Spitzer's side of the story, and then after he meets Celeste we jump into the backstory. When you finish with the backstory in "Ensnared", I found the pacing a bit off. You rush over Celeste's investigation and watching of Spitzer fairly quickly and jump into her ambush and Spitzer's counter-ambush. This is a fairly short book, and I think you would be better served by expanding on this aspect of it. There's a lot of potential in that storyline, and I feel as if it's wasted to a degree. Spitzer's escape raised a few questions for me in and of itself. How did he know Celeste would drink the water? Wasn't he restrained and locked in a cell? How did he get out? Maybe I simply missed something, if so I apologize. I noticed in "Homeward Bound" the line "They spent the night hugging each other on the bed" is placed after the line break, I think it should be before.
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Overall, I found the story very engaging, it drew me in from the beginning and held my interest until the end. You do a good job here of presenting the disturbing side of the story in a way that's extreme but not overwhelming to the point of being unreadable. My only complaint in that regard is the scene where Mark rescues Celeste, I found the sexual imagery there a bit over the top and unnecessary, especially because it continues over two chapters in a fairly short book.
I may have some trouble sleeping tonight and for the foreseeable future, but I'm glad that I read this, I found it very engaging.