ChloeLeia6

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Insightful

I really liked the fact that you talk about her trauma and all the things she experienced, even though it's deeply sad. I can't believe her siblings do that and what she has to go through. I also like the fact that you are breaking the mould by including some hard topics about assault/rape etc. That isn't an easy thing to write about.
Your description during the first chapter in particular about her school is a nice touch. It makes the reader feel like they are with her.
Your writing style is simplistic but easy to follow.
Your grammar and punctuation weren't bad. I found a few errors that can easily be fixed.
Overall, I enjoyed the first few chapters I read, and wish you all the best with your story! Great job! <3

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Nice plot

I like how the plot shines through within the first two chapters. I think the pace goes quite fast, but that's okay. Maybe by adding in some more details can slow the pace a bit. I like that you don't overdo the descriptions of the characters, letting the reader imagine what they look like. There were a lot of grammatical issues and miss-spelling, but are all easy to fix. Don't forget to start a new paragraph each time somebody new is speaking.
Overall, I think you should keep writing. The more you write, the better you will become. Good luck! <3

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Great overall!

I read the first few chapters, and I quite like how detailed you go with the protagonist's backstory about her parents. You could probably give a few details throughout the chapters, so it isn't all in the first chapter. I didn't know why the dialogue in the first chapter is highlighted in bold. I would suggest proofreading for the grammatical errors as you switch tenses. Overall, it wasn't too bad and didn't stop me from enjoying the story.

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