The story has a natural progression that reveals more detail in an organic way. The main character sees what transpires through his own eyes, and begins to gain affinity for the wonders he faces. The introduction of the supernatural is initially brief and subtle, but grows over time. It has a good payoff in the end, but the challenge I saw was that while the mysterious man seems to put forward an idea of balance in the elements initially, but over time the elements seem to grow in their danger. Not so much a critique as an observation that adds to the mystery, as the motive of the shadowy man is hinted at but not directly outlined.
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