Stands out in the crowd
Good story, nice pace and well written. I like your writing style, you have a way with words that suggests to me that you have a feel for the craft. I liked Anomaly's voice and the first person point-of-view served the story well. There were a couple of glitches where I kind of lost the thread of the plot a little, but not for long. Couple of typos (?) as well. But the criticism is neither here nor there. I like your writing and would enjoy reading more.Read the story now
Cute story - Intimate style
I loved your use of the pronoun "you" in this story. It created an instant sense of intimacy between the narrator's voice and Edgar. I felt like I was somehow privy to this couple's dynamics.
Another thing that appealed about this is that the story did not 'feel' like it was directed at me, the reader, but more like I was accidentally eavesdropping and overhearing this exchange...
Worked for me :)
Congratulations on your performance in Wanderlust.
I really enjoy your style, Brenden. You have a way of engaging the reader that in my opinion is quite invaluable in a writer. The only reason I gave an overall rating of 4 stars was because some of the action didn't flow for me, meaning I couldn't quite follow it - but I also noticed that this is a work in progress so, hey! Well done! I'm really looking forward to more...Read the story now
A well-wrought tale
Okay, I don't normally go for horror, but the short summary really piqued my curiosity. And I found the story both surprising and rewarding. Also grateful that I wasn't exactly 'horrified' by its unfolding.
I found it a graceful and elegant read that resonated with (wisely) unanswered questions about this human existence...
I don't give 4 x 5 stars easily, but this one deserved it. Good sparse writing, punchy, trim. Great tension and build up. Will check out some more of your work.