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Mysterious and cunning

The introduction to the story is very interesting. We are shown a vague every day-like the relationship between the two girls, things are serene until they're suddenly not. I think you could have made it better by making the contrast about how things suddenly fell apart more emotional and traumatic for the reader, it would have given it more impact.
Furthermore, it would have been interesting to see more glimpses of Anne and Ava's relationship. It would have made the reader connect with the characters.
The dialogues are vague and the paragraphs can be spaced to give readers a better experience, but apart from that, I have no complaints. The story was unique and fresh, the mood and atmosphere is also quite dark but enjoyable. Well done, keep writing, it'll surely pay off!

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SAD!!

The writing makes you cry, a bit dark, a bit twisted. From the very beginning, I knew where this was going. So, I'd say it was majorly predictable? I love how the story is just a few exchange of letters, or more like notes, since letters need addresses and they obviously are oblivious to the fact that they literally live next doors to each other.
I wonder why she fell in love with him, was he nice to her at the beginning, was it something he did? He sounds like the basic cliché bully, we haven't gotten much character description or anything like that, so it's hard to say what they exactly look like. I couldn't picture them together, not even in the end. It sounds toxic and unhealthy, especially since people just don't change their ways so easily.
But I feel like the author must have just wanted to get the emotions and vague idea of the romance and pain across. which was done pretty well. Emotions were conveyed and I felt my heart pang every time she'd get hurt or whenever she'd have those insecure, toxic thoughts, especially since we've all experienced some level of similar experience growing up.
I'd say that you could have created a better atmosphere and made Alex more redeemable in the end. Chloe really sold herself short in the end, accepting him with all his past abuse and all...also, it would have been nice if you focused a bit more on her getting healthier. Just to show the reader that light exists at the end of the tunnel? She can become healthy even without Alex falling in love with her.
But overall, it was nicely done. I feel like it was written for the fun and expression of it, there is plenty of space for development, but it really did make me feel! Well done!

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Werewolf and Siren!

Such an interesting and intriguing concept! I feel a lot of heartbreak coming! Can't wait to read the next chapter, please update soon!
This book is so enticing. The more I read, the more questions came to mind, the more I got engaged in the story. I need to see what will happen between Olivia and Marcus, pleaseee!!! Will he reject her or take her? I feel like he'll reject her because she's a siren. I don't think there is much chemistry between the werewolves sirens. They're such different creatures, one of land the other of the sea. I don't know what to expect.
Also, please don't break Tyson's heart just to add layers to the story. I have seen this happen too many times...
PS: Multiple ships in this story!!!
Absolutely lovely! I advise you use a grammar and spelling check app tho! It'll boost your writing.
Much love, Coffee.

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Strong Start!

The start of the book is very strong and immerse! The writing is immaculate, the plot was fast and immediate which was really good, without any background at all, we go through this journey with her. I'm loving it already! A very gripping story with tons of supernatural ^^
Much love, Coffee.

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Has Potential!!

The story is one with a premise I've read before, so I knew what I had coming. But it was still sweet and interesting to read, which is awesome! If there was more description and a flow hat pulled the plot together, it would have painted a better picture in my mind!
Keep writing and improving!
Much love, Coffee

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Very good!

The story is fantastic! I like the beginning the most, the way you created tension and suspense through the couple's murder, the change in mood, from happy to terrifying was written so well!! Really impressed! Also, Krys is a really interesting character, the boys are still sketchy to me so I'll just have to find out and see. I'm suspecting that they have a relation to the 'animal attacks'.
The only thing I can suggest is that you try to edit some of your spelling and grammar, which is not a big problem. Just polishing it up a bit would make reading smoother!
Much love, Coffee

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Very Fun & Intriguing Read!

The story itself has no problem with it. I love Oliver as a character, Ophelia is also great. The magical realm needs a little bit more work to match up with everything, but it's not bad. The setting was fantastic, the writing very detailed which is fabulous!
However, there are areas where it needs a bit of work. Take for example that there are excessive amounts of unnecessary sentences that are redundant. Plus, the lack of dialogue marks and not marking it as such makes readers confused. Sometimes, I was thinking it was another part of the description or a character's thoughts, without knowing that they said it out loud. I think that needs editing and spelling also needs a bit of work here and there. But that was the only flaw with the story. It made reading not so smooth, but the opening was still very pretty and the descriptions made it more real and intense.
Well done! Keep up the good work!
Much love, Coffee

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Mysterious!!

From the blurb, I knew I had a seriously amazing book in my hands. It's really interesting and super nicely written! I really enjoyed it, especially the way everything fits into that title so well.
Identity is an amazing book for sure!
Family dynamics between the sister and how her mother acted to suspiciously were all very interesting, a tool to foreshadow something coming I suppose. I really liked that idea!
Well done :)

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AMAZINGGG!

The story is beauty!

There is like...no fault in it, except for the fact that sometimes, it gets too into detail, even though sometimes it's unnecessary. But I'm really enjoying it! It's a bit slow, but it gives a lot of insight on the characters and the more I read, the more real they become! So intriguing.
I think both Margaret and Vincent are really cool characters, they have their own spark, if that makes sense. I really like reading about them, but Vincent is just hilarious sometimes so I prefer it when it's from his view of things (like his airplane thing where he kept levelling up all the passengers to see who'd be more useful lmao) That doesn't mean MARGARET isn't as important, but just my honest opinion. She's a woman in boss clothing, which I admire and love, and he's just your everyday airhead dummy but actual real cutie with a judgemental frown on his face. That's how I imagine them lol.

As for the plot itself, it is a bit too detailed, but I think those will be necessary in some point in the future, so I try to carefully read through them. The first chapter dragged out a bit but now it's getting more easier to read, which I'm grateful for. The real thing with them blowing up only came in Chapter 5 or 6 so I know it's only going to get better and more exciting from now onwards! This book deserves so many more eyes of it, but I guess everyone's too hung up on the cliché stuff to see this gem of a work!

I can tell by the chapter lengths and literally every single sentence that you write that you put 100% on it. You're such a great writer, and I'd have to be blind if I chose to not see that. You're super talented, so please put your work out there more so that people can see it! They'll definitely enjoy :)

PS: You need to get this published!!! Please keep up the good work and don't give up on writing! You're an awesome babe :)

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Suspicion and thriller

I've been waiting to review this book since yesterday!
Now, I'm always trying my best to be very honest with my reviews and criticism, so I hope that you're okay with it and it can help you learn to become better at your craft! Please don't take offence to anything I say.
Firstly, I want to say that your plot idea is absolutely genius! I find it's interesting and fresh and since I'm an avid reader of suspense myself, I enjoyed it.
However, there's something missing. It needs that little push to make it go from an average to a 10, if you know what I mean.
I think that you haven't given us enough of the characters. Roze, for example, I'm reading about her, yet I don't feel like I'm close to her or that I'm getting to know her. Vivid characters always manage to become a real person instead of just being words in a book, but I'm not getting that yet from Roze, and the story needs to have a better focus on her, since that's the title.
If you were going to paint a mysterious scene, you could have begun the story on a more gruesome scene. Focusing on that makes readers feel sympathy for her since it looks like she deeply cares for her dead friend and then she could have been labelled a 'Killer'. That makes us feel panic for her and even paint her like she's the real murderer.
Creating suspense not only in the character's world, but also in the reader's head makes us more engaged. We can constantly keep doubting her and her intentions. Is she really telling us the truth, or is she actually the culprit herself?
But I feel like by adding more characters and creating suspicion between them, you still managed to make it intriguing. Well done! Your writing may need some dusting since there were a few points in which grammar was definitely missing, so that could be improved.
Overall, I believe you need to focus on descriptions more and creating scenes that keep us on the edge. Maybe even focus more on constructing the characters as we go. There aren't many chapters yet, so I can't judge it all, but based on the start, it was an intriguing read.
Well done, I hope that you can take my few words of advice with you as you dive into the rest of the book! And I apologise in advance if I've discouraged you in any way, just know that if you keep writing, you'll slowly improve, and I'll be here to see you right through it!
After all, struggle leads to growth :)

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Unique and Adventurous!

The characters are wicked! They're good, they're awesome, they're different! I quite enjoyed them. I also love the way you write, the narrative was sometimes serious, sometimes hilarious, and the writing style never disappointed, not even once!
It was out of character for me to read this type of story, but I was happily surprised. I love the adventurous trope and the dialogues shared between certain characters, there just wasn't a fault in this, nothing. I have no feedback except some spelling or grammar mistakes, which everyone can make. A few edits and polishing will help with that, but all I can say is: YES. MORE people NEED TO READ THIS!

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Original and magnific!

It has a greek/reality twist that really makes it special, and I've never read anything like it before! The greek lovers and soulmates combination is the bomb, and so my kind of read! The characters were more real than anything else and I really enjoyed this, awaiting more special things from you!

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Searching within

I love the characters outlook on life, something similar to mine. I love the people, the works and especially the way it's written. Really took me away from home for a bit! Really well written hun, it's deep and profound and beautiful ❤❤

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A great story!

I loved how this book started, with a new life and a blanket of mysterious over it. It really ignited curiosity and as a reader, I was instantly hooked and wanted to keep on reading to find out what would happen next. It's a really well-written book as well, which means that the author really put in work to write it, which is a must in all good books.
The book is a fresh breath of air, and the concept is also new to me, since I don't read genres like these often, but this pleasantly surprised me because it was a great read, and such a unique plot! Definitely would recommend it to others!
PS: I would suggest making a new cover though. This one is a bit boring, so it doesn't draw in that much attention, and for the story and writing quality, the cover deserves to be so much more!! If you ever want help with making a new cover or anything, I'd be glad to help with that for free ^^ Just ask and your wish is my command!
Much love, Coffee.

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Beautiful down to every detail!

The writing is absolutely beautiful, the pacing, the introduction to different characters, the unnerving and heavy atmosphere, everything was done and portrayed perfectly!
I'm looking forward to seeing where this story will go!
-Coffee Beanz

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Interesting but can be worked on

I really agree with the other reviewer, this book is another book that I feel like I've read before, maybe of Wattpad or a similar scene. It doesn't bring out many characters, although there are many characters, it doesn't make them flourish. Instead, they're simply very 1D, the characters are too plain and the story plot needs some working to make it pop. You can easily turn things around and make it more fresh and interesting and unique with your own personal twist to it. Don't retell stories and blend them together, tell your own story. Something only you can write.
Still, the writing wasn't bad and with a little bit of work, this story can really become something much better! I wish you the best of luck :)
Much love, Coffee.
(If you have any questions, feel free to ask. I can try to give more specific advice if you wish to improve)

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Beautiful & Promising!!

This needs to be a published book! The premise of it is so unique and fresh! It really is inspiring and so so creative! The different dynamics between family and friends and lovers was also something to look forwards to! It's a fiction but there are some parts that are so intense and real, like most of the conflict, different ways different people from different backgrounds come to live...so detailed and well written too!
I was always left shook af whenever you described their surroundings and the places they visit, very vividly done!!
I'm really enjoying it and can't wait for you to continue with it! Need to see if they have a chance at returning to life and change some things around. for the better!

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Cute but needs work

The story plot is very organised and to be frank, it's interesting and perfect for what is to come. I think the way you decided to set it out however, was not the best decision. It looks like it could be a great text story with cute things happening in it, but there is no backbone to the story. No conflict to keep in entertaining. I suggest you try to add that in and make it more real. Everything just sounds too plain at the moment. Something needs to happen. The beginning needs to spike more interest.
Like maybe how do they make a relationship without love work? A marriage that is still new will also have its troubles. Plus. you can add a description to paint a better picture for the story overall!
Good luck, x.

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Victorious Book!

I don't usually read historical books, but this one's plot was absolutely gripping! I liked the story from beginning to end, it was very well written, and every scene was so detailed and descriptive, that I could imagine the scenes playing out in my mind! Very well-paced and the plot flows like water!
Will keep reading!! Don't ever stop writing, this is extremely good!!!
Much love, Coffee ^^

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Descriptions on point!!

I love the descriptive way you write! So elegant and beautiful. The story has a good premise, characters sound very becoming. I suggest you make adequate spaces and gaps for the story as it continues, to flow better and be easier to read, other than that, it's fantastic!
Well done!
Much love, Coffee

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A MUST READ!!

I love love love mystery, so that's one thing that really compelled me to your story. The more I read, the darker it got, the more I enjoyed. It was really fantastic to read, and the writing was even better. I think that's what brought the plot and characters all together, the descriptive way you wrote it all. The attention to detail was also recommendable!
In the beginning, there wasn't much of a dialogue, but then it started coming in, it was super fun to read from Lesly's perspective because she's such a well-developed character and absolutely terrific. I also like how her trauma has been portrayed, the way her thought's process, etc. Even the way she views the world, her inner troubles, there have been countless times I could relate to her, especially when she was being cynical af, haha.
Your grammar is also immaculate, which is amazing, really. There was no fault or flaw in this story, loved it all! Will go in my reading list because I'd love to read it all :)
Much love, Coffee.

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Beautiful!!!

I absolutely love poems, and this book has some amazing ones! The pace, the flow and the way the sentences are said and structured are mesmerising and so telling, each poem tells a separate story, and each really touched your heart! Your writing is so elegant and just-ahh!!!
Can't wait to read more from you!!
Much love, Coffee :)

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Fantastic story!!!

Highly recommend!! Adventure and dark mystery fanatics and readers need to check this out!! It's written very well, the attention to detail is mindboggling and the amount of plot and character development is just wow!!
Someone needs to pick up this book and just read it to see what I'm talking about!
I can tell the writer worked very hard on this masterpiece, from the setting to the way the plot unfolds, mysterious characters and suicidal birds....immaculate!
Loved it!
A MUST READ!
Much love, Coffee

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An adventurous ride!

I'd like to comment that the premise of your book is very interesting and fresh, which is really good! The writing was also very polished and I can tell a lot of thought went into the plot and characters, which is fantastic! It's incredibly detailed which is also exciting because I can't predict anything at all!
The only bit of advice I have for you is that you could brief your 'blurb' which is the beginning text that draws readers like myself in and make it shorter. The amount of plot you laid out in there is just way too much and was too confusing to take in at once. I suggest you could reveal all those juicy bits as we go, through the chapters of the book!
Well done, keep up the good work!
Much love, Coffee

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Cool start!

It's actually written really well, as is still the beginning, I'm waiting for the plot to pick up. But it was a strange and exciting beginning, and Sienna is definitely a memorable character!

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Fun and Enjoyable!

The beginning instantly made the reader feel sad and angry, reflecting at us the same feelings Zaara was feeling at the time, which is incredible! I liked how the story is going so far, can't wait for her to develop into an even better character!!!
The grammar needs some work here and there, but that can be also fixed very easily. Well done!
Much love, Coffee.

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Beautiful and emotional!

Your writing has always been emotional to me, like you were etching your heart into every sentence, and this was no exception! I really really enjoyed it, the struggles of a newly married couple as they go through pregnancy and daily issues together. I think that Sean could have worked harder to be by her side, when she was crying in her room, or when she was angry. A hug could have certainly helped, but like all humans, this was flawed. So raw and real, I really enjoyed it!
BTW, I do think that some descriptive bits were not necessary, like they were being repeated over and over just by using different word choices, you definitely don't need that much description to make this special. But I still liked it! Just be careful to never go overboard with it :)
Love, Coffee.

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Melancholy but sweet!

It was a long chapter, but still not enough for me to completely make up my mind on it.
I can, however, try to judge it from the beginning. The writing skills are incredible, they bring the entire book together, the past and the present, the good and the bad, small everyday moments that fall into a pit of tragedy. Reading this much only, I'm already haunted by questions. What happened to James? How did he die? when will she tell Sara? how old is Sara? Where will they be moving and what will happen next?
The story really is playing with my emotions because it's so sad, I can't help but feel for Hannah and her daughter, who seeks a father but doesn't know that he can't be there for them. I hope they can stay strong and fight as they move forwards, he'll always be watching from up there!
Love, Coffee.

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Amazing sequel!

This needs to be published, I repeat, it needs to get a publication!!!
The characters are back and as good as before, the writing is so awesome, and there is a moral to every chapter. I liked it a lot since it was really engaging and I was 99.9999% invested in the story.
Props to the author for being able to create such a magical book!

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UNIQUE AND MAGICAL

The story started off on quite a spin, the blurb was awesome and the beginning profoundly engaging. As I read more and more of it, I realised that the story is a bit like idk, a magical, supernatural spiral that never ends, we see new characters come and go, new magic powers and visions and it's a lot to take in right away but it saturates well with the rest of the plot the deeper we delve. The characters are funny and their relationship is sometimes quite troublesome, but mostly hilarious. Very unique in every way, although it gives me flashbacks from some movie scenes, I can't tell whether you go inspiration from those or not. Inspiration does come subconsciously from many places, so I don't mind. The book is wow!
However, there is still a place for improvement, like when you jump from present to past and things like that. I'm also working on my tenses, so I recognised it immediately. With a bit of work here and there, it would work out great. Other than that, this book needs to be published right now, it's original and traditional-style so it would be perfect!
Can't wait to read more from you :)

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Werewolf badasses!

The book is so interesting, from beginning to middle, it was full of surprises. I really enjoyed the family dynamics and her own dynamics with Blake. It's clear that she has strong values and can hold her own against him, which is really great in my opinion. Plus, Blake definitely enjoys her sass lol.
Characters aside, the plot is very interesting and thick with excitement, can't wait to read more from you! You have a talent, definitely!
Much love, Coffee :)

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Interesting but can be improved!

It's still at its very start, so I can only judge it for what it has :)
Firstly, I think that the style of the story is good and the flow of the story is interesting and there are so many various characters, so it's nice.
But I'd suggest you use Grammarly to fix some grammar and spag, like when you said the mother was 'sten' or something, I didn't get that bit, but I'm sure it was a typo and anyone can make mistakes :) If you fic that, readers will definitely feel easier and reassured as the flow of the story and experience will be better! I quc=ickly realised another thing about your writing is that there is not much description, but a lot of dialogue. If you balance the two, it'll also make the story easier to imagine!
Good luck! I enjoyed reading!

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Beautiful!

So interesting and bewitching! The plot itself is lovely, wow!!

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Interesting and waiting for more!

The story is still at it's prime, so it's interesting to see as it progresses, but it's easy to predict from all the foreshadowing that something unimaginably will happen in their new, gloomy and mysterious little home. I'm excited!
The writing is already very good, the author definitely has talent and only needs to continue to improve with some grammar and that's all!
WELL DONE!

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Moral of the story!

The ending was very sweet and all, so it's nice and pretty. I do think there could be more to the story, but the author decided to keep it short and pretty which I'm also ok with :) Good story, it just needs something more to make it pop? Some sprinkles, some more drama, some more torment? I do hope that you try to improve your grammar and spelling, if English isn't your first language, you could really turn this more magical with description and other things! Good luck love :)

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Short adn Sweet!

It's a simple story with a predictable ending, but it was so much fun to read! Like I could definitely relate to the protagonist at some points, like being dragged to shop, yikes! And it was so adorable how the boy wasn't the best looking or the most talented and popular person around, but he was just the right one for her! Beautiful, I'd recommend you to get grammarl.y, I know it's free and it can help you a lot with grammar and spelling, which you are missing. But otherwise, great story! Short and sweet!

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Absolutely Beautiful!

I loved it.
It was so intriguing and filled with emotions and mystery, just....wow!
Now, the outline and spacing of it was just genius, I liked how you interwove the poems that go along with the plot, they're like a premise in which you give readers a deeper insight of what's going on inside the protagonist's head, which is amazing!
Another thing which was beautifully done was the depth of the protagonist himself, he was such a distinct, didactic and awesome character with so many layers to him. Very interesting and very strange sometimes, but that makes him the more enjoyable. Especially the part where we can't tell whether he's being rational or has gone completely insane! Makes him a hero but also a villain-like character.
Plus, I love how this started off almost like a fable but then suddenly looks like a gore kind of tragedy thing. It's just so fantastic and pulls you in right away. The magic powers and how we're all expecting him to grow up into an incredible king also, making us have expectations and root for him, you've managed to engage readers right away as well which is very good!
Please continue writing because I'm in love with the way you write, the constant metaphors and the way you use description is incredible and you inspire me so much!
I'm so sorry again for delaying this for so long, I was waiting for you to get a bit further into the story, but along the line I actually forgot that I was meant to review it. Please forgive moi.
Much love, Coffee x

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A blend of the present and past

Now, I've finally finished reading so time for the much-awaited review! I want to start things off by saying that my review will be as honest and detailed as I can possibly get it, so, hopefully, you can take away some friendly advice/criticism/feedback from it without feeling offended :)
Ok, so let's begin with the writing style, I think it's fantastic, the dialogues are prompting, and the amounts of mystery building really keeps the story going. What I haven't seen much is descriptive and vivid imagery, all the other reviews say that there is a lot in the story, but I don't think so. I've read it myself. I think that descriptions here and there are vague, although that works perfectly with the theme of mystery you're going for, so keep it up!
Also, the writing style and the book and plot are all fabulous, the characters are interesting, they have depth and are quite fascinating, my only problem with the story itself would be the constant change between the now and the before. The present and the past. Although it gives the story a touch of mystery to it, what it also does is confuses readers.
I myself sometimes didn't understand what was going on, and I understand that maybe confusing your audience might have been your intention, and you might be still writing to find a climax to all the confusion, but I believe there is a better way to do so. When you're going back to the dreams and reality, you're blurring the lines too much, once in a while would be better. Just make sure that it doesn't happen to the point where the reader becomes disengaged with the story.
And that's all I have to say really, I'm quite enjoying the plot twists of the story, the good prince turned evil, the magical spectrum and all those unsolved questions. Just don't hold back too much just to slap it onto our faces later on, let the story unfold at a rationalised pace.
I hope you're not discouraged in any way! I find that clear reasons and ways to improve have been provided, as much as I could give (I'm not a professional). Wish you the best of luck, and of course, I'll patiently wait to see where the story will go!

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Passionate!

The poems are short, they describe everyday actions that most people, in one way or another must have experienced in life. A text left on seen, a love unrequited, losing hope, pushing through. Beautiful messages we all can relate to. Amazing! Keep writing because you're doing great!

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Adorable!

Ahh, I don't know what to say! This was so cute and just adorable!! Short but funny and cute with a little bit of passion to it! Great job!!

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Lovely!

The two men are polar opposites, but they attract and make a good couple together! Love them and Angel is a cutie!
I'd have to agree with some of the other reviewers though, the story needs some work. Some paragraphs are way too long, and they really do disturb the flow, so that needs some improvement. But I love how the characters are depicted, especially grumpy, strict Mr Grey with bright cheerful Jay. Very good contrast and how the plot is developing...yes yes yes! Love it! Well done! Keep writing and improving, especially paragraph lengths, that will make it even better!

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Unique and new!

The characters are polar opposites, and through their tiny little arguments and different views of the world, it really shows. I enjoyed them, they're both fun and a good combination put together. The plot is also very interesting! Getting closer through writing a romance book, wow! Way to bundle them up together, two people that wouldn't have normally worked otherwise.
They remind me of Darcy and Elizabeth from Pride and Prejudice.
Although I could suggest some grammar and spelling app to polish your writing, and adding a bit more descriptions to create a better atmosphere, I feel like your writing is great, and the story is fabulous!
Keep it up!

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FANTASTIC!

The descriptions are flawless, it really paints a beautiful picture for the reader and makes it sound magical overall, and since it's a fantasy, that draws me into the story further.
So far, both main characters have been introduced, and they' sound fantastic, I can't wait to see more of them and their individual personalities.! The plot is still unsure at this point, but from what I've read so far, I'm expecting it to be very interesting!
However, I suggest you give us a bit more of the story in the initial blurb, because it's very vague and although that can be good as an effect, readers will want to know more in detail what exactly they're setting out to read!
Keep writing, I look forward to more updates from you!

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INTERESTING!!

The story starts out and we get a glimpse into Sasha's daily life, her friends, her relations, her uni etc. It's all very normal and cool and the atmosphere is playful but fun. It's also interesting, because we get a lot about the people around her, and that makes her more real to the reader's eye.
The plot idea is fantastic, just like the title itself. I've only read two chapters of this and that's all we have so far, but it's interesting how things are developing so far! Aiden and his girlfriend breaking up, her still having feelings for him, him hating her (which we don't know the cause behind. makes it more curious) !!
It's realistic and fun to read, so I recommend more people check this out! The plot will only be thickening from now onwards.
However, I have a few pieces of advice for you!
Firstly, I'd recommend that you check your grammar and spelling, because it could really interfere with the flow of the story and interrupt the reader's experience. I suggest getting Grammarly, it really helped me a lot too. Secondly, I think the spacing is too wide, you could try to lessen the gaps a bit. And maybe work on your descriptive writing? I believe that including bits and bops to paint a setting will depict a better picture for your story.
So far, it's good, I can't wait to see where this will go!

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Intriguing and descriptive

Your writing style is what pulled me in, to be honest. Very traditional, laid out for all to see. You describe things so in-depth that it's possible not to be able to picture their actions and the characters and their environment. This can be both a good and a bad thing, because there are details that are necessary and slow down the pacing and disturb the flow. A bit of work in that area can develop the experience for readers even further!
But it sounds very promising!! Like a fresh and published book, the idea is creative and unique, the groundwork is all done, and it just pulls you in for a deep dive. It's a story of adventure and I'm all for that! It really deserves a lot more attention for all the effort that went into it! Superb, well done to both of you!

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Interesting start!

The story is still at it's prime, so I can't say much on it. But El sounds very interesting already, overcoming all those difficulties by herself and all, she's a strong character. So far, she's all we've got, so I'm hoping for you to update and let us know about the love interest :)

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Gripping!

It has an awesome beginning that just gets you wanting to know more! The characters and family dynamics, how they come to play in their lives is also very interesting. I enjoyed your writing style, it was descriptive and fun! Dagon was also a thrilling character to read about, and hilarious too!
I'm enjoying it so far!

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CUTE!!

The main couple are very close, they quickly delve into an adorable relationship and they're just..goals! It's interesting to see different family dynamics and attitudes between the two and their different ways of life. I think that the author was successful in showing a lot of love and growth with the two characters. I'd say though, there are a few misspellings and the tenses go back and forth a lot, it disrupts the flow of the story a bit, so that's what you should mainly focus on to make it a better experience for your readers!! Good luck, I'm enjoying it so far!

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AMAZINGG!

I've read a lot of books, and I had to say, the amount of emotional involvement I had with this one is downright crazy! Like, I loved and seriously cared about all the characters, Even Zeus! The story itself is quite predictable at times, but I enjoyed how you worked through it. Bailey's relationship with Gavin was sweet and hot and just beautifully portrayed, although he seems too perfect at times, what would we do for a real-life Gavin, huh?
Anyway the past interloping with the present and them moving forward, those are all things that this book did great with! Plus all those sweet, steamy scenes! You've developed your characters really well! I really really loved this!

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WOW!

To be honest, I took my sweet time reading this. What I really really enjoyed about the book are the characters, the constant plot moving forward and all the magic and darkness that came with it! I can't tell you enough, but the writing style is beautiful! Very much like a traditional book, but still an awesome read! I would say though, since it's published here, it surprised me a bit, but I hope you can get this book, and the following (I'm hoping you've got more in store for us!) out to the world one day, since that looked like your scope with the writing style and all. Very much well done, I loved it!

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WOW!

To be honest, I took my sweet time reading this. What I really really enjoyed about the book are the characters, the constant plot moving forward and all the magic and darkness that came with it! I can't tell you enough, but the writing style is beautiful! Very much like a traditional book, but still an awesome read! I would say though, since it's published here, it surprised me a bit, but I hope you can get this book, and the following (I'm hoping you've got more in store for us!) out to the world one day, since that looked like your scope with the writing style and all. Very much well done, I loved it!

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VERY INTERESTING!

The story is supernatural, werewolf bonds and filled with a drama and mystery that I absolutely love! Accalia is a creature that is powerful yet mysterious, I like her! Even though I feel that they could have had more depth in their relationship (Taylor and Accalia). As a fellow writer, I'm here to support and provide feedback to help you improve! There is so much room for more in here! You can definitely start with the spelling and grammar, but also the description! Make a setting to paint a better picture! Apart from that, the plot was marvellous, and the characters well portrayed...WELL DONE!

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Quite Fascinating and Enjoyable!

The Princess is a well-built character and the whole plot is very interesting! There is fantasy and romance laced through the blurb, and the chapters and enjoyable to read! There is still much area for improvement though! I'm awaiting more :)

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OROGINAL!

The plot is exceptional, getting together through a small accident, it's very interesting! The family conflict and drama running through the plot is also mysterious and adds curiosity to the story. I feel that your writing improved immensely in this book, and I'm liking it so far!

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Fantastic!

It's short but sweet, what was heartbreaking at the beginning turned out to be sweet in the end. A happy ending! Although there were a lot of mistakes in the spelling and grammar's side, it was a breath of fresh air! I think you have a creative mind, keep writing :)

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Suspenseful and intriguing!

It was a brilliant read! The characters are well developed, each with their own scopes and ideas, the mystery is suffocating, it grabs you by the neck and hauls you right through the chapters. I haven't read a book so good in a long time! It kept me silently waiting for any clue to drop off the sky, so that I could pinpoint who was behind it all. It has nice descriptions ad cool dialogue. The story, the way it's written, the letters and journaling style is just so cool, it's beautiful! Well done, author! I'm sure to keep reading this till the very end :)

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A sexy read!

It's steamy, it's hot. Filled with sexual tension and so much more! If you're into romance with a little lust, this is the book for you! Beautifully written, the plot takes you by surprise at every turn. Well done!

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I can feel everything

The plot is so original the characters emotions and feelings clear to the bone. It shows so many issues with society. It's horrificly well written and down to the bone chilling. Some of the things make my skin crawl and as unethical as it is, it's an amazing read. I can clearly read the journal and the experiences and it's revolting but its so fascinating at the same time. We need more!! 🖤

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The lost heirs

Very intriguing and well written. Too much detail and slow paced but its building up! Keep writing ❤

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Showing you love

The protagonist and I both hate Valentine's. That's a similarity I don't find often (I'm a romantic at heart tho) I love your writing style and how you invision the characters. Really well written and I'm happy for Ivy ❤

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Blooming

The layout is pretty awesome and so is the protagonist. She's cute quirky and awesome. However the story line is a bit slow paced and needs more excitement to keep readers reading! Keep that in mind and you'll do even better hun ❤

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Chewing gum

The dystopian in this is really nice. I also like the smut but as a more reserved person I just don't find the thought of sex becoming an everyday thing very comfortable ..involving family at least. The plot is thought provoking of the future and I'm sure many would appreciate your writing, it's impressive! Keep it up hun

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Her possessive blackguard

I love how this is written and...the character oh my god! So intrigued. I like that there are things we can relate to with this characters and the relationship they are growing and building...physically and mentally. Really enjoying it!❤

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Low-key in love

It's recommended to all people who love to lose themselves in the romance and heart break and tragedy of someone else.
-writer san speaking💋

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